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Dylanstan

I have read a lot of Kingdom building novels recently and this one of the best books I’ve read so far and it needs be more popular than it is now its great story so far and i am looking forward for more chapters

3yr
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Dylanstan

This is my second review I know but this a very good novel and is progressing with a steady pace have good character buildIng and i don’t want it to be dropped sO just giving a little push with reviews and sTones

3yr
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dahshooter

when are you done with editing? youre novel is nice so would love more charpters

1yr
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raizem12

I honestly really like this novel but unfortunately I'm going to have to stop reading it because I don't know English and it seems from chapter 39 onwards it's no longer possible to translate the book with the standard chrome translation and I don't have time in my day to keep typing chapter by chapter that I want to read soon I'm very sad to have to stop reading this book

2yr
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James_carl

This is the most slowest kingdombuilding novel i have ever read. I stopped at chapter 36 though, nothing made me interested. It was not bad and not really too good. The one's that annoy me is his servants and mother, the servants act like an oldfriend while the mother is really getting overboard sometimes. I did not see much progress in his kingdombuilding.

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2yr
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Za_Warudo_3385

Parei no capítulo 12 porque ele parece uma criança e não um homem, eu sei que tem um motivo plausível, mas pra mim não parece reencarnação e o passado só a parece uma justificativa para o sistema, mas eu ficaria alegre se alguém me falasse qual capítulo ele recupera toda a memória e fica adulta.

2yr
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nicck1223

I had to stop at chap 18 or something, I could not get past a key point in the story. Your telling me that there is swords but not short sword or daggers!!! Look people are not stupid, they can take a consept like a sword and make it smaller for people, they would even save metal. From a logical point of view your not giving people enough credit. Rest of the story was fine, could have explained the contept of shadow manipulation not being magic a little bit more as you told it in a non convincing manner.

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2yr
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Afakasi
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Man I really tried to like this novel, I read 20 chapters of this a few months ago and barely reread till chapter 50 and I just can’t. I feel like this is blacksmith type of novel, nothing to do with a prince. Chapters are nice and long but the story progresses so slow, which I think is something terrbile for kingdom building novels unless you want 1000 chapters. Like you aren’t going to build an empire at this pace. Not to mention I barely know anything about what he’s supposed to be ruling over. I don’t know the population or anything that comes to building a kingdom. Unless he’s ambitious at a young age, why would you spend all this time when he’s doing nothing. You can just time-skip to when he’s 16 and have points and when he reminisces about when he does a certain something. How he met Tia or whatever. Then again, I really only like kingdom building novels so when you have that tag, I except kingdom building at least somewhere near chap 15 - 20. I’m near 50, nothings happening and he’s still a child.

2yr
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Voidz_Zero

the writing quality of this pretty good story development is slow but the author said it was slow so thats excluded character design... its something alright but not in the good way i'll give an example the mc ''servants'' treat their supposed ''master'' like their old friend which is stupid since their supposed to be servants and there's this one maid who i wish just offs's herself because my god she's annoying long story short read this book if your into mc that get pushed around like bit$ch btw author u should add a tag saying beta mc

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2yr
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Divine_univers

honestly this story for me is more of a personal preference thing, as I absolutely despise stories that have the mc being fanned out at an extremely young age, like the amount of stuff he's doing at like what the age of 4? is so unrealistic regardless of having a system which by the way sucks so far. Also side characters just feel weird so far due to how much they expect of him despite how young he is. and seeing the disappointed reactions of side characters over things the mc can't control is off putting, lastly the kingdom building and world building has been really lack luster, as the servants said they would set up the province for their young master for when he's older yet so far 200 chapters in it feels like zero progress has been made at least to me. Besides that the writing quality itself is above average and the plot itself is a good concept just doesn't feel well executed

2yr
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Reiju137

👍👍👍👍👍

2yr
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Poet_Legion

this novel is pretty good and so far the only thing I can say that in my opinion is a turn-off is how bad the grammar is in the unedited chapters. the first 30 chapters are pretty good because the author went back through and jiri edited them so they read pretty well however at least for me I'm not going to continue reading this book until her there are more edited chapters for the sole reason that I kind of can't stick through it because of the grammar. But that's just it it's only the language that's an issue there is no problem with the story and the characters are very well written, and there's a lot of world background. I highly recommend this book and I'm probably going to be pumping it with some power stones and some golden tickets if I have any because the other stories I read a pretty much top novels and this one seems to be flying under a lot of people's radar so good work author keep it up please keep editing the beginning chapters though I don't know if it gets any better I just know that I stopped reading I think right before I went premium just because I couldn't really bear with it when it came to the quality

2yr
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3yr
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barlow_wilson80

Hey! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email kerawood.review*@*gmail.com  (delete *) We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction). A brief introduction along with a few samples or links will be appreciated when reaching out. You might be our next top writer!

3yr
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Jati_Pradja

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3yr
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Kriegsman_Alex

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3yr
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3yr
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Pragmatico

Kinda confused about the system and how it functions. He keeps getting things but the system never leveled up so far. He also hasnt done any kimgdom building yet and im a good 20 chapters in. A lot of grammar errors from big to small mistakes like using he and not his. The world doesnt have magic anymore according to Val but yet they ise magic for the shadow magic. He also crafted a dagger but now cant craft anything and is forced to buy a new skill that magically unlocked for him to use out of no where

3yr
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Vins12
LV 14 Badge

i read the plot and it look interesting i wish this will give a good novel for a long time looking for one and please don’t make it like the other ones that you need to unlock every chapter

3yr
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PhantomMedjay

Tell me what you think everyone! I know there is some grammatical issues that I will get around to fixing. Honestly did not think I would continue to write this till now. So far I am loving it and I have some bold plans for our hero Benedict Khadraazil. Btw I am thinking of a middle name, what do you guys think? Comment below if you have any cool suggestions and in general how you feel about the story so far.

3yr
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Dylanstan

I have read a lot of Kingdom building novels recently and this one of the best books I’ve read so far and it needs be more popular than it is now its great story so far and i am looking forward for more chapters

3yr
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Dylanstan

This is my second review I know but this a very good novel and is progressing with a steady pace have good character buildIng and i don’t want it to be dropped sO just giving a little push with reviews and sTones

3yr
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dahshooter

when are you done with editing? youre novel is nice so would love more charpters

1yr
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raizem12

I honestly really like this novel but unfortunately I'm going to have to stop reading it because I don't know English and it seems from chapter 39 onwards it's no longer possible to translate the book with the standard chrome translation and I don't have time in my day to keep typing chapter by chapter that I want to read soon I'm very sad to have to stop reading this book

2yr
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James_carl

This is the most slowest kingdombuilding novel i have ever read. I stopped at chapter 36 though, nothing made me interested. It was not bad and not really too good. The one's that annoy me is his servants and mother, the servants act like an oldfriend while the mother is really getting overboard sometimes. I did not see much progress in his kingdombuilding.

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2yr
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Za_Warudo_3385

Parei no capítulo 12 porque ele parece uma criança e não um homem, eu sei que tem um motivo plausível, mas pra mim não parece reencarnação e o passado só a parece uma justificativa para o sistema, mas eu ficaria alegre se alguém me falasse qual capítulo ele recupera toda a memória e fica adulta.

2yr
Voir 1 Réponses
nicck1223

I had to stop at chap 18 or something, I could not get past a key point in the story. Your telling me that there is swords but not short sword or daggers!!! Look people are not stupid, they can take a consept like a sword and make it smaller for people, they would even save metal. From a logical point of view your not giving people enough credit. Rest of the story was fine, could have explained the contept of shadow manipulation not being magic a little bit more as you told it in a non convincing manner.

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2yr
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Afakasi
LV 15 Badge

Man I really tried to like this novel, I read 20 chapters of this a few months ago and barely reread till chapter 50 and I just can’t. I feel like this is blacksmith type of novel, nothing to do with a prince. Chapters are nice and long but the story progresses so slow, which I think is something terrbile for kingdom building novels unless you want 1000 chapters. Like you aren’t going to build an empire at this pace. Not to mention I barely know anything about what he’s supposed to be ruling over. I don’t know the population or anything that comes to building a kingdom. Unless he’s ambitious at a young age, why would you spend all this time when he’s doing nothing. You can just time-skip to when he’s 16 and have points and when he reminisces about when he does a certain something. How he met Tia or whatever. Then again, I really only like kingdom building novels so when you have that tag, I except kingdom building at least somewhere near chap 15 - 20. I’m near 50, nothings happening and he’s still a child.

2yr
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Voidz_Zero

the writing quality of this pretty good story development is slow but the author said it was slow so thats excluded character design... its something alright but not in the good way i'll give an example the mc ''servants'' treat their supposed ''master'' like their old friend which is stupid since their supposed to be servants and there's this one maid who i wish just offs's herself because my god she's annoying long story short read this book if your into mc that get pushed around like bit$ch btw author u should add a tag saying beta mc

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2yr
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Divine_univers

honestly this story for me is more of a personal preference thing, as I absolutely despise stories that have the mc being fanned out at an extremely young age, like the amount of stuff he's doing at like what the age of 4? is so unrealistic regardless of having a system which by the way sucks so far. Also side characters just feel weird so far due to how much they expect of him despite how young he is. and seeing the disappointed reactions of side characters over things the mc can't control is off putting, lastly the kingdom building and world building has been really lack luster, as the servants said they would set up the province for their young master for when he's older yet so far 200 chapters in it feels like zero progress has been made at least to me. Besides that the writing quality itself is above average and the plot itself is a good concept just doesn't feel well executed

2yr
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Reiju137

👍👍👍👍👍

2yr
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Poet_Legion

this novel is pretty good and so far the only thing I can say that in my opinion is a turn-off is how bad the grammar is in the unedited chapters. the first 30 chapters are pretty good because the author went back through and jiri edited them so they read pretty well however at least for me I'm not going to continue reading this book until her there are more edited chapters for the sole reason that I kind of can't stick through it because of the grammar. But that's just it it's only the language that's an issue there is no problem with the story and the characters are very well written, and there's a lot of world background. I highly recommend this book and I'm probably going to be pumping it with some power stones and some golden tickets if I have any because the other stories I read a pretty much top novels and this one seems to be flying under a lot of people's radar so good work author keep it up please keep editing the beginning chapters though I don't know if it gets any better I just know that I stopped reading I think right before I went premium just because I couldn't really bear with it when it came to the quality

2yr
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Thee_AngryBird

error restart the router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router and modem and router

3yr
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barlow_wilson80

Hey! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email kerawood.review*@*gmail.com  (delete *) We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction). A brief introduction along with a few samples or links will be appreciated when reaching out. You might be our next top writer!

3yr
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3yr
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Kriegsman_Alex

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3yr
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3yr
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Pragmatico

Kinda confused about the system and how it functions. He keeps getting things but the system never leveled up so far. He also hasnt done any kimgdom building yet and im a good 20 chapters in. A lot of grammar errors from big to small mistakes like using he and not his. The world doesnt have magic anymore according to Val but yet they ise magic for the shadow magic. He also crafted a dagger but now cant craft anything and is forced to buy a new skill that magically unlocked for him to use out of no where

3yr
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Vins12
LV 14 Badge

i read the plot and it look interesting i wish this will give a good novel for a long time looking for one and please don’t make it like the other ones that you need to unlock every chapter

3yr
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PhantomMedjay

Tell me what you think everyone! I know there is some grammatical issues that I will get around to fixing. Honestly did not think I would continue to write this till now. So far I am loving it and I have some bold plans for our hero Benedict Khadraazil. Btw I am thinking of a middle name, what do you guys think? Comment below if you have any cool suggestions and in general how you feel about the story so far.

3yr
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