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Very good, but the story itself is pretty bland cause of other characters, and it seems like the mc isn't the mc, the author should've said that there are multiple mcs...(I'm not saying this because the there are multiple mcs but, it really feels like the story isn't focused on the mc...) The story pace is slow, it takes 50+ chapters to complete a singularity. The author doesn't always go to the main point, and likes to stall things for the chapters to be longer, there's always this comedy that isn't even funny... Overall it's pretty good because there's morgan out there, but the relationship with morgan is pretty bland, it feels like morgan is just there to be a flex to others, and doesn't do anything at all, and mc just ignores her, like what? Morgan is his first servant, when will the author take their relationship to the next level? It has benn 200+ chapters
Spoiler de rΓ©vΓ©lationBuat karya pemula cerita nya so-so lah.. gw kasih paham poin minus nya aja menurut gw 1. Adek si mc ini ga perlu ato minimal di bikin support character. Screen time nya si adek mc ini ngalahin mc, bahkan gw pikir adek nya mc ini sebenarnya mc sedangkan kakak nya itu npc. Terus reverse harem nya *cuih, kesan nya adek mc punya reverse harem ini kek lonT. Saran gw kl masih mau masukin adek mc mending di bikin ke pov laen ato di jadiin chapter omake terus tambahin screen time mc nya bambang! 2. Serius le ini yg bikin gw ga nyaman bacanya, tata bahasa lu amburadul. Minimal nulis nya pake tata bahasa yg baik dan benar... Kl pake istilah inggris boleh la, tapi lu juga masukin bahasa jepang ini bikin cringe baca nya, aura wibu nya keliatan kentel banget
jalan ceritanya unik, karena yang ke isekai tidak hanya satu atau sekelompok orang(2 atau satu rombongan kelas). Tapi melibatkan dibuat orang ke isekai dan dikasih sistem masing - masing. Kebetulan saya menyukai karakter Morgan serta jadi itu menjadi nilai plus dari saya dan juga adegan komedinya. Kurangnya dari saya adalah adegan MC utama dengan Morgan ketika sedang di chaldea(Ketika beres singularitas atau event system). Meski di updatean sekarang memang lagi pada bagian cerita bersama Morgan. Tapi menurut saya masih kurang. Terlepas dari kurangnya menurut Saya sebagai penggemar karakter Morgan. Saya suka dengan fanfic. Lanjutkan terus penulis.
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Third review........ Since I love Morgan, and the latest chapter was great π .................. I need more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Moooooooorrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!! ....... .....
Spoiler de rΓ©vΓ©lationI don't speak indo, but I still read this by using google translate... Author please add a tranlated version of this so others can also read it, it's good for me :)
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Rasa garam saat mengacha sangat terjelaskan disini dan terasa sangat nyata sekali aowkwowkwok kalau bisa update ceritanya rutin, hanya itu saja review saya muwehehe π€£πππ
mantap nih novel,fill nya ngena banget tapi menurutku kekurangan ni novel cuman adegan action trus pas kalau adegan emosional banget tolonglah jangan tiba tiba di cut itu aja sih selebihnya bagus kok menurut gw
Very good, but the story itself is pretty bland cause of other characters, and it seems like the mc isn't the mc, the author should've said that there are multiple mcs...(I'm not saying this because the there are multiple mcs but, it really feels like the story isn't focused on the mc...) The story pace is slow, it takes 50+ chapters to complete a singularity. The author doesn't always go to the main point, and likes to stall things for the chapters to be longer, there's always this comedy that isn't even funny... Overall it's pretty good because there's morgan out there, but the relationship with morgan is pretty bland, it feels like morgan is just there to be a flex to others, and doesn't do anything at all, and mc just ignores her, like what? Morgan is his first servant, when will the author take their relationship to the next level? It has benn 200+ chapters
Spoiler de rΓ©vΓ©lationBuat karya pemula cerita nya so-so lah.. gw kasih paham poin minus nya aja menurut gw 1. Adek si mc ini ga perlu ato minimal di bikin support character. Screen time nya si adek mc ini ngalahin mc, bahkan gw pikir adek nya mc ini sebenarnya mc sedangkan kakak nya itu npc. Terus reverse harem nya *cuih, kesan nya adek mc punya reverse harem ini kek lonT. Saran gw kl masih mau masukin adek mc mending di bikin ke pov laen ato di jadiin chapter omake terus tambahin screen time mc nya bambang! 2. Serius le ini yg bikin gw ga nyaman bacanya, tata bahasa lu amburadul. Minimal nulis nya pake tata bahasa yg baik dan benar... Kl pake istilah inggris boleh la, tapi lu juga masukin bahasa jepang ini bikin cringe baca nya, aura wibu nya keliatan kentel banget
jalan ceritanya unik, karena yang ke isekai tidak hanya satu atau sekelompok orang(2 atau satu rombongan kelas). Tapi melibatkan dibuat orang ke isekai dan dikasih sistem masing - masing. Kebetulan saya menyukai karakter Morgan serta jadi itu menjadi nilai plus dari saya dan juga adegan komedinya. Kurangnya dari saya adalah adegan MC utama dengan Morgan ketika sedang di chaldea(Ketika beres singularitas atau event system). Meski di updatean sekarang memang lagi pada bagian cerita bersama Morgan. Tapi menurut saya masih kurang. Terlepas dari kurangnya menurut Saya sebagai penggemar karakter Morgan. Saya suka dengan fanfic. Lanjutkan terus penulis.
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Moshi moshi ini udah lewat seminggu :v [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Third review........ Since I love Morgan, and the latest chapter was great π .................. I need more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Moooooooorrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!! ....... .....
Spoiler de rΓ©vΓ©lationI don't speak indo, but I still read this by using google translate... Author please add a tranlated version of this so others can also read it, it's good for me :)
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Rasa garam saat mengacha sangat terjelaskan disini dan terasa sangat nyata sekali aowkwowkwok kalau bisa update ceritanya rutin, hanya itu saja review saya muwehehe π€£πππ