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Hi-ya BRPever! Long time no talk, I honestly didn't believe you'd keep using the cover I made for you! I thought you didn't like but here it is, still shining. I was very happy to work with you for the short period of time I did, I apologize for not paying attention to this book when I was working with you, I was in middle school at the time and was terribly busy while also struggling with my ADD and depression. I'm in high school now! Hope you're doing well. Sorry I sent this message from my alt account but I'm currently grounded <.< so I'm on my school laptop which doesn't let me log into my main email, so I'm stuck with my school email and the account it's under. But despite the name, it is I, Sento! I've moved onto wattpad with my stories too so if you wanna find me there to chat on the community page a bit, my username is Sento_writes_stuff Miss you guys, honestly that was one of the most genuine friend groups I've had in a while, when I get back on discord I'd love to be on your team again. I'll definitely be able to help a lot more this time since I'm on a different ADD medicine. N. E. ways, keep writing, when I have my phone back I'll be sure to read your story while cuddled up in bed with my cats.
A great novel there's no doubt in that and MC's character is the best one out there. The pacing of the story is good too if there is something I am dissatisfied with that would be the fact that the stability of updates and mostly that there are too many unnecessary information like the matches in tournament where there were chapters afters of matches about unnecessary people and despite being able to use Grandmaster magic MC has use different kinds of magic just to beat some novice brats which is annoying.
man this book is so good ...................................................................................................................
This story is something different from what I normally read. I really like the plots and hoping to catch up! Looking forward to more to it! Cheers!
This novel has a very interesting plot and it has amazing potential. Although the MC had a very hard past I'm sure the author will be give us a proper ending......
The beginning of the story is very good, but when it comes to the part of the tournament, there is a lot of description of fights of secondary characters that nobody cares enough to enjoy the fights. We stayed, waiting for the MC fight that takes time to happen, unfortunately that leaves us frustrated and the development of the story does not go very well.
pls update moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.................................nice novel u will love it if u read it but the chaps so damn slow so vote fast and we get more chapters
yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy yyyggggggggggggggggggggghhhhhhhhh ugftuhff5gfdtgftygttttttttvfr5tttttttttttt yyyyyyyytyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
good book but i think its dropped? anyways keep up the good work, really loving it heres some wmojis to fill the character limit 🐵🐜🙉🐗🙉🦁🦋🐛
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The book had a great start. I was't sure at the beginning but the peologuw shiwed the greatest enemy in the future. It is still a mystery how Razak came to be but I can say that the character is solid. While the characters are great, the little worldbuilding is a fact for me. Magic is Diverse but the Spells are somewhat redundant.I don't know if change is needed but the story is still Great. Good Work!!
I like the plot of the book so far. I also love how the MC is a bit cold, calculating, and especially ruthless when it comes to killing . I also like how he doesn't think with his emotions......but to be honest, I have this nagging feeling that Yusumi likes the MC, even though I somehow know that the MC won't fall for her easily.
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i don't know what to say your story is good but it feels kind of bland in the same way somehow there is no color to it. and it almost feels like a robot narrating the story. the most important is that there is no emotion as the story went on
I didn’t think I would enjoy this but I did. Author puts emphasis on the personality of the characters. Author knows how to add a spice when a couple of chaps get a lil boring. What the author forgot though is the lack of description on the world the novel took place, more importantly the west and east side, also the country idk if its mentioned and im prolly forgetful and old (jk im 18). anyway what I mean is the lack of information on where the location of the clans are, what side of the west he lives so on and so fort.
zero is the best thing you have to eat dinner for a week or a war on the planet and your life will be fine and the grass will be very good for a long period
I am glad that I chose to read this one. The story is dark and very interesting, although it isn't unrealistically dark and that's what makes it better. The MC is intelligent and calculative but not a total cold douchebag with zero EQ. The world building and the pacing is quite good, I have high hopes for the future development of this novel.
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Wowowowoww!!!! I always look up for ur writing! I love the way you comprehend everything and u are awesome! I hope your book receive lots of love and gets loved forever! I will always support you just keep writing and do great!!! everyone just dont think anything and start reading!
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Great story and well paced character development. The flow of the first few chapters might be confusing for some but once you get to the main story you get hooked!
So I only started reading this story few days ago. (that being only 4-5days ago) .And let's just say I'm addicted to this now. That itself is a fit because I'm hard to please person when it comes to stories to read. The plot is developing well, it gives out just right amount of mysteries and gets the reader interested then hooks us into itself. Sure there are lots of words overused, fight scenes could also use some work but it's better than most. Especially the rush of new books that are coming in. The author is stable in his updates , characters excellent, they have personality. For anyone only starting to read this story. The read will be totally worth it. Highest praises to you Pever! Look forward to the things you bring to us in the future! 😊❤️😍
An absolutely wonderful book with almost no grammar error. Very great flow of reading and almost everything is easy to understand comprehend and imagine. The world and characters are made thoughtfully and this is not you average novel where things just happen for the plot and because of the plot. Underrated but has a lot of potential. All it needs is a little push.
AS MUCH AS I LOVE THIS STORY WOULD BE GREAT TO SEE OH I DON'T KNOW MAYBE 1 0R 200 CHAPTERS A DAY😹😹😹🤣🤣😁😁🥳🥳🙏😂😂😂😂😂😂😎😎😎😎😎😷😷
This story is pretty gOod. Im On chapter 31 and so far its good. the plot is intresting and its keeping ny intRestd. nothing too special just a cool 😎 lil read so far
Everything about this story is great so far (as of chapter 30). There is excellent world building, a cool headed MC who doesn’t do anything stupid or annoying, and characters that have actual depth to them. I am extremely happy to have stumpled upon this work and made a review for it even though I almost never do. I cannot explain enough how much think you should read this.
Hi-ya BRPever! Long time no talk, I honestly didn't believe you'd keep using the cover I made for you! I thought you didn't like but here it is, still shining. I was very happy to work with you for the short period of time I did, I apologize for not paying attention to this book when I was working with you, I was in middle school at the time and was terribly busy while also struggling with my ADD and depression. I'm in high school now! Hope you're doing well. Sorry I sent this message from my alt account but I'm currently grounded <.< so I'm on my school laptop which doesn't let me log into my main email, so I'm stuck with my school email and the account it's under. But despite the name, it is I, Sento! I've moved onto wattpad with my stories too so if you wanna find me there to chat on the community page a bit, my username is Sento_writes_stuff Miss you guys, honestly that was one of the most genuine friend groups I've had in a while, when I get back on discord I'd love to be on your team again. I'll definitely be able to help a lot more this time since I'm on a different ADD medicine. N. E. ways, keep writing, when I have my phone back I'll be sure to read your story while cuddled up in bed with my cats.
A great novel there's no doubt in that and MC's character is the best one out there. The pacing of the story is good too if there is something I am dissatisfied with that would be the fact that the stability of updates and mostly that there are too many unnecessary information like the matches in tournament where there were chapters afters of matches about unnecessary people and despite being able to use Grandmaster magic MC has use different kinds of magic just to beat some novice brats which is annoying.
man this book is so good ...................................................................................................................
This story is something different from what I normally read. I really like the plots and hoping to catch up! Looking forward to more to it! Cheers!
This novel has a very interesting plot and it has amazing potential. Although the MC had a very hard past I'm sure the author will be give us a proper ending......
The beginning of the story is very good, but when it comes to the part of the tournament, there is a lot of description of fights of secondary characters that nobody cares enough to enjoy the fights. We stayed, waiting for the MC fight that takes time to happen, unfortunately that leaves us frustrated and the development of the story does not go very well.
pls update moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.................................nice novel u will love it if u read it but the chaps so damn slow so vote fast and we get more chapters
yyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy yyyggggggggggggggggggggghhhhhhhhh ugftuhff5gfdtgftygttttttttvfr5tttttttttttt yyyyyyyytyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy
good book but i think its dropped? anyways keep up the good work, really loving it heres some wmojis to fill the character limit 🐵🐜🙉🐗🙉🦁🦋🐛
XD XD 💙❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️much love to you❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️💙
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The book had a great start. I was't sure at the beginning but the peologuw shiwed the greatest enemy in the future. It is still a mystery how Razak came to be but I can say that the character is solid. While the characters are great, the little worldbuilding is a fact for me. Magic is Diverse but the Spells are somewhat redundant.I don't know if change is needed but the story is still Great. Good Work!!
I like the plot of the book so far. I also love how the MC is a bit cold, calculating, and especially ruthless when it comes to killing . I also like how he doesn't think with his emotions......but to be honest, I have this nagging feeling that Yusumi likes the MC, even though I somehow know that the MC won't fall for her easily.
Spoiler de révélation i don't know what to say your story is good but it feels kind of bland in the same way somehow there is no color to it. and it almost feels like a robot narrating the story. the most important is that there is no emotion as the story went on
I didn’t think I would enjoy this but I did. Author puts emphasis on the personality of the characters. Author knows how to add a spice when a couple of chaps get a lil boring. What the author forgot though is the lack of description on the world the novel took place, more importantly the west and east side, also the country idk if its mentioned and im prolly forgetful and old (jk im 18). anyway what I mean is the lack of information on where the location of the clans are, what side of the west he lives so on and so fort.
zero is the best thing you have to eat dinner for a week or a war on the planet and your life will be fine and the grass will be very good for a long period
I am glad that I chose to read this one. The story is dark and very interesting, although it isn't unrealistically dark and that's what makes it better. The MC is intelligent and calculative but not a total cold douchebag with zero EQ. The world building and the pacing is quite good, I have high hopes for the future development of this novel.
Its a all In all good book no cappppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppp pppppppppp p p p p p p p pp p p p p p p p p p p p p p p po p p p p p p po p p
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Wowowowoww!!!! I always look up for ur writing! I love the way you comprehend everything and u are awesome! I hope your book receive lots of love and gets loved forever! I will always support you just keep writing and do great!!! everyone just dont think anything and start reading!
⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🖐🖐🖐🖐🖐🖐🖐🖐🖐🖐🖐🖐🖐🏼🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳🥳😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎😎🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
Great story and well paced character development. The flow of the first few chapters might be confusing for some but once you get to the main story you get hooked!
So I only started reading this story few days ago. (that being only 4-5days ago) .And let's just say I'm addicted to this now. That itself is a fit because I'm hard to please person when it comes to stories to read. The plot is developing well, it gives out just right amount of mysteries and gets the reader interested then hooks us into itself. Sure there are lots of words overused, fight scenes could also use some work but it's better than most. Especially the rush of new books that are coming in. The author is stable in his updates , characters excellent, they have personality. For anyone only starting to read this story. The read will be totally worth it. Highest praises to you Pever! Look forward to the things you bring to us in the future! 😊❤️😍
An absolutely wonderful book with almost no grammar error. Very great flow of reading and almost everything is easy to understand comprehend and imagine. The world and characters are made thoughtfully and this is not you average novel where things just happen for the plot and because of the plot. Underrated but has a lot of potential. All it needs is a little push.
AS MUCH AS I LOVE THIS STORY WOULD BE GREAT TO SEE OH I DON'T KNOW MAYBE 1 0R 200 CHAPTERS A DAY😹😹😹🤣🤣😁😁🥳🥳🙏😂😂😂😂😂😂😎😎😎😎😎😷😷
This story is pretty gOod. Im On chapter 31 and so far its good. the plot is intresting and its keeping ny intRestd. nothing too special just a cool 😎 lil read so far
Everything about this story is great so far (as of chapter 30). There is excellent world building, a cool headed MC who doesn’t do anything stupid or annoying, and characters that have actual depth to them. I am extremely happy to have stumpled upon this work and made a review for it even though I almost never do. I cannot explain enough how much think you should read this.