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Hi can someone tell me why I can’t unlock chapter with fast pass anymore please and thank you
I love the story unfortunately iIcabt read anymore lol cant afford but the plot and the idea is really amazing this author deserved an award
Ah, this story was unexpectedly wonderful. The characters are well developed and consistent, and the ending is fulfilling, mostly... now I need to read the spin off to find out the rest, which is fine. If it's anything like this one, it will be worth the read. Thank you for a great story and wonderful commentary at the chapter ends.
love it but ending went kinda fast. Still very good. 😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻 Don't mind random emoji just trying to fill character count 💵💵💵💵💵💵💵💵💵💵💵😱💵😁🤢👍🍥🔪😂💩😠😻🤤🎶🤢⛵💵🤤😢😭😒🤔🐡
Quite an interesting take on both gaming and transmigration genres! The book is an appropriate Length it doesn’t Keep you hanging with winded plot points but our secondary MCs apparently Have a sequel Based on them with a continuation to most of the unanswered plot twists! All fluff and nothing pg-13 romance wise fyi.
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I just finished and this was such a good book. it started off a little slow especially for me who doesn’t lean towards virtual reality type stories but the more I read the more I was pulled in. From the characters, to the world, to the plot, to the grammer, it was all top notch. Everything was ties together and written so well, if your hesitating to read this book just do it. At least read to chapter 40 and you’ll probably be hooked by then. A perfect mix of adventure, suspense, comedy, and romance. 👌🏾👌🏾👌🏾👌🏾 10/10 Wonderful ending too! Not Dissapointed at all.
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Hello👋👋👋author i really like this novel it’s so interesting for me because i read some other novels like this but this is the only novel that has mysteries cultivation fantasy and all that and a little bit fluff so thank you for such an amazing novel😊😊 thank you for your hard work
This Is The Best Story I’ve read so far omg im in love with the characters, the story, all the plots, even the cliffhangers have me going crazy 🤣Thank you so much for this wonderful piece of art ♥️♥️♥️ The fan service is amazing i keep fangirling all the time a cute Part comes and wanting to hit something everytime A-Zhi’s obliviousness hit home run 🤣🤣🤣 keep up the good work
Dear, Hello, I am a novel editor of Novelcat, My name is wind. After reading your appealing novels here, I eagerly want readers on our platform to have a chance to enjoy your talent. Are you willing to show your talent and share your works on our platforms?once your book gets exclusive contracted with us, you can get lots of rewards! and we also offer non-exclusive contract, which means half share of subscription fee and free AD! 【my email: wind@novel-cat.com】 If you are interested, pls send me an email, so that I can send you our doc about what we can offer to author by email. I’m sincerely looking forward to hearing from you. Please forgive me if my message causes any trouble to you.
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Oh, my God, I read the first chapter, I liked it so much, I really recommend reading it.I love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love
normally I wouldn't read novels because well I like art but I realy enjoy this novel, I am currently at chapter 31 and I love the way theres alot of intresting things, I love the novel and I hope you do too and sorry I'm bad at explaining things.
When you see the description of the story it's so cliche but when you read the chapters it's so interesting and funny especially the MC's attitude. This story makes me want to be a gamer so I won't be abused by this dog food story😂😂😂
been following this book for over 60 chapters. I remember leaving a review before this but I thought I should do it again cause I love this book so much. It keeps getting better and better. My favorite character is Li Ling. great work author, you have a bright future in fantasy world writing. thank you so much for this awesome book.
OMG! OMG! OMG! I LOVE THIS SO MUCHHHHHHH! I'm a fan of this author and made a Webnovel account just to read this book. It's so greatttt!! I love the characters and the story. This is the most different BL novel I have ever read. It focuses on the story with every new level they play giving us new and amazing things. I can never guess what's going to happen next and it's mindblowing. Thank you author-nim!!! I hope Li Ling is the Gamemaster. I'll really cry if he's not T-T
Is Master Mo also rich because it said that his dad always invites him to rich parties. Is Li Ling the game master? Were they childhood friends? But Master Mo lost his memory.
Spoiler de révélation Dear author, First I want to thank you for this amaxing story and I hope you are always motivated to write stories. If your not then we your readers are here to motivate you. Hope yoi aren't pressured into writing ustj remember to enjoy it and feel the thrill whenever you write stories. Just want to say I appreciate this New concept of Gaming Novel especially because it's BL and this kind of stories are hard to make for writers and hard to find for us readers. Thank youand God Bless you😘😘😘 For the readers I won't say any spoilers except that it's good and I'd recommend it for everyone to read 😊Thank you😘😘😘
OMG! I love this one! Mastermo is a sharp witted top player, and I love his partner, devilmagiclover, aka Li Ling! Great job author! I want more!
Wow! The synopsis itself was quite intriguing[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]. English isn't my language so I won't be a good judge still I wanna say that everything is written smoothly and is well understood with proper punctuation. Story itself has a different concept and unique plot👌 Keep up with the good work author wish you all the best❤️
Writing Quality: 2/5 Your writing style is good, there is nothing wrong with it, but the grammar makes everything drop. There are problems with missing commas, capitalization, wording, and punctuation. Also, this is my personal preference, but some paragraphs are too long and should be shortened. Updating Stability: 5/5 I give that to everyone because people have lives and not everyone can update daily. Plus, I never pay attention to this. Story Development: 3.5/5 (but I will have to put 4 on the thing). I like the way you tell your story; it's good, but some stuff seems too fast-paced while slow-paced at the same time. The flow would throw me off when the commentators would talk, because it does not give an indication when they start. But other than that, the plot development is not bad. Character Design: 4/5 I like your characters and they way they interact, especially the MC and his brother. Although, the interactions could come off as forced a few times, they are still interesting. You did a good job on developing your characters. World Background: 5/5 You gave a clear view of your background; very descriptive and clear. The changing of gaming settings/scenes are a bit of a flow disruptor, but it is unique and I like it. All in all, the main thing that needs to be improved on is grammar, especially in chapter one (the P.O.V in chapter one was confusing too). Other than that, you are on the right road. Keep up the good work, author!
To be honest... BT and fantasy is not "my cup of coffe", but... I like the way you write abot the gaming. It is very illustrative. The storyline is interesting and keeps the readers attention. That's what writing novels are about - keeping readers attention to the end :) so you're doing very well. Wish you inspiration and a lot of good ideas!
I love it! This novel is just the read I was looking for, such well thought out concept! I love gaming plots so much after reading TKA and especially when reading National school prince is a girl! Now regarding the style and plot construction, they are pretty finely executed. The novel has a descriptively tailored concept tallying to romance, fluffs humour, mystery and gaming. The interlinking of relationships followed by varying sequence of events are put together skillfully. Good job author!
I'll open with this: BL and Romance aren't exactly my cup of tea. This story, though? I may actually wind up reading it all the way through despite that, because it is very well put-together! The pacing doesn't leave a reader seeking more or less of any particular element, and while the grammar has some minor mistakes, it doesn't detract from the series of events the Author is building. All-in-all, I highly encourage giving this story a read, as it seem to have great things in its future. Keep up the good work, Author! <3
I love BL, so that automatically pulled me into the story. The story is interesting and your wordbuilding and pacing is good; keep up with the pace you are at. You have a few grammar mistakes with punctuations and capitalization; easily fixable when you go back and reread it. And maybe break up some of your long paragraphs. Keep up the good work!
So I just read the first chapter and honestly it was really well written and amazing. It kept me interested. looking forward to reading the further chapters. please keep on uploading.
If you are thinking about reading this book just go for it and see if it fits your taste. Since I'm the writer I'll just say that I personally love it, So worth your time. We are twenty chapters in and I've decided to shamelessly give myself a five star because I'm a fan of myself keke... The story deals with a lot of elements ranging from fantasy to mystery to cultivation and even a bit of horror. If you don't like the book you are free to curse the author all you like. Lol
Hi can someone tell me why I can’t unlock chapter with fast pass anymore please and thank you
I love the story unfortunately iIcabt read anymore lol cant afford but the plot and the idea is really amazing this author deserved an award
Ah, this story was unexpectedly wonderful. The characters are well developed and consistent, and the ending is fulfilling, mostly... now I need to read the spin off to find out the rest, which is fine. If it's anything like this one, it will be worth the read. Thank you for a great story and wonderful commentary at the chapter ends.
love it but ending went kinda fast. Still very good. 😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻 Don't mind random emoji just trying to fill character count 💵💵💵💵💵💵💵💵💵💵💵😱💵😁🤢👍🍥🔪😂💩😠😻🤤🎶🤢⛵💵🤤😢😭😒🤔🐡
Quite an interesting take on both gaming and transmigration genres! The book is an appropriate Length it doesn’t Keep you hanging with winded plot points but our secondary MCs apparently Have a sequel Based on them with a continuation to most of the unanswered plot twists! All fluff and nothing pg-13 romance wise fyi.
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I just finished and this was such a good book. it started off a little slow especially for me who doesn’t lean towards virtual reality type stories but the more I read the more I was pulled in. From the characters, to the world, to the plot, to the grammer, it was all top notch. Everything was ties together and written so well, if your hesitating to read this book just do it. At least read to chapter 40 and you’ll probably be hooked by then. A perfect mix of adventure, suspense, comedy, and romance. 👌🏾👌🏾👌🏾👌🏾 10/10 Wonderful ending too! Not Dissapointed at all.
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Hello👋👋👋author i really like this novel it’s so interesting for me because i read some other novels like this but this is the only novel that has mysteries cultivation fantasy and all that and a little bit fluff so thank you for such an amazing novel😊😊 thank you for your hard work
This Is The Best Story I’ve read so far omg im in love with the characters, the story, all the plots, even the cliffhangers have me going crazy 🤣Thank you so much for this wonderful piece of art ♥️♥️♥️ The fan service is amazing i keep fangirling all the time a cute Part comes and wanting to hit something everytime A-Zhi’s obliviousness hit home run 🤣🤣🤣 keep up the good work
Dear, Hello, I am a novel editor of Novelcat, My name is wind. After reading your appealing novels here, I eagerly want readers on our platform to have a chance to enjoy your talent. Are you willing to show your talent and share your works on our platforms?once your book gets exclusive contracted with us, you can get lots of rewards! and we also offer non-exclusive contract, which means half share of subscription fee and free AD! 【my email: wind@novel-cat.com】 If you are interested, pls send me an email, so that I can send you our doc about what we can offer to author by email. I’m sincerely looking forward to hearing from you. Please forgive me if my message causes any trouble to you.
Spoiler de révélation Oh, my God, I read the first chapter, I liked it so much, I really recommend reading it.I love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love love
normally I wouldn't read novels because well I like art but I realy enjoy this novel, I am currently at chapter 31 and I love the way theres alot of intresting things, I love the novel and I hope you do too and sorry I'm bad at explaining things.
When you see the description of the story it's so cliche but when you read the chapters it's so interesting and funny especially the MC's attitude. This story makes me want to be a gamer so I won't be abused by this dog food story😂😂😂
been following this book for over 60 chapters. I remember leaving a review before this but I thought I should do it again cause I love this book so much. It keeps getting better and better. My favorite character is Li Ling. great work author, you have a bright future in fantasy world writing. thank you so much for this awesome book.
OMG! OMG! OMG! I LOVE THIS SO MUCHHHHHHH! I'm a fan of this author and made a Webnovel account just to read this book. It's so greatttt!! I love the characters and the story. This is the most different BL novel I have ever read. It focuses on the story with every new level they play giving us new and amazing things. I can never guess what's going to happen next and it's mindblowing. Thank you author-nim!!! I hope Li Ling is the Gamemaster. I'll really cry if he's not T-T
Is Master Mo also rich because it said that his dad always invites him to rich parties. Is Li Ling the game master? Were they childhood friends? But Master Mo lost his memory.
Spoiler de révélation Dear author, First I want to thank you for this amaxing story and I hope you are always motivated to write stories. If your not then we your readers are here to motivate you. Hope yoi aren't pressured into writing ustj remember to enjoy it and feel the thrill whenever you write stories. Just want to say I appreciate this New concept of Gaming Novel especially because it's BL and this kind of stories are hard to make for writers and hard to find for us readers. Thank youand God Bless you😘😘😘 For the readers I won't say any spoilers except that it's good and I'd recommend it for everyone to read 😊Thank you😘😘😘
OMG! I love this one! Mastermo is a sharp witted top player, and I love his partner, devilmagiclover, aka Li Ling! Great job author! I want more!
Wow! The synopsis itself was quite intriguing[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]. English isn't my language so I won't be a good judge still I wanna say that everything is written smoothly and is well understood with proper punctuation. Story itself has a different concept and unique plot👌 Keep up with the good work author wish you all the best❤️
Writing Quality: 2/5 Your writing style is good, there is nothing wrong with it, but the grammar makes everything drop. There are problems with missing commas, capitalization, wording, and punctuation. Also, this is my personal preference, but some paragraphs are too long and should be shortened. Updating Stability: 5/5 I give that to everyone because people have lives and not everyone can update daily. Plus, I never pay attention to this. Story Development: 3.5/5 (but I will have to put 4 on the thing). I like the way you tell your story; it's good, but some stuff seems too fast-paced while slow-paced at the same time. The flow would throw me off when the commentators would talk, because it does not give an indication when they start. But other than that, the plot development is not bad. Character Design: 4/5 I like your characters and they way they interact, especially the MC and his brother. Although, the interactions could come off as forced a few times, they are still interesting. You did a good job on developing your characters. World Background: 5/5 You gave a clear view of your background; very descriptive and clear. The changing of gaming settings/scenes are a bit of a flow disruptor, but it is unique and I like it. All in all, the main thing that needs to be improved on is grammar, especially in chapter one (the P.O.V in chapter one was confusing too). Other than that, you are on the right road. Keep up the good work, author!
To be honest... BT and fantasy is not "my cup of coffe", but... I like the way you write abot the gaming. It is very illustrative. The storyline is interesting and keeps the readers attention. That's what writing novels are about - keeping readers attention to the end :) so you're doing very well. Wish you inspiration and a lot of good ideas!
I love it! This novel is just the read I was looking for, such well thought out concept! I love gaming plots so much after reading TKA and especially when reading National school prince is a girl! Now regarding the style and plot construction, they are pretty finely executed. The novel has a descriptively tailored concept tallying to romance, fluffs humour, mystery and gaming. The interlinking of relationships followed by varying sequence of events are put together skillfully. Good job author!
I'll open with this: BL and Romance aren't exactly my cup of tea. This story, though? I may actually wind up reading it all the way through despite that, because it is very well put-together! The pacing doesn't leave a reader seeking more or less of any particular element, and while the grammar has some minor mistakes, it doesn't detract from the series of events the Author is building. All-in-all, I highly encourage giving this story a read, as it seem to have great things in its future. Keep up the good work, Author! <3
I love BL, so that automatically pulled me into the story. The story is interesting and your wordbuilding and pacing is good; keep up with the pace you are at. You have a few grammar mistakes with punctuations and capitalization; easily fixable when you go back and reread it. And maybe break up some of your long paragraphs. Keep up the good work!
So I just read the first chapter and honestly it was really well written and amazing. It kept me interested. looking forward to reading the further chapters. please keep on uploading.
If you are thinking about reading this book just go for it and see if it fits your taste. Since I'm the writer I'll just say that I personally love it, So worth your time. We are twenty chapters in and I've decided to shamelessly give myself a five star because I'm a fan of myself keke... The story deals with a lot of elements ranging from fantasy to mystery to cultivation and even a bit of horror. If you don't like the book you are free to curse the author all you like. Lol