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My English is pretty flawed and pathetic. The author however does not even have a basic grasp of English. I think his level would be between A2 and B1. Expect many cringeworthy sentences with so many mistakes. For example expect the mc to ask "an question" to his system. ;)
Overall Rating: Subpar/Average fanfic because of slow pacing and too many info dumps which resulted in less progression of the story and because of it you have encountered a writers-block. Still kudos for author-san for having a less to no mistake grammatical errors and your broad English vocabulary. P.S. don't focus too much on the length of your FF which causes you to input too many info but rather focus on the story plots and progression. xD
j'adore ca a pris son temps avant de commencer c'est rare et bien ecrit hormis la copine de la cabane ont dirai plus la meme quant il y a eu les autres qui sont arriver. elle est passer de femme cool a fille stupide amoureuse ca gaché ma lecture.
allthough the mc is allright the grammer is bad and theres no backstory for the mc and how the poeple of the hunter organisation act is just wrong. the author also uses to much inner monoluge ro explain things it the chapters are also to short woud not recomend this
Good short chapters, but you have to read ten chapters to understand something. The progress is very slow for 70 short chapters, so I don't see the point in completing the reading and I know that MC will not reach anywhere mentioned in these few short chapters. The writer explains to us marital and romantic relationships for people other than MC Whoever doesn't have any relationships, this is the biggest mistake any writer can make
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Only read the first 5 chapters , The grammer is pretty bad ,even if a story is great but poor grammer spoils the immersibilty of that story , sorry but will not be able to get into it
Does he got that make up? He doooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooiooooooooooooooooeeeeeessss.
Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up.
please get an editor and try to describe the world better and it's characters, if you don't want an editor download grammar,ly it is free and helps with english errors
Muito bom espero muiyo dessa estoria pois nao nos trata como burros eu estava com medo do protagonista ficar com a vadia que salvo ele. Pois ela tem namorado mas tava meio que afim do
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I don't usually review stuff b ut damn this won got me too bad am too poor to give money or power stars[img=faceslap][img=update].God damn give us mooooooooreee
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En todo caso es normal no tiene nada que me impulse a leer solo sé que el protagonista tiene un sistema y sabe cómo entrenar su nen y le dan puntos cuando mata monstruos etc. Y todo lo que dijo es que se quiere unir a fin y compania
es bastante entretenida, aunque los capítulos son muy cortos (en mi opinión), sinceramente te atrapa un poco, la mentalidad del MC la note muy simple y un poco usado. el primer "hatsu" es una habilidad inspirada (creo yo) en el "hiraishin" de minato y tobirama, asi que me agrada.
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Here someone gave a low rate but he doesn't have any reason to do that lol Up up up up up up up up up up up up up up o up up o up up up up up up up up up
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Hi, people as many of you knows, I am an already an author in the webnovel who writes different originals novels at the same time, As you guys again know, this book is a fanfiction and I can not use the same system for earning my living from it, if you guys wanted to help me and keep me to write this fanfiction, help me through to "pat.reon" patreo-n.com/Krizantem - Early Chapters and Support
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My English is pretty flawed and pathetic. The author however does not even have a basic grasp of English. I think his level would be between A2 and B1. Expect many cringeworthy sentences with so many mistakes. For example expect the mc to ask "an question" to his system. ;)
Overall Rating: Subpar/Average fanfic because of slow pacing and too many info dumps which resulted in less progression of the story and because of it you have encountered a writers-block. Still kudos for author-san for having a less to no mistake grammatical errors and your broad English vocabulary. P.S. don't focus too much on the length of your FF which causes you to input too many info but rather focus on the story plots and progression. xD
j'adore ca a pris son temps avant de commencer c'est rare et bien ecrit hormis la copine de la cabane ont dirai plus la meme quant il y a eu les autres qui sont arriver. elle est passer de femme cool a fille stupide amoureuse ca gaché ma lecture.
allthough the mc is allright the grammer is bad and theres no backstory for the mc and how the poeple of the hunter organisation act is just wrong. the author also uses to much inner monoluge ro explain things it the chapters are also to short woud not recomend this
Good short chapters, but you have to read ten chapters to understand something. The progress is very slow for 70 short chapters, so I don't see the point in completing the reading and I know that MC will not reach anywhere mentioned in these few short chapters. The writer explains to us marital and romantic relationships for people other than MC Whoever doesn't have any relationships, this is the biggest mistake any writer can make
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
Only read the first 5 chapters , The grammer is pretty bad ,even if a story is great but poor grammer spoils the immersibilty of that story , sorry but will not be able to get into it
Does he got that make up? He doooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooiooooooooooooooooeeeeeessss.
Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up. Nice keep it up.
please get an editor and try to describe the world better and it's characters, if you don't want an editor download grammar,ly it is free and helps with english errors
Muito bom espero muiyo dessa estoria pois nao nos trata como burros eu estava com medo do protagonista ficar com a vadia que salvo ele. Pois ela tem namorado mas tava meio que afim do
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I don't usually review stuff b ut damn this won got me too bad am too poor to give money or power stars[img=faceslap][img=update].God damn give us mooooooooreee
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En todo caso es normal no tiene nada que me impulse a leer solo sé que el protagonista tiene un sistema y sabe cómo entrenar su nen y le dan puntos cuando mata monstruos etc. Y todo lo que dijo es que se quiere unir a fin y compania
es bastante entretenida, aunque los capítulos son muy cortos (en mi opinión), sinceramente te atrapa un poco, la mentalidad del MC la note muy simple y un poco usado. el primer "hatsu" es una habilidad inspirada (creo yo) en el "hiraishin" de minato y tobirama, asi que me agrada.
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Spoiler de révélation More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
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Here someone gave a low rate but he doesn't have any reason to do that lol Up up up up up up up up up up up up up up o up up o up up up up up up up up up
oh yessssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
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Hi, people as many of you knows, I am an already an author in the webnovel who writes different originals novels at the same time, As you guys again know, this book is a fanfiction and I can not use the same system for earning my living from it, if you guys wanted to help me and keep me to write this fanfiction, help me through to "pat.reon" patreo-n.com/Krizantem - Early Chapters and Support