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REALLY LOVE THE BOOK!!! THE POWERS ARE AWESOME PLOT IS AMAZING!!! PLIZZZ DON'T DROP NEED MORE PLIZZZ UPDATE!!! .......................................
If you want to read a Really good, like Really Really Good Written one-piece fanfiction than consider this fanfic "one-piece this bites" just search it up using that name and I promise you it will blow your sock off It, not an op mc, not a system, not a genius fighter, or anything. It about a guy that wishes to be in One piece than he appears in one piece but with his body like a normal body of a normal person on Earth which is super weak compare to the normal body of any person on One Piece, like one hit from Nami would knock him out for about Five minutes I don't know how to actually make a better synopsis than what is above but just give it a chance and read it, "one-piece this bites" will 100% not disappoint you
quite interesting to read, when dear Strawhat arrives will they be comrades or enemies ? Rival will be good, but they will be too strong to be proper rival lol
This is probably one of my favourite novels and I cannot wait for more which is surprising because 9 out of 10 of the novels and fan fictions I read, I would drop them nearly straight away. So overall I think it is a great story with lots of potential.
I have dropped this novel like 3 times there are just so many things that piss me off to no end in this novel. The ROB scene was painful, the wishes were questionable, the system contains a store that does not understand the concept of balance, the MC makes poor choices consistently. Despite the starting setting having potential for a good introduction arc, the author does nothing with it, despite the island being a pirate paradise the MC runs into no issues, despite the initial state of the MC's new body it doesn't tie into any interesting plot or even have any implications. The MC is given stupidly powerful abilities at the very get-go for doing absolutely nothing, such as the custom devil fruit and the bloodline selection token. The MC is given stupidly vast amounts of Exp for missions that really don't deserve that much reward effectively destroying any interesting plot or adversity the MC might have faced while still being weak. The System is always making jarring and irritating comments to make it relevant and it just pisses me off, especially when the author tries his hand at some generic isekai humour and fails miserably only making his attempts cringe. So, all in all, I am failing to comprehend its high rating. tbh
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Keep up the good work bro... i like the story and how the characters works.. and the your work is so clean and i like how the crew works... others are original... but still ok... and you should put Hiten-Mitsurugi to the swordsman and some modern gun to your sniper in the crew.. that would be awsome... i think thats all
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Just one question........................................................................................................................... Is he an anti hero?
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Thanks for the chapter, the story is progressing smoothly. Looking forward to more interaction with the crew once they reunite. The story so far is very interesting and looking forward to the MC accomplishing a few more hidden quest that can continue to boost his strength.
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The story is great the characters need more time to see their development. But personally I'm not a big fan of super fast paced story like this. But it is a great story just not for me.
The grammar is good, it is not perfect but it is not bad either, the problem with the story is the MC, it seems that he thinks with his toes, whenever he has to choose something he makes an effort to choose the worst possible option, for example when he transmigrates he can choose the timeline, but he chooses to transmigrate only 3 years before luffy begins his journey, and above being 16 years old, completely wasting his desire that makes his training 10x more effective, the mc is too silly, And above it seems that at the rate the thing is going the mc is going to be a giant like whitebeard, although many say that in one piece it is normal I do not like it, zoro and sanji are in 180 cm and they are fine, it is not necessary to do it a giant monster.
Has the potential to become one one the best OP fics Not to op yet op mc Great ocs And good grammar........................m140 characters
I don't have any problems with the characters but the leveling system & power ups are a bit too much ... Mc's first goal was adventure but somehow he became obsessed with pirate king thing .. Btw the system is giving free xp with every event at this rate I think by the time mc reaches new world he would already be kaido or whitebeard level at that point there will be no point adventure the story will turn into level grinding... & by the time luffy will leave for the sea we will already have a new pirate king because luffy has 2 more years to leave his island at that time I don't see any point in having marinford arc
It got nice story which got action how a adventure story should be and it shows how difficult for a person to be successful and ....it's got good action scenes and supernatural powers
As any cultured author I have mastered the ‘Dao of Shamelessness’ thus I shall reward myself with a 5 star review. Overall it will be a journey of an OC MC with his crew venturing through the seas of One Piece to become the next Pirate King, simple. I intend to give my OC crew members a decent background and personality, alongside a goal, I have read many fan fics that just introduced an OC but we barely know anything about them. They just blindly follow 'just cuz'. Other than that, it is my first book, I appreciate constructive reviews but I will remove troll reviews. Thanks for reading!
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Bagus lah...aku paling suka kalau MC gk ikut sama Luffy...terus bebas cerita...karena itu...fanfic GK harus mirip kanon one piece..sejauh ini udah bagus...sesuai pemikiran penulis fanfic sendiri..
REALLY LOVE THE BOOK!!! THE POWERS ARE AWESOME PLOT IS AMAZING!!! PLIZZZ DON'T DROP NEED MORE PLIZZZ UPDATE!!! .......................................
If you want to read a Really good, like Really Really Good Written one-piece fanfiction than consider this fanfic "one-piece this bites" just search it up using that name and I promise you it will blow your sock off It, not an op mc, not a system, not a genius fighter, or anything. It about a guy that wishes to be in One piece than he appears in one piece but with his body like a normal body of a normal person on Earth which is super weak compare to the normal body of any person on One Piece, like one hit from Nami would knock him out for about Five minutes I don't know how to actually make a better synopsis than what is above but just give it a chance and read it, "one-piece this bites" will 100% not disappoint you
quite interesting to read, when dear Strawhat arrives will they be comrades or enemies ? Rival will be good, but they will be too strong to be proper rival lol
This is probably one of my favourite novels and I cannot wait for more which is surprising because 9 out of 10 of the novels and fan fictions I read, I would drop them nearly straight away. So overall I think it is a great story with lots of potential.
I have dropped this novel like 3 times there are just so many things that piss me off to no end in this novel. The ROB scene was painful, the wishes were questionable, the system contains a store that does not understand the concept of balance, the MC makes poor choices consistently. Despite the starting setting having potential for a good introduction arc, the author does nothing with it, despite the island being a pirate paradise the MC runs into no issues, despite the initial state of the MC's new body it doesn't tie into any interesting plot or even have any implications. The MC is given stupidly powerful abilities at the very get-go for doing absolutely nothing, such as the custom devil fruit and the bloodline selection token. The MC is given stupidly vast amounts of Exp for missions that really don't deserve that much reward effectively destroying any interesting plot or adversity the MC might have faced while still being weak. The System is always making jarring and irritating comments to make it relevant and it just pisses me off, especially when the author tries his hand at some generic isekai humour and fails miserably only making his attempts cringe. So, all in all, I am failing to comprehend its high rating. tbh
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Keep up the good work bro... i like the story and how the characters works.. and the your work is so clean and i like how the crew works... others are original... but still ok... and you should put Hiten-Mitsurugi to the swordsman and some modern gun to your sniper in the crew.. that would be awsome... i think thats all
good xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx xxx
Just one question........................................................................................................................... Is he an anti hero?
WE WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!WE WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!WE WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!WE WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!WE WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!WE WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!WE WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!WE WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!Reeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!
Thanks for the chapter, the story is progressing smoothly. Looking forward to more interaction with the crew once they reunite. The story so far is very interesting and looking forward to the MC accomplishing a few more hidden quest that can continue to boost his strength.
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The story is great the characters need more time to see their development. But personally I'm not a big fan of super fast paced story like this. But it is a great story just not for me.
The grammar is good, it is not perfect but it is not bad either, the problem with the story is the MC, it seems that he thinks with his toes, whenever he has to choose something he makes an effort to choose the worst possible option, for example when he transmigrates he can choose the timeline, but he chooses to transmigrate only 3 years before luffy begins his journey, and above being 16 years old, completely wasting his desire that makes his training 10x more effective, the mc is too silly, And above it seems that at the rate the thing is going the mc is going to be a giant like whitebeard, although many say that in one piece it is normal I do not like it, zoro and sanji are in 180 cm and they are fine, it is not necessary to do it a giant monster.
Has the potential to become one one the best OP fics Not to op yet op mc Great ocs And good grammar........................m140 characters
I don't have any problems with the characters but the leveling system & power ups are a bit too much ... Mc's first goal was adventure but somehow he became obsessed with pirate king thing .. Btw the system is giving free xp with every event at this rate I think by the time mc reaches new world he would already be kaido or whitebeard level at that point there will be no point adventure the story will turn into level grinding... & by the time luffy will leave for the sea we will already have a new pirate king because luffy has 2 more years to leave his island at that time I don't see any point in having marinford arc
It got nice story which got action how a adventure story should be and it shows how difficult for a person to be successful and ....it's got good action scenes and supernatural powers
As any cultured author I have mastered the ‘Dao of Shamelessness’ thus I shall reward myself with a 5 star review. Overall it will be a journey of an OC MC with his crew venturing through the seas of One Piece to become the next Pirate King, simple. I intend to give my OC crew members a decent background and personality, alongside a goal, I have read many fan fics that just introduced an OC but we barely know anything about them. They just blindly follow 'just cuz'. Other than that, it is my first book, I appreciate constructive reviews but I will remove troll reviews. Thanks for reading!