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Need grammar check and as for the harem you go with mei,sambui,ino,yugito, and mabui.Although the plot line will be long because of how to get them all in a harem it it will be worth it.
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I took a look at the first chapter, and the grammar is horrible. I will not be reading the rest of this story, and I more than likely will not come back to re-read it. Overall I don't recommend this to anyone literate.
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Need grammar check and as for the harem you go with mei,sambui,ino,yugito, and mabui.Although the plot line will be long because of how to get them all in a harem it it will be worth it.
I took a look at the first chapter, and the grammar is horrible. I will not be reading the rest of this story, and I more than likely will not come back to re-read it. Overall I don't recommend this to anyone literate.