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pretty good story. although it would be better if you used grammarly or something to fix your writing since it's really hard to read sometimes
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GOOD BUUTTTT COULD BE GREAT PLEASE USE GRAMMERLY IT WOULD IMPROVE THE STORY IMMENSELY BUT OTHER THAN THAT THIS IS THE BEST DANNY PHANTOM FF I HAVE READ...........
This story at first glance seemed like a good idea but then I saw Harem tag and just knew that this story will disappoint but still tried reading it and then by every paragraph my motivation to read it got lower and then the moment author wrote "Betty blushes" I dropped. this is for people who like dumb and low IQ novels
please continue to write this work, very good, an MC who creates his own organization, recruits people and an author who creates new characters instead of simply copying existing ones in the universe, even if it is a fanfic this should not negate the creative creativity
This is a good piece of work and should be read if interested in something new. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍
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🙄 Tia May......😉😉😉😉 Natasha.. Gwen👍😈... es una historia entretenida.. ya no el tipico hombre araña.. ahora es el Amigable Fantasma del vecindario👍😉.... diablos cuando lei que el MC encuentra a su tia May atractiva realmente espere que intentara conquistarla ((😅las historias de incesto hacen daño je je je))....
A escrita é horrível,o cara colocou xianxia na Marvel,teria sido mais legal se fosse simplesmente o Peter descobrindo e aprimorando seus poderes de fantasma,mas não o cara tem que colocar romance de cultivo e escrever como aqueles retardados chineses sobre orgulho e vomitar sangue
Not a fan of this one. Having read only 2 chapters, I knew it was bad. The author keeps mixing up He and She. With the bad grammar and the confusing POV change, it is barely readable. There is just too many mistakes and the Author doesn't fix them. I get that English is not Author's native language, but at least try and fix it. There are commenters telling you what to fix. Cool powers for a Marvel fan-fic, but it's ruined by Harem and the awful Character Design. Betty Ross (30-45 yrs old), Hulk's love interest, blushes instantly after seeing MC (a teenager) during a fight between Hulk and the Abomination where people should be panicking. This part alone shows me that the rest of the story will be full of cringe and Author's lust fantasies. (It ain't romance if it's more than one person, that shit is lust.) (I hate harem but I still gave this a try.) If you're into harem and low iq stories such as this then cool. You do you.
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Interesting marvel story.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I haven’t even read it yet but i just to hyped that there is a eanny phantom power set story... its a rare thing to find especially if its a self insert
Finally I don't know why people don't use Danny phantoms powers, god I'm so happy right now that I didn't even read it yet, just didn't mess I up.
At the time of the events of Iron Man 2, Peter Parker was about 8 years old !!! The boy in the iron man's toy helmet is Peter !! Translated to google translator!
Did you copy this book because i saw it posted before a couple of months ago. .
Good job this fic is one of my new favorites for sure [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH SO FAR KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!! for those of you who have seen Danny phantom and like marvel this is the book for you and if the author is so kind he can join my writers community 😊 It is a gathering of writers and fans. dm me with ur response(the group is a discord community)
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I just finished the rewritten version I was curious to see this raw version and my buddy the difference is clear, cliché cliché cliché! Needless to say, MC acting like a pervert, yeah the rewrite is really great. I'm so excited to see the big step you've taken 🥺 Congratulations
pretty good story. although it would be better if you used grammarly or something to fix your writing since it's really hard to read sometimes
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GOOD BUUTTTT COULD BE GREAT PLEASE USE GRAMMERLY IT WOULD IMPROVE THE STORY IMMENSELY BUT OTHER THAN THAT THIS IS THE BEST DANNY PHANTOM FF I HAVE READ...........
This story at first glance seemed like a good idea but then I saw Harem tag and just knew that this story will disappoint but still tried reading it and then by every paragraph my motivation to read it got lower and then the moment author wrote "Betty blushes" I dropped. this is for people who like dumb and low IQ novels
please continue to write this work, very good, an MC who creates his own organization, recruits people and an author who creates new characters instead of simply copying existing ones in the universe, even if it is a fanfic this should not negate the creative creativity
This is a good piece of work and should be read if interested in something new. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍
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🙄 Tia May......😉😉😉😉 Natasha.. Gwen👍😈... es una historia entretenida.. ya no el tipico hombre araña.. ahora es el Amigable Fantasma del vecindario👍😉.... diablos cuando lei que el MC encuentra a su tia May atractiva realmente espere que intentara conquistarla ((😅las historias de incesto hacen daño je je je))....
A escrita é horrível,o cara colocou xianxia na Marvel,teria sido mais legal se fosse simplesmente o Peter descobrindo e aprimorando seus poderes de fantasma,mas não o cara tem que colocar romance de cultivo e escrever como aqueles retardados chineses sobre orgulho e vomitar sangue
Not a fan of this one. Having read only 2 chapters, I knew it was bad. The author keeps mixing up He and She. With the bad grammar and the confusing POV change, it is barely readable. There is just too many mistakes and the Author doesn't fix them. I get that English is not Author's native language, but at least try and fix it. There are commenters telling you what to fix. Cool powers for a Marvel fan-fic, but it's ruined by Harem and the awful Character Design. Betty Ross (30-45 yrs old), Hulk's love interest, blushes instantly after seeing MC (a teenager) during a fight between Hulk and the Abomination where people should be panicking. This part alone shows me that the rest of the story will be full of cringe and Author's lust fantasies. (It ain't romance if it's more than one person, that shit is lust.) (I hate harem but I still gave this a try.) If you're into harem and low iq stories such as this then cool. You do you.
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Bom ...,...... . . .😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂😎😎😎😎😎😎
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Up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up up
Interesting marvel story.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I haven’t even read it yet but i just to hyped that there is a eanny phantom power set story... its a rare thing to find especially if its a self insert
Finally I don't know why people don't use Danny phantoms powers, god I'm so happy right now that I didn't even read it yet, just didn't mess I up.
At the time of the events of Iron Man 2, Peter Parker was about 8 years old !!! The boy in the iron man's toy helmet is Peter !! Translated to google translator!
Did you copy this book because i saw it posted before a couple of months ago. .
Good job this fic is one of my new favorites for sure [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH SO FAR KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!! for those of you who have seen Danny phantom and like marvel this is the book for you and if the author is so kind he can join my writers community 😊 It is a gathering of writers and fans. dm me with ur response(the group is a discord community)
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I just finished the rewritten version I was curious to see this raw version and my buddy the difference is clear, cliché cliché cliché! Needless to say, MC acting like a pervert, yeah the rewrite is really great. I'm so excited to see the big step you've taken 🥺 Congratulations