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I came to this to see an MC have a smoke session with his Opps and I got feels 2 chapters in. That should be enough for u to understand, it';s good.,
A very well-crafted story, which unfolds throughout the plot, is a charismatic protagonist. Over time, this job just gets better! At least until chapter 90, I have nothing to complain about, I hope that the author continues to develop the background world and the mysteries of that world.
I'm going to preface this by saying that I've only read up to chapter 39, but this novel is a mess. In these chapters, we have seen almost nothing of what was described in the synopsis, but instead, a completely made up horror event. In order to even get to this other world where the MC can start on his journey, he has to pass a test, which is administered by a company. The test is, in simple terms, basically just some horror game. He suddenly writes about a horror story taking place in a mental asylum in which the new recruits must escape in order to "prove themselves". And then it's just a slog of horror elements and characters acting in all sorts of weird manners (even before their possession). It feels like the author had ideas for multiple novels and wanted to just mash them all up together. I glanced ahead through the chapter titles, and it looks as though the test doesn't even end until about chapter 80, which is in the paid chapters. So essentially these 'free' chapters aren't even giving you a taste of what the novel could be, because all of them are spent writing a completely different novel.
PLEASE DON’T MAKE THIS A HAREM!! JUST LET IT BE A NORMAL AND HEALTHY RELATIONSHIP. !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
why not updating? what happened? GGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG
The story hooks you right from the start. Excited to see how the rest of the story goes. Is all i wanted to say why cant i just post it as is.
This novel should have disclaimers for incredible amounts of gore and disturbing content. Obviously, the nature of any literary content is up to the author’s discretion! However, authors should still be responsible enough to put some disclaimers up when they publish such content so that a potential reader can decide for themselves if they want to to read such content. Simply, it should be a simple courtesy. *Disclaimer: Read up to chapter 16.* The plot has a steady pace and that pace is, in all honesty, slow. There are paragraphs that have “jumps of thought” where something is missing, making it difficult to follow. There are already plot holes being only at Chapter 16... Characters personally feel clunky. There are cases where the author is rather obviously using deus ex machina to fix even the simplest plot points; using them in nothing more than just basic human interactions, no less— there isnt even a weak excuse given for absurdity, its just.. there? I’m a naturally curious person who will hold on tightly to bad writing just to learn the plot, a character, some piece of world building, a slightly interesting take on a trope or what not... I want to know more about this world... but I personally won’t pursue reading it. These are my thoughts on this novel. It has more interest in creating scenes of gore and violent action than creating a story- and what I was looking for was the story.
Holy shit your MC has to be the most altruistic dipshit I’ve ever read. Holy **** man.... he’s worse than the cliche fantasy white knight saving every damsel they come across. I could tolerate it if it was for a specific purpose and enable him to have a better chance at survival. And if it’s within reason, But it’s obvious he’s just bending over backwards for a bunch of ungrateful assholes. You should change his name to Shirou Emiya
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The story seems to be some type of darker imitation of second coming of gluttony and some other novels. The plot and the personality of the main character are always being forced. World building is decent though. Grammar is also ok but there are quite a few typos here and there and needs some editing. Well tldr: give it a try but it mostly caters to a niche group of people.
Tis novel is awesome😍😍😍😍😍🔥🔥😍😍o😍😍😍🙄it's going overbeck🚖🚖🚖🚖🚆🚆🚲🚲🚲🚲🚲🚕🚕🚕 it's flying🚁🚁🛬🛬🛬🛬🛬✈️✈️✈️✈️🛩️🛩️🛫🛫🛫🛰️🛰️🛰️🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀
now this interesting piece of novel,it's good and has a good writing quality ,the character design and the plot. Idk but some name in the novel is extremely familiar especially mc's hometown hehe
it's ok impressed except for the whole wife and kids thing.....its just silly saying you're gonna save the world and then while you're still weak you go ahead do that....it was a good choice no debating but there were times in the story when conversating with other people he should have made it clear the real relationship between them ....just saying someone like calvin.. even though he had witnessed the end of humanity and other stuff hasnt showed the wisdom a person like him ought to possess...maybe the author meant for his character to be like that..but that's my opinion ..he'll eventually have enemies (demons and even the Gods) those two he picked up with the reoccurrence of trouble they've been causing for him plot amor might get useless at some point ...he'll have to distance himself from them, I'll be waiting to see the fancy line the author is going to spin when the time comes..
I was just trial reading this story and got hooked. I get why it's a bit slow, wouldn't change a thing tho as I know it will break the flow. There are a bit of grammar error but very few. Quite impressed with the kinda aesthetic story. Be careful to new readers who do not like thriller, this is more leaning towards thriller for the first 80 chaps. Wanted to read more but I'm out of stones. sigh. Oh and can you kindly rephrase or at least reduce the amount of 'When I get out of here, I'm gonna find those bastards..' (not exact words but you get what I mean) part cuz it's more repetitive than I thought. You did great otherwise! Thank you Author.
as your fellow countrymen im very proud(lol) i hope this book gets top 1, I love this book btw. Grabe mag English dko na alam sasabihin hahaha basta support lang ako dito. Good luck sayo!
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WARNING: The story is rated 18+ that contained r*pe and gore, and the book has a slow but solid progress of the story. Please, read with caution. The story has an excellent background and foundation. As far as I have been reading until chapter 80, I didn’t see any big plot hole that might ruin the novel yet. So, you can rest assure that you won’t find any big inconsistency within the novel. As for the other elements, such as characters’s feelings, dialogue, and decisions, I also don’t see any inapropriate thing ‘for’ the author had made them feel alive and consistent for their own chain of actions. I like these aspects a lot. Last but not least, the power system, currently, It hasn’t been shown to us 100% yet, I think that it’s only 10% or 20% that has been shown so far and it contains taste and smell of other famous novels. For example, The Second Coming of Gluttony and Lord of the Mysteries. So, if you are a fan of those 2 famous novels, you CANNOT miss this book. I give you 5 stars, mY pReCiouS!! ***Please create a Discord group and Patr.eon***
I came to this to see an MC have a smoke session with his Opps and I got feels 2 chapters in. That should be enough for u to understand, it';s good.,
A very well-crafted story, which unfolds throughout the plot, is a charismatic protagonist. Over time, this job just gets better! At least until chapter 90, I have nothing to complain about, I hope that the author continues to develop the background world and the mysteries of that world.
I'm going to preface this by saying that I've only read up to chapter 39, but this novel is a mess. In these chapters, we have seen almost nothing of what was described in the synopsis, but instead, a completely made up horror event. In order to even get to this other world where the MC can start on his journey, he has to pass a test, which is administered by a company. The test is, in simple terms, basically just some horror game. He suddenly writes about a horror story taking place in a mental asylum in which the new recruits must escape in order to "prove themselves". And then it's just a slog of horror elements and characters acting in all sorts of weird manners (even before their possession). It feels like the author had ideas for multiple novels and wanted to just mash them all up together. I glanced ahead through the chapter titles, and it looks as though the test doesn't even end until about chapter 80, which is in the paid chapters. So essentially these 'free' chapters aren't even giving you a taste of what the novel could be, because all of them are spent writing a completely different novel.
PLEASE DON’T MAKE THIS A HAREM!! JUST LET IT BE A NORMAL AND HEALTHY RELATIONSHIP. !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
why not updating? what happened? GGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG
The story hooks you right from the start. Excited to see how the rest of the story goes. Is all i wanted to say why cant i just post it as is.
This novel should have disclaimers for incredible amounts of gore and disturbing content. Obviously, the nature of any literary content is up to the author’s discretion! However, authors should still be responsible enough to put some disclaimers up when they publish such content so that a potential reader can decide for themselves if they want to to read such content. Simply, it should be a simple courtesy. *Disclaimer: Read up to chapter 16.* The plot has a steady pace and that pace is, in all honesty, slow. There are paragraphs that have “jumps of thought” where something is missing, making it difficult to follow. There are already plot holes being only at Chapter 16... Characters personally feel clunky. There are cases where the author is rather obviously using deus ex machina to fix even the simplest plot points; using them in nothing more than just basic human interactions, no less— there isnt even a weak excuse given for absurdity, its just.. there? I’m a naturally curious person who will hold on tightly to bad writing just to learn the plot, a character, some piece of world building, a slightly interesting take on a trope or what not... I want to know more about this world... but I personally won’t pursue reading it. These are my thoughts on this novel. It has more interest in creating scenes of gore and violent action than creating a story- and what I was looking for was the story.
Holy shit your MC has to be the most altruistic dipshit I’ve ever read. Holy **** man.... he’s worse than the cliche fantasy white knight saving every damsel they come across. I could tolerate it if it was for a specific purpose and enable him to have a better chance at survival. And if it’s within reason, But it’s obvious he’s just bending over backwards for a bunch of ungrateful assholes. You should change his name to Shirou Emiya
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The story seems to be some type of darker imitation of second coming of gluttony and some other novels. The plot and the personality of the main character are always being forced. World building is decent though. Grammar is also ok but there are quite a few typos here and there and needs some editing. Well tldr: give it a try but it mostly caters to a niche group of people.
Tis novel is awesome😍😍😍😍😍🔥🔥😍😍o😍😍😍🙄it's going overbeck🚖🚖🚖🚖🚆🚆🚲🚲🚲🚲🚲🚕🚕🚕 it's flying🚁🚁🛬🛬🛬🛬🛬✈️✈️✈️✈️🛩️🛩️🛫🛫🛫🛰️🛰️🛰️🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀🚀
now this interesting piece of novel,it's good and has a good writing quality ,the character design and the plot. Idk but some name in the novel is extremely familiar especially mc's hometown hehe
it's ok impressed except for the whole wife and kids thing.....its just silly saying you're gonna save the world and then while you're still weak you go ahead do that....it was a good choice no debating but there were times in the story when conversating with other people he should have made it clear the real relationship between them ....just saying someone like calvin.. even though he had witnessed the end of humanity and other stuff hasnt showed the wisdom a person like him ought to possess...maybe the author meant for his character to be like that..but that's my opinion ..he'll eventually have enemies (demons and even the Gods) those two he picked up with the reoccurrence of trouble they've been causing for him plot amor might get useless at some point ...he'll have to distance himself from them, I'll be waiting to see the fancy line the author is going to spin when the time comes..
I was just trial reading this story and got hooked. I get why it's a bit slow, wouldn't change a thing tho as I know it will break the flow. There are a bit of grammar error but very few. Quite impressed with the kinda aesthetic story. Be careful to new readers who do not like thriller, this is more leaning towards thriller for the first 80 chaps. Wanted to read more but I'm out of stones. sigh. Oh and can you kindly rephrase or at least reduce the amount of 'When I get out of here, I'm gonna find those bastards..' (not exact words but you get what I mean) part cuz it's more repetitive than I thought. You did great otherwise! Thank you Author.
as your fellow countrymen im very proud(lol) i hope this book gets top 1, I love this book btw. Grabe mag English dko na alam sasabihin hahaha basta support lang ako dito. Good luck sayo!
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WARNING: The story is rated 18+ that contained r*pe and gore, and the book has a slow but solid progress of the story. Please, read with caution. The story has an excellent background and foundation. As far as I have been reading until chapter 80, I didn’t see any big plot hole that might ruin the novel yet. So, you can rest assure that you won’t find any big inconsistency within the novel. As for the other elements, such as characters’s feelings, dialogue, and decisions, I also don’t see any inapropriate thing ‘for’ the author had made them feel alive and consistent for their own chain of actions. I like these aspects a lot. Last but not least, the power system, currently, It hasn’t been shown to us 100% yet, I think that it’s only 10% or 20% that has been shown so far and it contains taste and smell of other famous novels. For example, The Second Coming of Gluttony and Lord of the Mysteries. So, if you are a fan of those 2 famous novels, you CANNOT miss this book. I give you 5 stars, mY pReCiouS!! ***Please create a Discord group and Patr.eon***