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This story is pretty good and it has potential, but the writing could be better. Also the character is a bit too willing to kill other people, considering how terrified he was of possibly dying you would think he wouldn’t kill indiscriminately.
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This looks really good. Waiting to read more.This looks really good. Waiting to read more.This looks really good. Waiting to read more.This looks really good. Waiting to read more.
soooo when is first chapter and exp *\0/*>.<=_=:-(:-[:-(:-[:-[:-(:-[:‑X:-[:‑X=_=:‑XO_o:-((*_*)(+_+):-|:-P:-$:-*O_o:'((*_*):'(:-!:-|:-*:‑X:‑X
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This story is pretty good and it has potential, but the writing could be better. Also the character is a bit too willing to kill other people, considering how terrified he was of possibly dying you would think he wouldn’t kill indiscriminately.
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This looks really good. Waiting to read more.This looks really good. Waiting to read more.This looks really good. Waiting to read more.This looks really good. Waiting to read more.
soooo when is first chapter and exp *\0/*>.<=_=:-(:-[:-(:-[:-[:-(:-[:‑X:-[:‑X=_=:‑XO_o:-((*_*)(+_+):-|:-P:-$:-*O_o:'((*_*):'(:-!:-|:-*:‑X:‑X
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