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Finally a writer who appreciates Haki. All the majority of anime and One Piece genres do not appreciate Haki and do not give him value. Finally someone who appreciates Haki, but in addition, I felt that it was a bad idea if he was a hero of the race of Solomon If he was a Saiyan hero, it would be a good idea, or a better idea, to add Nen from the Hunter X Hunter anime.
Interesting story but poorly written... The writing style and the bad grammar make it somewhat hard to have fun reading this. With an editor this might become a rather good story.
Bro this is my favourite, i liked the powel scale in the one piece verse of this fic its amazing. ive read too many ”cliche” one piece fanfictions but this one blew my mind with all the suprises i shed a couple tears with xebec and the duo
4 Stars ? I just wanted to read this to pass some time, so I had almost no expactations and after seeing the 4 stars I started to read. So the first thing is that it is so hard to read, because the paragraphs are to big. But this is still tolerate able. My problem is the "Cultivation" aspect. Splitting every marine rank in stages ? too many to remember them. Same with the mastery Low,Mid,High and Grandmaster aren't enough ? And also the mc who is strong enough to fight admirals after a few chapters. He's getting powers outta nowhere and even some that he shouldn't have like Rokushiki. Where ist the Character development ? I reached chapter 11 and the same thing happened 3 times. Attacking a Yonko and mc always fighting against all commanders. My recommendation is to read path to power its very similar and could be considered as an Upgrade.
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Great book overall but pretty difficult to read with everything being a text wall. So thats something to work on. Well thats all i wanted to say. Keep up the good work!! 👍👍
So i have started this story, and i am not sure if i am willing to put in time to read it. Mainly pointing towards the use of grammar and messy paragraphs all along since the get go. All i can see tho from the reviews, it's super overrated, grammar is leaning towards machine translations, even if it is not. just to put a perspective on it. Main character is quite a fresh thing, not what is usual for mc's to build on, i like the start of the story but. it's a major turn of with the grammar and how quick paced it is. No offence to author.
This is a good story but I must ask what happen to keido and big mom bc it seem they died and if they are who will be the empire in the new world?
I think this story has a lot of potential. Key points to look out for: 1) use of dialogue, think you could Make use of more dialogue. the entire story is written in Lincolns thoughts with sparse use of dialogue. 2) character development: The story is too focused on Physical development and has ignored much of lincolns mental development 3) world sEtting: the entire transition to rocks Pirates, the worlD government, strength levels are not too clear Even with the auxiliary chapter 4) Story pace: reading just the first few chapters, it Already the gives the feeling that the story will end in 10-15 chapters max. You want to make sure you have a modest goal in terms of how long this fanfic will be and pace yourself to achieve that goal
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Captain Usopp's was killed on the way to Laugh Tale and see his sweetest dream in the underworld, lol. Pitiful parody of Path to Power. So boooooooring.
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This is a good story but I must ask what happen to keido and big mom bc it seem they died and if they are who will be the empire in the new world?
It's quiet interested, in which not mention of the background of protagonist but start with rock pirates era as a son of whiteboard which is quite interesting and also the story devolopment is also quite good but the tier thing didn't made scence waiting for further updates.
too fast mate,the story develop too fast,just hope you could slow down the pace of the story,in just 3 chapter he got to admiral strength, it's too fastt
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You are writing a nice book as a fellow author I can tell that your story has very good potential keep writing and we will be always waiting for new releases
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Finally a writer who appreciates Haki. All the majority of anime and One Piece genres do not appreciate Haki and do not give him value. Finally someone who appreciates Haki, but in addition, I felt that it was a bad idea if he was a hero of the race of Solomon If he was a Saiyan hero, it would be a good idea, or a better idea, to add Nen from the Hunter X Hunter anime.
Interesting story but poorly written... The writing style and the bad grammar make it somewhat hard to have fun reading this. With an editor this might become a rather good story.
Bro this is my favourite, i liked the powel scale in the one piece verse of this fic its amazing. ive read too many ”cliche” one piece fanfictions but this one blew my mind with all the suprises i shed a couple tears with xebec and the duo
4 Stars ? I just wanted to read this to pass some time, so I had almost no expactations and after seeing the 4 stars I started to read. So the first thing is that it is so hard to read, because the paragraphs are to big. But this is still tolerate able. My problem is the "Cultivation" aspect. Splitting every marine rank in stages ? too many to remember them. Same with the mastery Low,Mid,High and Grandmaster aren't enough ? And also the mc who is strong enough to fight admirals after a few chapters. He's getting powers outta nowhere and even some that he shouldn't have like Rokushiki. Where ist the Character development ? I reached chapter 11 and the same thing happened 3 times. Attacking a Yonko and mc always fighting against all commanders. My recommendation is to read path to power its very similar and could be considered as an Upgrade.
Off brand Path to Power Iiiiiiiygggggggggffghtgddfvggfgggffffgggggggffffggffgffvggggggggfgfgghgdvhhfghfghhhhhhhhhhh
Great book overall but pretty difficult to read with everything being a text wall. So thats something to work on. Well thats all i wanted to say. Keep up the good work!! 👍👍
So i have started this story, and i am not sure if i am willing to put in time to read it. Mainly pointing towards the use of grammar and messy paragraphs all along since the get go. All i can see tho from the reviews, it's super overrated, grammar is leaning towards machine translations, even if it is not. just to put a perspective on it. Main character is quite a fresh thing, not what is usual for mc's to build on, i like the start of the story but. it's a major turn of with the grammar and how quick paced it is. No offence to author.
This is a good story but I must ask what happen to keido and big mom bc it seem they died and if they are who will be the empire in the new world?
I think this story has a lot of potential. Key points to look out for: 1) use of dialogue, think you could Make use of more dialogue. the entire story is written in Lincolns thoughts with sparse use of dialogue. 2) character development: The story is too focused on Physical development and has ignored much of lincolns mental development 3) world sEtting: the entire transition to rocks Pirates, the worlD government, strength levels are not too clear Even with the auxiliary chapter 4) Story pace: reading just the first few chapters, it Already the gives the feeling that the story will end in 10-15 chapters max. You want to make sure you have a modest goal in terms of how long this fanfic will be and pace yourself to achieve that goal
Great story. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
More chapter please ////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
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Captain Usopp's was killed on the way to Laugh Tale and see his sweetest dream in the underworld, lol. Pitiful parody of Path to Power. So boooooooring.
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This is a good story but I must ask what happen to keido and big mom bc it seem they died and if they are who will be the empire in the new world?
It's quiet interested, in which not mention of the background of protagonist but start with rock pirates era as a son of whiteboard which is quite interesting and also the story devolopment is also quite good but the tier thing didn't made scence waiting for further updates.
too fast mate,the story develop too fast,just hope you could slow down the pace of the story,in just 3 chapter he got to admiral strength, it's too fastt
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You are writing a nice book as a fellow author I can tell that your story has very good potential keep writing and we will be always waiting for new releases
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