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Too much like the summary of a story. Rushed, not explored enough, no dialogues, no emotions. The characters and background desperately need some development.
focus on this one please..... and maybe slow down a bit when Harry goes to Hogwarts. and torment Ron for the next 7 years hhahahahaha daily updates daily updates daily updates daily updates daily updates
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I find it amazing that most of the authors on the site are high functioning sociopaths, I guess webnovel is a bad influence. Besides that, Tonyorobsky said it all, you have a good idea , but poor execution at the moment, read what've you written out loud and you will notice the issues, hopefully it gets better. Add more descriptions, more interactions, the human element to say.
Too much like the summary of a story. Rushed, not explored enough, no dialogues, no emotions. The characters and background desperately need some development.
focus on this one please..... and maybe slow down a bit when Harry goes to Hogwarts. and torment Ron for the next 7 years hhahahahaha daily updates daily updates daily updates daily updates daily updates
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I find it amazing that most of the authors on the site are high functioning sociopaths, I guess webnovel is a bad influence. Besides that, Tonyorobsky said it all, you have a good idea , but poor execution at the moment, read what've you written out loud and you will notice the issues, hopefully it gets better. Add more descriptions, more interactions, the human element to say.