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Please feel free to drop a review or a comment! I'm open to criticisms and praises! >.<! YOU CAN DONATE ME A CUP OF COFFEE! https://ko-fi.com/Zeertified I'll update as much as I can! Thank you for reading!
The story is well written. I love the main character's personality. It's complex xD. Author has done a great job. Recommend it for all. Keep writing!
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I’m here again, hoping that we can have a chance to work together and we are willing to pay you for distributing your work.The conditions should be generous. If you are interested, please contact me via this email:adaren06*@*gmail.com(delete *）, then I should take this opportunity to discuss it with you in details.
I love your novel! It is a great story! I’m a representative editor from Stary.ltd. If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact adaren06*@*gmail.com(delete *).
Took me awhile to warm up to Jaycee, but so far I am liking where the plot is going and I look forward to seeing where this story goes from here on out. Looking forward to more updates. The story is well written and has my attention.
Very good novel please dont drop this and continue to release more chapters PLEASEEEE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I need more chapters release release release Release moreeee .
Una novela de mierda que se está desarrollando para camino bl y casi todo el capítulo es su tonta interacción con su amigo y el sistema describiendo sus outas cosas que me suelo saltar
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Honestly I do adore this genre of novel. I can't find any faults in game logic so far, as far as cliches and vrmmo logic goes. However, the constant info dumps, although somewhat neccessary in certain aspects considering the scale of the game and the immense amount of information that will need to be covered, are very obstructive to a smooth reading experience. In addition, the character panel presentation is very clunky and could often be done without. If it is absolutely neccessary to keep track of all the individual stats then I would reccomend you to have separate auxillary chapters where things like base class statistics can be recorded for reference. This would remove the need to have so many large info dumps of random statistics that this early on, or even potentially later on, may have minimal impact on the overall story or flow. The best opinion i could give on how to improve overall though would be to use something similar to grammarly for overall writing, and to try and smoothly incorporate tidbits of immediately relevant information rather than just slamming a wall of info into readers like a truck. Please continue to update though as I am very much enjoying the premise and would love to see the work as a whole improve as more chapters are released :)
I like the MC's personality. Intelligent yet kind of stupid in some way. It's funny how he bashed the slime with his staff despite being a magic class. lol. He's not aware that he's quite strong and just kept on doing what he wants.
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I love game and virtual reality novels and this one seemed legitimately good in some aspect. I don't know but it's very fascinating for me how the author put the player's status on some chapters. Keep up the good work author! More updates please!
Bookmarked! I love this novel. This type of game system novel is really my thing. More updates from the author and I hope the friendship between the two guys strengthened even more. Lol. It's funny how Denver kept on being in the end of the cliff every chapter.
I'm very fond of VRMMORPG novels and this is very good. The chemistry between the Jaycee and Denver was oddly satisfying despite their differences in personality. More update author! I'll look forward to this gem.
I enjoyed reading this story! The idea is original and well written. I like how this book is centred around a game and I think that this genre is underrated. Besides a few grammar mistakes here and there, it's an amazing book! I hope the author keeps going and is successful!
Bruh love the story! Keep up the good job. It's like different from other stories which follows the same exact plotline. I want this book to kinda have no romance or anything. I want this to be a pire fantasy book. High hopes for it. And please update more! 💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕
Their friendship is so cuteeee. I lowkey ship HAHAHAHAAHHAH. The story's theme may be common but the author managed to captivate me with the way he delivers the story. Absolutely a must-read!
Continue your work bro. You need to update more. I'll be waiting for next chapters. This kind of game genre is really my thing, but I want more character development thing. Anyways this is a good book.
Please feel free to drop a review or a comment! I'm open to criticisms and praises! >.<! YOU CAN DONATE ME A CUP OF COFFEE! https://ko-fi.com/Zeertified I'll update as much as I can! Thank you for reading!
The story is well written. I love the main character's personality. It's complex xD. Author has done a great job. Recommend it for all. Keep writing!
I’m here again, hoping that we can have a chance to work together and we are willing to pay you for distributing your work.The conditions should be generous. If you are interested, please contact me via this email:adaren06*@*gmail.com(delete *）, then I should take this opportunity to discuss it with you in details.
I’m here again, hoping that we can have a chance to work together and we are willing to pay you for distributing your work.The conditions should be generous. If you are interested, please contact me via this email:adaren06*@*gmail.com(delete *）, then I should take this opportunity to discuss it with you in details.
I love your novel! It is a great story! I’m a representative editor from Stary.ltd. If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact adaren06*@*gmail.com(delete *).
Took me awhile to warm up to Jaycee, but so far I am liking where the plot is going and I look forward to seeing where this story goes from here on out. Looking forward to more updates. The story is well written and has my attention.
Very good novel please dont drop this and continue to release more chapters PLEASEEEE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I need more chapters release release release Release moreeee .
Una novela de mierda que se está desarrollando para camino bl y casi todo el capítulo es su tonta interacción con su amigo y el sistema describiendo sus outas cosas que me suelo saltar
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Honestly I do adore this genre of novel. I can't find any faults in game logic so far, as far as cliches and vrmmo logic goes. However, the constant info dumps, although somewhat neccessary in certain aspects considering the scale of the game and the immense amount of information that will need to be covered, are very obstructive to a smooth reading experience. In addition, the character panel presentation is very clunky and could often be done without. If it is absolutely neccessary to keep track of all the individual stats then I would reccomend you to have separate auxillary chapters where things like base class statistics can be recorded for reference. This would remove the need to have so many large info dumps of random statistics that this early on, or even potentially later on, may have minimal impact on the overall story or flow. The best opinion i could give on how to improve overall though would be to use something similar to grammarly for overall writing, and to try and smoothly incorporate tidbits of immediately relevant information rather than just slamming a wall of info into readers like a truck. Please continue to update though as I am very much enjoying the premise and would love to see the work as a whole improve as more chapters are released :)
I like the MC's personality. Intelligent yet kind of stupid in some way. It's funny how he bashed the slime with his staff despite being a magic class. lol. He's not aware that he's quite strong and just kept on doing what he wants.
Spoiler de révélation I love game and virtual reality novels and this one seemed legitimately good in some aspect. I don't know but it's very fascinating for me how the author put the player's status on some chapters. Keep up the good work author! More updates please!
Bookmarked! I love this novel. This type of game system novel is really my thing. More updates from the author and I hope the friendship between the two guys strengthened even more. Lol. It's funny how Denver kept on being in the end of the cliff every chapter.
I'm very fond of VRMMORPG novels and this is very good. The chemistry between the Jaycee and Denver was oddly satisfying despite their differences in personality. More update author! I'll look forward to this gem.
I enjoyed reading this story! The idea is original and well written. I like how this book is centred around a game and I think that this genre is underrated. Besides a few grammar mistakes here and there, it's an amazing book! I hope the author keeps going and is successful!
Bruh love the story! Keep up the good job. It's like different from other stories which follows the same exact plotline. I want this book to kinda have no romance or anything. I want this to be a pire fantasy book. High hopes for it. And please update more! 💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕💕
Their friendship is so cuteeee. I lowkey ship HAHAHAHAAHHAH. The story's theme may be common but the author managed to captivate me with the way he delivers the story. Absolutely a must-read!
Continue your work bro. You need to update more. I'll be waiting for next chapters. This kind of game genre is really my thing, but I want more character development thing. Anyways this is a good book.