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It would be nice if I had armor similar to Goblin Slayer's, it's pretty cool in my opinion. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
It could have been really Really GOOD! But you just have to pull the, "Imma tell my goddess everything about me" Card. *Sigh* It's also sad that you're an experienced Fanfiction author, you already made lots of other Fic but you're still this bad? (Forgive me for being blunt) have you not been listening to you're readers advise? Or even researching about the world you're OC is going to be transported to? (Forgive me if I offended you) It's honestly sad to see this Good potential of a Fic go to this road. Alas, I'm just a no body and a Fic is a fic, bad or good it doesn't matter, as long as the author is enjoying himself while writing it. That is all and good luck.
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Read that the mc said to Hestia that he died met and angel and used to work in a factory so i dropped. Dude was talking about his past life thats always a big no and the fact that there are guns in danmachi is dumb
finally a danmachi fanfic where the protagonist is not OP and it seems that he has never seen a woman, please continue with the story and without harem.
do something like solo leveling, kill enemies and summon them with a piece of your core, make them have a personality by spending time with them, like a class skill after leveling up, another class skill would be for them to hide in his shadows.
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It would be nice if I had armor similar to Goblin Slayer's, it's pretty cool in my opinion. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
It could have been really Really GOOD! But you just have to pull the, "Imma tell my goddess everything about me" Card. *Sigh* It's also sad that you're an experienced Fanfiction author, you already made lots of other Fic but you're still this bad? (Forgive me for being blunt) have you not been listening to you're readers advise? Or even researching about the world you're OC is going to be transported to? (Forgive me if I offended you) It's honestly sad to see this Good potential of a Fic go to this road. Alas, I'm just a no body and a Fic is a fic, bad or good it doesn't matter, as long as the author is enjoying himself while writing it. That is all and good luck.
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Read that the mc said to Hestia that he died met and angel and used to work in a factory so i dropped. Dude was talking about his past life thats always a big no and the fact that there are guns in danmachi is dumb
finally a danmachi fanfic where the protagonist is not OP and it seems that he has never seen a woman, please continue with the story and without harem.
do something like solo leveling, kill enemies and summon them with a piece of your core, make them have a personality by spending time with them, like a class skill after leveling up, another class skill would be for them to hide in his shadows.
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