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Very good.... Sad that its dropped, pls contiue! ........................... ......................................... ..................................
This is Good Novel but the MC personality was the worst of the worst of Hypocrite, so if you was people who dont want to see some massacre by in the name for 'better word' then dont read this even if the MC personality become better person his sin was never gonna be forgiven.
Can you please update this story, I have been waiting for a while, so please after your exams at least update this story. It is interesting and at least adds something new with a twist but yet not a twist. So I beg upon you author-san(lol) please update this fanfic
hope you start writing again this is better than marvel one and yea when you have 15 K words please delete that 15k long chapter hope you are good in health
Promising the problem is the writing quality is so bad. Sigh 🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔
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Interesting story and main character. I would however recheck the English, because whilst it is readable, there are too many mistakes for me to read this comfortably. Other than that, good story.
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Look SI based fanfics don't need much creativity. But even in this kind of stories they kill the fix with their over the top cringe. From chapter one the MC is so cringe with his righteousness that my skin crawled. It's almost like some 13 year old who watched too much left propaganda and decided to write this.
Good and detail description... This novel is not suitable for fast paced and fast update everyday type of strategy it will spoil the quality ... 3 to 4 chapters back to back in a week is more suitable...
The anger of the MC is a bit unhinged and comes across as teenage angst. There are many typos throughout the story too. Everything needs more elegance.
Keep up The work!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 Keep up The work!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 Keep up The work!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I like the story and the mc, but i was sad when u almost dropeed, keep writing. Now for the review, its in the begining i like the premise of the story and thr character, now lets wait for more content to talk morr about the novel. Thans
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I like the premise of the novel and the initial motivation of the MC, but I can't get into it because the writing quality is quite bad. This story seriously needs an editor. The myriad grammatical and editing errors detract too much from this story for me to enjoy reading it.
Absolutely awesome a normal guy who wanted to change the world and tried his hardest to do it is amazing character and I can’t wait for his development.
Ok so jm updating my review after chap 5 so ,To start with the author made god seem like dumb ass saying that he was sorry for being “neglecful” one im not catholic but even an idiot should know that god gave hummanity free will so its not his fault you do what you do stop being a ***** about it .Second the god removed a weakness and the taste of df like holy **** God is such a fuckin pussy hes basically Breast feeding the mc.the mc is one of the most simple minded stupid fucks ive ever seen ****ty mindset and ****ty person. third the author lacks commons sense in general makes me question if he even watched or read the manga cuz holy a pirate worth a 70 Million bounty and knows about Kings haki cmon really luffy Had a bounty of 100milion When he beat crocodile who didnt Even know haki but this random guy in the grandline who Knows about king haKi has a bounty of 70 Million it dosnt add up . Anyways in conclusion i think that the idea is great the author just needs to redo the starting chapters and Learn common sense for one piece and his grammer could use work.
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Just dont give false hope, please finish this story, and Thanks for creation. 🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨
............................................................ .......................... ......................... Thanks you....................... ótimo personagem............... ................. ansioso para ver mais capítulos.........................
Good so far. Let's see how events will develop. Good so far. Let's see how events will develop. Good so far. Let's see how events will develop
I liked this version of akainu a lot, the story seems promising keep going ...........................................................................................................................................
I’m honestly surprised at how interesting this book is and although I can’t rate it a perfect 5 yet because for one the author just started the book so we don’t know if he will update regularly yet. But all in all I recommend
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well written story and a different take on a known world -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
This book is truly amazing, the author has an incredible way to captivate you in his narrative, making you want to read more about the MC and what will happen next. I red all the chapters in oen sitting and they were one more amazing than the last. Chapter 1 can be heavy at first because the author goes a bit political about our society (he's 100% right though) in it but don't worry it only serves to justify the MC's motivations and from chapter 2 onwards it's all about One Piece and the MC getting better and stronger each step of the way. He even plans ahead, demostrates a cool head and you will be amazed at his social strategies and behavior. His powers and potential are also amazing. I've red over one thousand fanfictions and this one despite still young has the potential to sit in my top 5 One Piece fanfic. Give it a try and if you don't like chapter 1 just start from 2 and you'll love it.
Very good.... Sad that its dropped, pls contiue! ........................... ......................................... ..................................
This is Good Novel but the MC personality was the worst of the worst of Hypocrite, so if you was people who dont want to see some massacre by in the name for 'better word' then dont read this even if the MC personality become better person his sin was never gonna be forgiven.
Can you please update this story, I have been waiting for a while, so please after your exams at least update this story. It is interesting and at least adds something new with a twist but yet not a twist. So I beg upon you author-san(lol) please update this fanfic
hope you start writing again this is better than marvel one and yea when you have 15 K words please delete that 15k long chapter hope you are good in health
Promising the problem is the writing quality is so bad. Sigh 🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔🤔
Spoiler de révélation Interesting story and main character. I would however recheck the English, because whilst it is readable, there are too many mistakes for me to read this comfortably. Other than that, good story.
FOR GODS SAKE PLEASE DONT DROP THIS FAN FIC NEW CHAPTERS PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEE 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
Nicee............................................ .................................... .................................... ....................................
Look SI based fanfics don't need much creativity. But even in this kind of stories they kill the fix with their over the top cringe. From chapter one the MC is so cringe with his righteousness that my skin crawled. It's almost like some 13 year old who watched too much left propaganda and decided to write this.
Good and detail description... This novel is not suitable for fast paced and fast update everyday type of strategy it will spoil the quality ... 3 to 4 chapters back to back in a week is more suitable...
The anger of the MC is a bit unhinged and comes across as teenage angst. There are many typos throughout the story too. Everything needs more elegance.
Keep up The work!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 Keep up The work!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍 Keep up The work!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I like the story and the mc, but i was sad when u almost dropeed, keep writing. Now for the review, its in the begining i like the premise of the story and thr character, now lets wait for more content to talk morr about the novel. Thans
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
I like the premise of the novel and the initial motivation of the MC, but I can't get into it because the writing quality is quite bad. This story seriously needs an editor. The myriad grammatical and editing errors detract too much from this story for me to enjoy reading it.
Absolutely awesome a normal guy who wanted to change the world and tried his hardest to do it is amazing character and I can’t wait for his development.
Ok so jm updating my review after chap 5 so ,To start with the author made god seem like dumb ass saying that he was sorry for being “neglecful” one im not catholic but even an idiot should know that god gave hummanity free will so its not his fault you do what you do stop being a ***** about it .Second the god removed a weakness and the taste of df like holy **** God is such a fuckin pussy hes basically Breast feeding the mc.the mc is one of the most simple minded stupid fucks ive ever seen ****ty mindset and ****ty person. third the author lacks commons sense in general makes me question if he even watched or read the manga cuz holy a pirate worth a 70 Million bounty and knows about Kings haki cmon really luffy Had a bounty of 100milion When he beat crocodile who didnt Even know haki but this random guy in the grandline who Knows about king haKi has a bounty of 70 Million it dosnt add up . Anyways in conclusion i think that the idea is great the author just needs to redo the starting chapters and Learn common sense for one piece and his grammer could use work.
Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good Good
Just dont give false hope, please finish this story, and Thanks for creation. 🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨🤨
............................................................ .......................... ......................... Thanks you....................... ótimo personagem............... ................. ansioso para ver mais capítulos.........................
Good so far. Let's see how events will develop. Good so far. Let's see how events will develop. Good so far. Let's see how events will develop
I liked this version of akainu a lot, the story seems promising keep going ...........................................................................................................................................
I’m honestly surprised at how interesting this book is and although I can’t rate it a perfect 5 yet because for one the author just started the book so we don’t know if he will update regularly yet. But all in all I recommend
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Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Good read Keep working
well written story and a different take on a known world -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
This book is truly amazing, the author has an incredible way to captivate you in his narrative, making you want to read more about the MC and what will happen next. I red all the chapters in oen sitting and they were one more amazing than the last. Chapter 1 can be heavy at first because the author goes a bit political about our society (he's 100% right though) in it but don't worry it only serves to justify the MC's motivations and from chapter 2 onwards it's all about One Piece and the MC getting better and stronger each step of the way. He even plans ahead, demostrates a cool head and you will be amazed at his social strategies and behavior. His powers and potential are also amazing. I've red over one thousand fanfictions and this one despite still young has the potential to sit in my top 5 One Piece fanfic. Give it a try and if you don't like chapter 1 just start from 2 and you'll love it.