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The story is all over the place, sometimes the English is unclear and sometimes it's ok. The MC acts like a baby on a sugar rush, the way he acts (don't know if it's on purpose or not) is as if he's convinced he's a shounen protagonist who has to be quirky to fit in, and he also depends on his system as if he needs it to hold his hand when he goes to the bathroom.
kinda disappointed that the mc left kushina for minato. seems beta to me, and the timeline is so far back its gonna be meh because mc will be like 30 when the canon begins. all the known characters are gonna be too young to be around,
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very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
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The story is all over the place, sometimes the English is unclear and sometimes it's ok. The MC acts like a baby on a sugar rush, the way he acts (don't know if it's on purpose or not) is as if he's convinced he's a shounen protagonist who has to be quirky to fit in, and he also depends on his system as if he needs it to hold his hand when he goes to the bathroom.
kinda disappointed that the mc left kushina for minato. seems beta to me, and the timeline is so far back its gonna be meh because mc will be like 30 when the canon begins. all the known characters are gonna be too young to be around,
ren x Kushina as couple dude please made them a couple ren x Kushina as couple dude please made them a couple ren x Kushina as couple dude please made them a couple ren x Kushina as couple dude please made them a couple
very good story I really like how you put work into the chapters you do thank you for everything and please don't stop your story like the others
GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO GO
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a great start good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good good
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