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how to say it.........this was very disappointing, I have no idea how the fic has 4 stars, it's just garbage, and adding random elements with the intention of making sense of the story simply makes it It made it feel twice as forced. It's a shame that a story with good potential is ruined like this.
This novel makes a plot just for the sake of filling up the plot. Enemy come unexpectedly without prior teaser. Enemy escape to lengthened the plot by ridiculous circumstances without clear logical move. Similar to plot armor, but worse. MC basically already strongest Shinobi in the world, still nerved just for the sake of wanting to have new plot. I mean, if he is OP then let him be OP, don't drowngrade his ability just for the sake of wanting to keep certain vilian character alive. And most importantly, Naruto plot is not yet flexed until the late-game and it's already new enemy.
Your synopsis sounds intriguing, especially with the AU elements and original jutsus! It’s great that you’re honest about improving earlier chapters—growth as a writer is always inspiring. Good luck and happy writing.
had to drop. Mc start of OP, but then a sudden nerf out of no where. He KNOWS that Danzo had given them misinformation, yet still fell for it. It was FORCE characters development for him to get MS.
This is a really bad novel and the writing does not improve over time... I am at Ch 140 and there is no improvement... This is a typical fast food novel, you shut down your mind and read it. But the thing is sometimes in the food, there are stone pieces (aka continuity disorders) that hurt your teeth and sometimes it tastes just right leaving you wanting for more... Read only if you have nothing else to read. Not worth wasting time on it.
Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ½ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ½ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.
bro has so much knowledge of the future yet did basically nothing to change it . everything happened just like it did in naruto just the damage dialed back by 10% but everything was the same no creativity no reality
Great story. loving it so far. You might say Tsunade and MC being together was your intention all along but i really didnt see it. It felt random and forced. Mei and MC had the best romantic relationship building than tsuna and mc. But great story. Just realize u change to boom cover💀💀 i wonder why🤔
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A very good fiction with few writing mistakes and a very good plot. AU universe, but still follows the original story somewhat. At the beginning I thought the MC was too OP and it would be the typical "catch them all" again, but I was completely surprised in a positive way.
When are you going to add new chapters to this novel. ...................................................................[img=gift] [img=In your face]
I started to understand why god tell home it's not going to be the same Naruto world I known because what even is this bruh
Love the story and character development but only thing I’m against is the fact it has “boruto” in mind for future
I liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence, in my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge, and he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You cannot make mc can copy it just by looking at it. I liked it at first, but McT never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence, in my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge, and he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You cannot make mc can copy it just by looking at it until he managedI liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it is by chance, in my opinion, it is better to remove his future knowledge, and he did not read Naruto previously, he only heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You cannot make mc can copy it just by looking at it, even Madara I liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence. In my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge. And that he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it. And the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You cannot make mc can copy it just by looking at it. Even Madara is notI liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence, in my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge, and he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You can't make mc can copy it just by looking at it. Even Madara couldn't. I liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence, in my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge, and he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It's obviously related to the blood strain. You can't make mc can copy it just by looking at it. Even Madara couldn't.
its not too bad but there are some dumb moments heir and there. like the Daimyō taking part in the hokage selection and everyone acting like he is there boss. the ninja villages are not subservient to the Daimyō. they want his money and he wants protection. the other problem is the characters sometimes acting ooc. like danzo getting flustered easily. the plot is not bad though like the author is very bold. trying not to spoil but like he saves who ever he wants which is not very liked overall but he do it anyway which is a plus because we need more creative authors like this.
The story is really good , but I pretty much dropped it after the main character died.... Like I tried to care, but I eventually just couldn't care anymore and dropped it. And supposedly he comes back, but I just couldn't get through it.
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I enjoy the consistency of the updates, so I really appreciate that. Sometimes in the story, I get lost and have to reread it to understand, but I think that's just me. The jokes, while sometimes out of place, I still enjoy. I think doing what you're doing in the way you want is a good idea. I can't really suggest anything because I'm not a writer, but I'll keep reading if you keep updating.
HE LITERALLY WROTE OUT HIS OWN CHARACTER. I guess he wanted us interested in the canon characters but i don't. Now, for over 100 chapters (and counting) he's literally killed the MC off. I could live with the random nerf, thought the ride was fun enough, but could not be more annoyed at just removing the title character for over 20% of the novel. Not to mention the amount of chapters without him. I want to be a little more understanding that I guess he's more into worldbuilding and the background characters but am too annoyed to seriously consider it.
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I keep getting spammed by bots advertising this story. I see that there are no other comments calling this out, so I can only assume the author is deleting them. If my review gets deleted ill just leave another, so on so on. Your behavior is predatory. It’s also illegal.
Great story I’m not even a quarter way through and it’s getting not slowing down
When i start resding this it kind lf fun from chapter 1 to chapter 300+, but from the part where Izuna disappear for almost 100 chapter and only appear for brief chapter. that when i start feeling bored but still kind of fun ride
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Please can someone tell me if Izuna the MC returns to be the protagonist after his "death" if so, in which chapter does he return?
The story was very good until the birth of Naruto then it started going downhill a little because of the heavy AU most of the story beyond the point is a lot of AU but the quality and the frequency of chapters is very good but the story also has a lot of passing issues I only read till chap 339 so I don’t really know the rest I highly recommend you read it if you like AU
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Hello! Author here. I am a new writer who is writing a original novel. I have read various and thought of writing a fan-fiction to improve my writing skills. NOW FOR THE FAN-FIC There will be no harem, sorry to disappoint harem lovers. Though there can be two wives depending on reader's demand. A poll will be conducted to decide that. I am writing a action novel with mix elements of fantasy and adventure. I have zero experience in writing romance and don't expect me to pull out cheesy romance out of nowhere, though I am currently reading some romance novels to learn, but that will not be the focus for this novel. As unnecessary romance and harem may f**k up the story and drastically reduce the quality of reading experiences. Thank you and stay tuned with me and also don't forget to check out my original Novel based on Indian Mythology with many legendary beings and powers.
how to say it.........this was very disappointing, I have no idea how the fic has 4 stars, it's just garbage, and adding random elements with the intention of making sense of the story simply makes it It made it feel twice as forced. It's a shame that a story with good potential is ruined like this.
This novel makes a plot just for the sake of filling up the plot. Enemy come unexpectedly without prior teaser. Enemy escape to lengthened the plot by ridiculous circumstances without clear logical move. Similar to plot armor, but worse. MC basically already strongest Shinobi in the world, still nerved just for the sake of wanting to have new plot. I mean, if he is OP then let him be OP, don't drowngrade his ability just for the sake of wanting to keep certain vilian character alive. And most importantly, Naruto plot is not yet flexed until the late-game and it's already new enemy.
Your synopsis sounds intriguing, especially with the AU elements and original jutsus! It’s great that you’re honest about improving earlier chapters—growth as a writer is always inspiring. Good luck and happy writing.
had to drop. Mc start of OP, but then a sudden nerf out of no where. He KNOWS that Danzo had given them misinformation, yet still fell for it. It was FORCE characters development for him to get MS.
This is a really bad novel and the writing does not improve over time... I am at Ch 140 and there is no improvement... This is a typical fast food novel, you shut down your mind and read it. But the thing is sometimes in the food, there are stone pieces (aka continuity disorders) that hurt your teeth and sometimes it tastes just right leaving you wanting for more... Read only if you have nothing else to read. Not worth wasting time on it.
Fried Frog's Legs recipe: Delicious fried frog legs! This simple recipe involves coating frog legs with cracker crumbs and cornmeal, then briefly frying them in oil for a tender and crispy treat. Ingredients: 24 frog legs, skin removed 1 cup all-purpose flour ½ cup cornmeal 1 (4 ounce) packet saltine crackers, crushed 1 tablespoon ground black pepper 2 teaspoons salt 1 teaspoon minced onion 2 eggs ½ cup milk 2 cups vegetable oil for frying 1 cup peanut oil for frying Cooking Instructions: Step 1. Rinse frog legs and pat dry; set aside. Combine flour, cornmeal, saltine cracker crumbs, pepper, salt, and onion in a large resealable bag; shake well to mix. Whisk eggs and milk together in a shallow bowl. Step 2. Heat vegetable oil and peanut oil in a large skillet over medium-high heat. The oil should be about 1/2 inch deep. Step 3. Dip legs into egg mixture in batches, then press into cracker mixture until evenly coated. Place the breaded legs, unstacked, onto a plate. Repeat with remaining legs. Step 4. Lower breaded legs carefully into the hot oil in batches. Fry until golden brown, about 4 to 5 minutes on each side. Transfer to a paper towel-lined plate to drain. Repeat with remaining frog legs. Enjoy fellow frog eater enjoyers.
bro has so much knowledge of the future yet did basically nothing to change it . everything happened just like it did in naruto just the damage dialed back by 10% but everything was the same no creativity no reality
Great story. loving it so far. You might say Tsunade and MC being together was your intention all along but i really didnt see it. It felt random and forced. Mei and MC had the best romantic relationship building than tsuna and mc. But great story. Just realize u change to boom cover💀💀 i wonder why🤔
Spoiler de révélation A very good fiction with few writing mistakes and a very good plot. AU universe, but still follows the original story somewhat. At the beginning I thought the MC was too OP and it would be the typical "catch them all" again, but I was completely surprised in a positive way.
When are you going to add new chapters to this novel. ...................................................................[img=gift] [img=In your face]
I started to understand why god tell home it's not going to be the same Naruto world I known because what even is this bruh
Love the story and character development but only thing I’m against is the fact it has “boruto” in mind for future
I liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence, in my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge, and he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You cannot make mc can copy it just by looking at it. I liked it at first, but McT never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence, in my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge, and he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You cannot make mc can copy it just by looking at it until he managedI liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it is by chance, in my opinion, it is better to remove his future knowledge, and he did not read Naruto previously, he only heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You cannot make mc can copy it just by looking at it, even Madara I liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence. In my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge. And that he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it. And the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You cannot make mc can copy it just by looking at it. Even Madara is notI liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence, in my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge, and he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It is clear that it is related to the blood strain. You can't make mc can copy it just by looking at it. Even Madara couldn't. I liked it at first, but MC never uses his future knowledge, just a bunch of things, and he barely interferes with the story, and it's a coincidence, in my opinion, it's better to remove his future knowledge, and he didn't read Naruto previously, he just heard a little about it, and the other thing is to remove the element of chaos, time, darkness and light. There is no need for them, and there is a question of blood strains. It's obviously related to the blood strain. You can't make mc can copy it just by looking at it. Even Madara couldn't.
its not too bad but there are some dumb moments heir and there. like the Daimyō taking part in the hokage selection and everyone acting like he is there boss. the ninja villages are not subservient to the Daimyō. they want his money and he wants protection. the other problem is the characters sometimes acting ooc. like danzo getting flustered easily. the plot is not bad though like the author is very bold. trying not to spoil but like he saves who ever he wants which is not very liked overall but he do it anyway which is a plus because we need more creative authors like this.
The story is really good , but I pretty much dropped it after the main character died.... Like I tried to care, but I eventually just couldn't care anymore and dropped it. And supposedly he comes back, but I just couldn't get through it.
Spoiler de révélation I enjoy the consistency of the updates, so I really appreciate that. Sometimes in the story, I get lost and have to reread it to understand, but I think that's just me. The jokes, while sometimes out of place, I still enjoy. I think doing what you're doing in the way you want is a good idea. I can't really suggest anything because I'm not a writer, but I'll keep reading if you keep updating.
HE LITERALLY WROTE OUT HIS OWN CHARACTER. I guess he wanted us interested in the canon characters but i don't. Now, for over 100 chapters (and counting) he's literally killed the MC off. I could live with the random nerf, thought the ride was fun enough, but could not be more annoyed at just removing the title character for over 20% of the novel. Not to mention the amount of chapters without him. I want to be a little more understanding that I guess he's more into worldbuilding and the background characters but am too annoyed to seriously consider it.
Spoiler de révélation I keep getting spammed by bots advertising this story. I see that there are no other comments calling this out, so I can only assume the author is deleting them. If my review gets deleted ill just leave another, so on so on. Your behavior is predatory. It’s also illegal.
Great story I’m not even a quarter way through and it’s getting not slowing down
When i start resding this it kind lf fun from chapter 1 to chapter 300+, but from the part where Izuna disappear for almost 100 chapter and only appear for brief chapter. that when i start feeling bored but still kind of fun ride
Spoiler de révélation Please can someone tell me if Izuna the MC returns to be the protagonist after his "death" if so, in which chapter does he return?
The story was very good until the birth of Naruto then it started going downhill a little because of the heavy AU most of the story beyond the point is a lot of AU but the quality and the frequency of chapters is very good but the story also has a lot of passing issues I only read till chap 339 so I don’t really know the rest I highly recommend you read it if you like AU
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Hello! Author here. I am a new writer who is writing a original novel. I have read various and thought of writing a fan-fiction to improve my writing skills. NOW FOR THE FAN-FIC There will be no harem, sorry to disappoint harem lovers. Though there can be two wives depending on reader's demand. A poll will be conducted to decide that. I am writing a action novel with mix elements of fantasy and adventure. I have zero experience in writing romance and don't expect me to pull out cheesy romance out of nowhere, though I am currently reading some romance novels to learn, but that will not be the focus for this novel. As unnecessary romance and harem may f**k up the story and drastically reduce the quality of reading experiences. Thank you and stay tuned with me and also don't forget to check out my original Novel based on Indian Mythology with many legendary beings and powers.