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I love it and I love the transition to Pandora will you be continuing that I really hope that Sam is someone's mate
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I thought i could give it a try to read another twilight fanfic. Since i havent read one with rosalie as the fml. The romance betw mc and rosalie starts decent BUT as author tries to add the tech stuffs from marvel world into twilight, im like wth is this BS stuffs!?? Author doesn’t even have knowledge on tech stuff and still dare to write about it??? The audacity. Soo many illogical reasons author adds in.. i felt assaulted as an engineer while reading this.. im only at chapter6 and im disgusted by the BS marvel tech stuffs. Going to drop this. Bye 👋🏻
Writing Quality: 3 stars, its readable but there are too many mistakes, not using a period or having some words stuck together. Stability of Updates: 5 stars, the story is already finished so you wouldn't have to worry about any updates, though the first 20 chaps are really long which is nice. Story Development: 5 stars, I like the development, some would say that the story progressed too fast however you gotta remember that the whole novel is 52chaps and not 300+. this novel is simply written for people to enjoy/read in a day. Character Design: 5 stars, if were talking about all characters then i think they're all written correctly, idk about how they are in the original novel but as far as i read from other fanfics/movies i think author did a good job. mc's personality not bad.👍 World Background: 4 stars, everything is the same as the movie however there are some nice twists here and there, though I think the story about how the first vampire/werewolf/shifters were created was a bit lackluster or better said boring that's why 4 stars. Also author kept mentioning the first werewolf and that mc was supposed to kill him, but that never happened. If I have to give author any tips it would be to try and fix your grammar, even if its not your main language you could still do better in writing, you don't use any question marks/ exclamation marks/ period, you also forget to put spaces a lot of times. Anyway thanks for the nice fanfic author and I hope you write another one in the same world soon.
Not a quality ff, and the first chapters Are rushed, too OP, without much explanation. It seems to me the author wanted to add all the fun things at the same time so he could write his own story in the twilight universe. I mean, that's ff so we can't be too demanding. But as a STORY and not just ff I think the author need to rewrite a bit. It has potential, and if in the futur the author try to ameliorate his/ her writing quality, the backroung and character design, I will read it with delight ! Thank you for trying. Good luck.
Только через год начал читать это. Раньше пробовал несколько раз, но почти сразу бросил. Безграмотность конечно зашкаливает, но в этот раз я продрался через безобразный текс и несвязные предложения( со временем немного улучшалось) и получил удовольствие от прочтения. В общем автору спасибо и удачи. Не бросай это произведение.
Anglais terrible Do you know reverso ? Translate site you should go check it . Sinon je trouve la fic gâcher par le dégoût envers René c'est quoi ta haine gratuite frere elle a rien fait la dame Ta fic mérite pas un 4 étoiles plutôt un 3 étoiles
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Pretty good. though the grammar is terrible. BUT if you want, i could edit the chapters for you. if your interested write to me on discord: Cringe_Author#1055 honestly pretty good story
I kinda like this story growth.👌👌👏👍👍 Nnnnnñnnnnnnnnn nnnnnnnn nnnnnnnnnnnnnñice loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee it👌👌👌. .
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I like the story but reading it makes me feel dyslexic. Do not read if you cant handle extremely bad grammar and spelling mistakes in almost every sentence.
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Please continue the novel tho i can't tell of it was good or bad it still pretty entertaining for one to read Tho i give 3 Good luck[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
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the writing is so bad, I can't even read 1 chapter, and thank you author for deleting all negative comments (you suck)...................................
Wonderful writing but needs to be developed But if you want to continue writing, I advise you and do not stop Personal need to sense the story is missing this but what is imaginary, do not matter you are the writer do what you want
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Great story so far! Looking forward to more! 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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You are doing a great job. I keep on coming back from more and you add a lot of funny scenes. Do are doing a great job I would not have known it was your first time if you had not told us. Keep it up
Офигенно! Я прям удивлен. Спасибо за новенлу, фанфик. Надеюсь, это не конец, и продолжение будет) Так, написано, что надо 140 слов, это раздражает, потому что я уже все высказал...
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I love it and I love the transition to Pandora will you be continuing that I really hope that Sam is someone's mate
Spoiler de révélation I thought i could give it a try to read another twilight fanfic. Since i havent read one with rosalie as the fml. The romance betw mc and rosalie starts decent BUT as author tries to add the tech stuffs from marvel world into twilight, im like wth is this BS stuffs!?? Author doesn’t even have knowledge on tech stuff and still dare to write about it??? The audacity. Soo many illogical reasons author adds in.. i felt assaulted as an engineer while reading this.. im only at chapter6 and im disgusted by the BS marvel tech stuffs. Going to drop this. Bye 👋🏻
Writing Quality: 3 stars, its readable but there are too many mistakes, not using a period or having some words stuck together. Stability of Updates: 5 stars, the story is already finished so you wouldn't have to worry about any updates, though the first 20 chaps are really long which is nice. Story Development: 5 stars, I like the development, some would say that the story progressed too fast however you gotta remember that the whole novel is 52chaps and not 300+. this novel is simply written for people to enjoy/read in a day. Character Design: 5 stars, if were talking about all characters then i think they're all written correctly, idk about how they are in the original novel but as far as i read from other fanfics/movies i think author did a good job. mc's personality not bad.👍 World Background: 4 stars, everything is the same as the movie however there are some nice twists here and there, though I think the story about how the first vampire/werewolf/shifters were created was a bit lackluster or better said boring that's why 4 stars. Also author kept mentioning the first werewolf and that mc was supposed to kill him, but that never happened. If I have to give author any tips it would be to try and fix your grammar, even if its not your main language you could still do better in writing, you don't use any question marks/ exclamation marks/ period, you also forget to put spaces a lot of times. Anyway thanks for the nice fanfic author and I hope you write another one in the same world soon.
Not a quality ff, and the first chapters Are rushed, too OP, without much explanation. It seems to me the author wanted to add all the fun things at the same time so he could write his own story in the twilight universe. I mean, that's ff so we can't be too demanding. But as a STORY and not just ff I think the author need to rewrite a bit. It has potential, and if in the futur the author try to ameliorate his/ her writing quality, the backroung and character design, I will read it with delight ! Thank you for trying. Good luck.
Только через год начал читать это. Раньше пробовал несколько раз, но почти сразу бросил. Безграмотность конечно зашкаливает, но в этот раз я продрался через безобразный текс и несвязные предложения( со временем немного улучшалось) и получил удовольствие от прочтения. В общем автору спасибо и удачи. Не бросай это произведение.
Anglais terrible Do you know reverso ? Translate site you should go check it . Sinon je trouve la fic gâcher par le dégoût envers René c'est quoi ta haine gratuite frere elle a rien fait la dame Ta fic mérite pas un 4 étoiles plutôt un 3 étoiles
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Pretty good. though the grammar is terrible. BUT if you want, i could edit the chapters for you. if your interested write to me on discord: Cringe_Author#1055 honestly pretty good story
I kinda like this story growth.👌👌👏👍👍 Nnnnnñnnnnnnnnn nnnnnnnn nnnnnnnnnnnnnñice loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee it👌👌👌. .
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Spoiler de révélation I like the story but reading it makes me feel dyslexic. Do not read if you cant handle extremely bad grammar and spelling mistakes in almost every sentence.
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Please continue the novel tho i can't tell of it was good or bad it still pretty entertaining for one to read Tho i give 3 Good luck[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
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the writing is so bad, I can't even read 1 chapter, and thank you author for deleting all negative comments (you suck)...................................
Wonderful writing but needs to be developed But if you want to continue writing, I advise you and do not stop Personal need to sense the story is missing this but what is imaginary, do not matter you are the writer do what you want
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Great story so far! Looking forward to more! 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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You are doing a great job. I keep on coming back from more and you add a lot of funny scenes. Do are doing a great job I would not have known it was your first time if you had not told us. Keep it up
Офигенно! Я прям удивлен. Спасибо за новенлу, фанфик. Надеюсь, это не конец, и продолжение будет) Так, написано, что надо 140 слов, это раздражает, потому что я уже все высказал...
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