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Just to let anyone reading this know. The author has locked this story behind a paywall through subscribestar. Don’t know what happened but it’s pretty weird to not say almost nothing except for some obscure comments in the comment section about it with no actual announcement. It’s still a good read and if you wanna go pay for it go ahead. No idea if it’s still being updated so be warned about it.
Writing quality is good. I didn't really notice any errors. I enjoyed this story greatly because the MC does things i haven't read in other Naruto fics for his path to power. The system aspect is very minimal and more just a status thing to check his progress than actually affecting him. Characters are well written, they seem like their canon counterpart, and i enjoyed how some characters change and grow overtime through their experience with the MC affecting the story.
Honestly, I don't have or need to have much to say, this story is incredible, from beginning to end, I was reading about 3 stories at the same time before this one, only now will I be able to read them.
Very good job you are talented at this please continue and never drop it please make a ino one of the harem and to make a little drama with sakura to fight over the MC. its will be very good to watch harems always good
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the more you go , the thirstier the mc gets. dont get me wrong im a proper degen and all but the beginning of the story was so good when the perviness was only a slight part of his character but now that is all he talks about and the way he talks is so forced it meses with otherwise a great story. disappointing that this could be a reason i drop.
Great story updates slightly slow but other than that a masterpiece I think it’s one of my top ten favourite stories on web novel and I’m great full I found it writing quality and all that good stuff is up there
I like it, the MC is funny to read and flirts a lot, he also doesn't beat around the bush but is very direct. Some people might not like it, but I find it very entertaining so far and have often had to smile. I HOPE it continues and is not on hiatus. Recommended
Funny yet adventurous with great action and a crazy and interesting protagonist. Please continue to make amazing works I appreciate your hard work
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First off this novel is awesome and its a breath of fresh air into some of these overused tropes seen everywhere. It is a good read for the first 50ish chapters, BUT it significantly goes downhill after that. It feels like the author is adding any bullshit powerup he can think of to make the MC ridiculously OP. The other glaring issue is the MC being too much of a Chad. It was extremely funny to read in the beginning but it hurts the longevity of the novel because it gets incredibly annoying after a while. (ultimately the reason I dropped it) Other than those 2 issues it was a good read.
bro, your works are incredible, never let anyone tell you otherwise, this naruto story and konosuba's were one of the best works I've ever read in my entire life, you're incredible
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jordiono is my role model this is one of the best naruto stories aside the stuff with kurenai its his story he can do whatever he wants so this is a great story a five star review from me
Excelente novela. Mas actualizaciones por favor. Cuando va a tener más amantes como Karin Uzumakio la ninja de cristal. Cuando va a usar el Sharingan de shisui en danzo, konan o tsunade?
Seguid con la historia por favor 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏
Good stuff. Pls continue. Don't stop bruh. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍❤️👍❤️❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️❤️👍❤️❤️👍❤️👍❤️❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️❤️👍😘👍❤️👍❤️👍😘👍😘👍😘❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍
I freaking love this story, especially the mc and the 3 Tails relationship. lol, just bros
Why do i feel like author search the internet for cool looking stuff and just copy paste for the mc
The fanfic offers a refreshing start with its descriptive writing, which is both easy to read and infused with a unique personality. The narrative quickly distinguishes itself from most others in the genre, drawing readers in with its vivid imagery and engaging prose. The inclusion of a "System" is handled with a delicate touch, providing a numerical gauge of the main character's strength without overwhelming the story. This lightweight approach keeps the focus on the character's journey rather than getting bogged down in mechanics. The initial arc is nothing short of captivating. It showcases the main character's tenacity and strategic thinking as he navigates the challenges of being a low-ranked Genin. This period of intense effort and risk-taking lays a solid foundation for his growth, making his subsequent rise in power both believable and rewarding. The second arc serves as a powerful motivator, setting the stage for even greater achievements in the third arc. However, the story's momentum falters dramatically during the Chunin Exams. This arc, which dominates nearly half of the narrative, undermines the main character's likability, dilutes the side characters' development, and disrupts the pacing. Initially, the main character's personality is a highlight of the story. His modest arrogance and relentless work ethic make him relatable and compelling. The mantra of "grind" becomes a defining trait, adding depth to both the character and the plot. Yet, as he gains more power, his arrogance spirals out of control, and his condescension towards others becomes grating. The anticipated humbling moment, where his flaws are addressed and his character matures, never arrives. Instead, he remains insufferably arrogant despite his relatively modest achievements on a grand scale. The side-cast is introduced with commendable depth and originality, deviating from typical fanfic portrayals without straying out of character. This well-rounded characterization, coupled with sharp dialogue, enriches the interactions between the main character and others. These interactions feel genuine, giving the impression that the side characters have lives and motivations of their own. Sadly, the Chunin Exams reduce these vibrant characters to mere spectators, stripping away their earlier complexity and relegating them to passive roles. The battles are another early strength of the story. They are fluid, well-structured, and showcase creative uses of jutsu, particularly the main character's signature techniques. However, the Chunin Exams mark a turning point where the main character's fights become predictably one-sided and devoid of tension. His overpowered nature, coupled with narrative constraints that prevent him from acting out fully, leads to a series of monotonous and uninspiring conflicts. A significant downside, present from the beginning but worsening over time, is the main character's interactions with female characters. His pervasive flirting and vulgar descriptions of their bodies quickly become tiresome. This behavior escalates into outright sexual harassment, eroding the personalities of the women in the story. Additionally, his antagonism towards every male character further detracts from his supposed hard-working mentality, making him appear more like a lust-driven predator than a dedicated ninja. This flaw, like his arrogance, is never resolved. Overall, the fanfic starts strong with a well-thought-out plot and engaging characters, but it takes an abysmal dive during the Chunin Exams arc. This pivotal section of the story introduces a host of flaws that gradually erode its initial charm, leaving an empty husk of what once held great promise. The best approach to reading this is to enjoy it up to the beginning of the Chunin Exam Arc and then imagine it concludes there. It's a disappointing turn of events, as the author initially displayed a rare talent for fanfic writing, only to let it be marred by poor execution in later chapters.
I honestly love this story. There aren't that many Naruto System stories(that I know of.), that even come close to the awesomeness that this one has. And the fact that it's not a random person reincarnated as Naruto, or Naruto themself, is already a major plus. The system doesn't determine the MC's life at all unlike the rest of the system stories(which kinda gets old after a while.), this one has diversity, and doesn't make the MC immediately overpowered like the others do. All in all, I thank you from the bottom of my heart for creating a truly enjoyable story.
Only thing dragging this story back is update rate :/ even on pa—-teron there are no advance chapter or updates Snice April 28 :/ this sucks so much such a good story :/
best naruto fanfic, I'm on chapter 191 and I'm going to wait for the author-sama to update until 300 to read it, I highly recommend the fanfic, it's perfect
It ain't about MC waking up in a standard genin body.... it's about the standard genin body reviving again and gaining access to information about his world from modern MC's memory...nothing else. like basically the system took modern MC's soul to revive the dead genin and giving him information about the future from the first (modern)MC's memory about the Naruto anime. so yeah... just introduced the first MC, to throw him aside and introduce the dead genin as the MC instead xDD
Just to let anyone reading this know. The author has locked this story behind a paywall through subscribestar. Don’t know what happened but it’s pretty weird to not say almost nothing except for some obscure comments in the comment section about it with no actual announcement. It’s still a good read and if you wanna go pay for it go ahead. No idea if it’s still being updated so be warned about it.
Writing quality is good. I didn't really notice any errors. I enjoyed this story greatly because the MC does things i haven't read in other Naruto fics for his path to power. The system aspect is very minimal and more just a status thing to check his progress than actually affecting him. Characters are well written, they seem like their canon counterpart, and i enjoyed how some characters change and grow overtime through their experience with the MC affecting the story.
Honestly, I don't have or need to have much to say, this story is incredible, from beginning to end, I was reading about 3 stories at the same time before this one, only now will I be able to read them.
Very good job you are talented at this please continue and never drop it please make a ino one of the harem and to make a little drama with sakura to fight over the MC. its will be very good to watch harems always good
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the more you go , the thirstier the mc gets. dont get me wrong im a proper degen and all but the beginning of the story was so good when the perviness was only a slight part of his character but now that is all he talks about and the way he talks is so forced it meses with otherwise a great story. disappointing that this could be a reason i drop.
Great story updates slightly slow but other than that a masterpiece I think it’s one of my top ten favourite stories on web novel and I’m great full I found it writing quality and all that good stuff is up there
I like it, the MC is funny to read and flirts a lot, he also doesn't beat around the bush but is very direct. Some people might not like it, but I find it very entertaining so far and have often had to smile. I HOPE it continues and is not on hiatus. Recommended
Funny yet adventurous with great action and a crazy and interesting protagonist. Please continue to make amazing works I appreciate your hard work
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First off this novel is awesome and its a breath of fresh air into some of these overused tropes seen everywhere. It is a good read for the first 50ish chapters, BUT it significantly goes downhill after that. It feels like the author is adding any bullshit powerup he can think of to make the MC ridiculously OP. The other glaring issue is the MC being too much of a Chad. It was extremely funny to read in the beginning but it hurts the longevity of the novel because it gets incredibly annoying after a while. (ultimately the reason I dropped it) Other than those 2 issues it was a good read.
bro, your works are incredible, never let anyone tell you otherwise, this naruto story and konosuba's were one of the best works I've ever read in my entire life, you're incredible
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jordiono is my role model this is one of the best naruto stories aside the stuff with kurenai its his story he can do whatever he wants so this is a great story a five star review from me
Excelente novela. Mas actualizaciones por favor. Cuando va a tener más amantes como Karin Uzumakio la ninja de cristal. Cuando va a usar el Sharingan de shisui en danzo, konan o tsunade?
Seguid con la historia por favor 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏
Good stuff. Pls continue. Don't stop bruh. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍❤️👍❤️❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️❤️👍❤️❤️👍❤️👍❤️❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️❤️👍😘👍❤️👍❤️👍😘👍😘👍😘❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍❤️👍
I freaking love this story, especially the mc and the 3 Tails relationship. lol, just bros
Why do i feel like author search the internet for cool looking stuff and just copy paste for the mc
The fanfic offers a refreshing start with its descriptive writing, which is both easy to read and infused with a unique personality. The narrative quickly distinguishes itself from most others in the genre, drawing readers in with its vivid imagery and engaging prose. The inclusion of a "System" is handled with a delicate touch, providing a numerical gauge of the main character's strength without overwhelming the story. This lightweight approach keeps the focus on the character's journey rather than getting bogged down in mechanics. The initial arc is nothing short of captivating. It showcases the main character's tenacity and strategic thinking as he navigates the challenges of being a low-ranked Genin. This period of intense effort and risk-taking lays a solid foundation for his growth, making his subsequent rise in power both believable and rewarding. The second arc serves as a powerful motivator, setting the stage for even greater achievements in the third arc. However, the story's momentum falters dramatically during the Chunin Exams. This arc, which dominates nearly half of the narrative, undermines the main character's likability, dilutes the side characters' development, and disrupts the pacing. Initially, the main character's personality is a highlight of the story. His modest arrogance and relentless work ethic make him relatable and compelling. The mantra of "grind" becomes a defining trait, adding depth to both the character and the plot. Yet, as he gains more power, his arrogance spirals out of control, and his condescension towards others becomes grating. The anticipated humbling moment, where his flaws are addressed and his character matures, never arrives. Instead, he remains insufferably arrogant despite his relatively modest achievements on a grand scale. The side-cast is introduced with commendable depth and originality, deviating from typical fanfic portrayals without straying out of character. This well-rounded characterization, coupled with sharp dialogue, enriches the interactions between the main character and others. These interactions feel genuine, giving the impression that the side characters have lives and motivations of their own. Sadly, the Chunin Exams reduce these vibrant characters to mere spectators, stripping away their earlier complexity and relegating them to passive roles. The battles are another early strength of the story. They are fluid, well-structured, and showcase creative uses of jutsu, particularly the main character's signature techniques. However, the Chunin Exams mark a turning point where the main character's fights become predictably one-sided and devoid of tension. His overpowered nature, coupled with narrative constraints that prevent him from acting out fully, leads to a series of monotonous and uninspiring conflicts. A significant downside, present from the beginning but worsening over time, is the main character's interactions with female characters. His pervasive flirting and vulgar descriptions of their bodies quickly become tiresome. This behavior escalates into outright sexual harassment, eroding the personalities of the women in the story. Additionally, his antagonism towards every male character further detracts from his supposed hard-working mentality, making him appear more like a lust-driven predator than a dedicated ninja. This flaw, like his arrogance, is never resolved. Overall, the fanfic starts strong with a well-thought-out plot and engaging characters, but it takes an abysmal dive during the Chunin Exams arc. This pivotal section of the story introduces a host of flaws that gradually erode its initial charm, leaving an empty husk of what once held great promise. The best approach to reading this is to enjoy it up to the beginning of the Chunin Exam Arc and then imagine it concludes there. It's a disappointing turn of events, as the author initially displayed a rare talent for fanfic writing, only to let it be marred by poor execution in later chapters.
I honestly love this story. There aren't that many Naruto System stories(that I know of.), that even come close to the awesomeness that this one has. And the fact that it's not a random person reincarnated as Naruto, or Naruto themself, is already a major plus. The system doesn't determine the MC's life at all unlike the rest of the system stories(which kinda gets old after a while.), this one has diversity, and doesn't make the MC immediately overpowered like the others do. All in all, I thank you from the bottom of my heart for creating a truly enjoyable story.
Only thing dragging this story back is update rate :/ even on pa—-teron there are no advance chapter or updates Snice April 28 :/ this sucks so much such a good story :/
best naruto fanfic, I'm on chapter 191 and I'm going to wait for the author-sama to update until 300 to read it, I highly recommend the fanfic, it's perfect
It ain't about MC waking up in a standard genin body.... it's about the standard genin body reviving again and gaining access to information about his world from modern MC's memory...nothing else. like basically the system took modern MC's soul to revive the dead genin and giving him information about the future from the first (modern)MC's memory about the Naruto anime. so yeah... just introduced the first MC, to throw him aside and introduce the dead genin as the MC instead xDD