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honest review I'm giving here is that the kid is like not even 16 and ur trying to make him build a harem it is just really cringe getting Cynthia b/c she has no love interest in cannon was ok but everything else was just so forced and cringy and i only read up to the point were he just officially caught his pokemon.
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I love your work so far. The pace of the story could speed up a bit. Not to the point of skipping over important bits of the story but enough to make it so you say what they’re doing and then skip over the hows and the detailed parts if that part makes it hater for you to release chapters. I love your story and want to read more of it even if the quality takes a few hits because your story is just that good.
I was wondering when you were going to update again . I really love reading your story . I just wish you could write and update faster. Anyways keep up the good work that you do and thanks for the amazing story so far.
I don't have anything to say imma just leave peacefully ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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Well, if you are here for a good read about a Pokémon only fanfic then this is not really for you. No Pokédex and even an if you have agr limit like 16 to travel, the MC behaves like a 10 tear old Boy..a lets say that if you are a ******** pokon fan you will hate this FF. On the other hand, if you like light hearted read with an MC with a huge harém, R-18 scenes wanting to bang all women in pokemon...this is for you. Warning its a slow paced novel and its more like slice of life than anything
Harem harem harem harem 🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤😍😍😍😍😍😍😍🤩🤩🤩😎😎🤩🤩🤩🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤😍😍😍😍😍😎
JUST HOPE THE AUTHOR WILL NOT DROP THIS FAN FIC AND WILL CONTINUE TO WRITE WHILE MAINTAINING THE UPDATE RATE NEW CHAPTERS PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEE 🔥
After reading this fanfic, I finally understood perverts from the highest degree. This story although well written, does not translate to good plot. I dare say this story only focuses on one thing, harem. That is because there is lack of progression before his Pokemon journey at 16 years old. Do you see the problem? He gets his starter too early and decides to not train it meaning he willingly sabotaged his own starter's growth. Even the knowledge he learnt during the years just seems inadequate. Maybe this is because the writer did not have enough knowledge in Pokeverse? This fanfic has such a good starting point that may even use my stones on it but sadly it started to go downhill from there. Various plotholes that didn't even explained properly, weird character interaction and lack of growth of the character in terms of mentality.
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This is my first review but I couldn't help myself. This story is pretty frustrating tbh... The Mc spends his entire life saying how he's gonna become the strongest trainer and get a huge harem. But that's not the bad thing, no because everyone is allowed to have their goals and dreams, but the bad thing is what he does his entire life to prepare for those grand goals, almost nothing lol. Let's take the becoming the strongest trainer part, first of all apparently he has a system but so far it's been so useless that there's not much difference if it's there or not, his whole life he's been training practically like a normal human, just from a young age, so right now he's just a strong normal human... Ever since he was 8 years old he had a ralts as a partner but for 8 years they were together (here they start their pokémon journey at 16) he hasn't done any training whatsoever with it (some might that it's too young or it's illegal because he can't have it as his official partner before he's 16 but that's a total pile of bull because he could've done at least some basic training with it even in secret), so his supposed "foundation building" is null. Forgot to mention that he spends 4 years helping at prof. Oak's lab but the only thing he learns is how, when, what to feed his pokémon 🤦🏼♂️. Now the harem part, Mc (author) wants such a huge harem that will practically contain all the beautiful women of the anime/games (again, that's not a bad thing, depending on how you do it of course), and that's what he keeps talking about all the time, but what does he do to at least be capable of providing for them? Nada, nothing at all, he literally starts his journey with 0 cash 🤣, he's been flirting with a milf for 8 years but all he got was a simple kiss when he's 16 on the day of his journey, that's all. Not to mention that he thinks way way more with his lower head than his upper one lol. Now don't get me wrong, I'm not trashing on the story, the story is very well written with practically no grammar mistakes, just that those parts and some others are beyond annoying so I had to stop for now, and for those that will say "oh you just read a couple of chapters and gave a review without giving it a chance", this review was done after chapter 30ish.
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Me gusto está novela pero no quiero que la abandoné como casi todos los fan-fic también quiero que actualizen mas rápido gracias. 🙏...................................
i feel like this story has potential to be a Good 18+ pokemon novel MC gets a System usual stuff but hereis where good part ends the system sucks all it can do look at stats n store items and do quests which give BS rewards like RL money n pokeballs nothing to Evolve pokemon maybe down the road author decides to add more to the system i see it as a pointless thing that just doesnt deliver to this type of novel he doesnt even use system in general
is good very very very good,incest good, milf good, r-18 (coming soon),Serena loli very good, I super recommend gggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
Heads up! It’s a Pokemon Harem fic. Not sure how that’s going to work but I’m out, just for those who don’t know what world it’s going to be set in as it doesn’t say
Nice awesome wonderfull amazing beautifull bezt novel good writing all anime better than anything good fantastic japanese chinese korean webnovel novel manga anime cartoon
I like the whole character development first unlike any other fics. Also I has a great potential to be a popular and great story. Keep up the good work!
Try it. I think its good. Its future is promising.. Thanks for the read author. Please keep it up.... .......................... . . .........
If I was actually here for the story then my review would've been a bit different. But since I'm here for the harem. I can proudly say that you, my guy, is a true man of culture (like myself).
I am the exp of my Holy Scripture Review. Webnovel is my body, exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless reviews. Unknown to sleep, nor known to reality. I have withstood Cliff-Kun to create many reviews. Yet, these hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray ... Unlimited Exp Works!
READ THIS! This story is still in its forming phase but it is well done so far..........................................................................................................
I dont read yet but i Wil read later it see interesting୧( ಠ Д ಠ )୨୧( ಠ Д ಠ )୨ᕦ(ò_óˇ)ᕤ୧( ಠ Д ಠ )୨ᕙ(ಠ ਊ ಠ)ᕗᕦ⊙෴⊙ᕤᕦ⊙෴⊙ᕤᕙ( ~ . ~ )ᕗᕦ༼ ~ •́ ₒ •̀ ~ ༽ᕤᕙ( ~ . ~ )ᕗᕦ༼ ~ •́ ₒ •̀ ~ ༽ᕤᕙ( ~ . ~ )ᕗᕦ༼ ~ •́ ₒ •̀ ~ ༽ᕤ
It's a good story so far but it's too early to tell how great it will be but I like it. But I think it has a lot of Potential with a great concept behind it. Currently, the world is Pokémon and they have not even started the journey but instead focusing on character development which I approve. I’ve only recently started reading the story so I don’t know about the update. 
honest review I'm giving here is that the kid is like not even 16 and ur trying to make him build a harem it is just really cringe getting Cynthia b/c she has no love interest in cannon was ok but everything else was just so forced and cringy and i only read up to the point were he just officially caught his pokemon.
Spoiler de révélation I love your work so far. The pace of the story could speed up a bit. Not to the point of skipping over important bits of the story but enough to make it so you say what they’re doing and then skip over the hows and the detailed parts if that part makes it hater for you to release chapters. I love your story and want to read more of it even if the quality takes a few hits because your story is just that good.
I was wondering when you were going to update again . I really love reading your story . I just wish you could write and update faster. Anyways keep up the good work that you do and thanks for the amazing story so far.
I don't have anything to say imma just leave peacefully ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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Well, if you are here for a good read about a Pokémon only fanfic then this is not really for you. No Pokédex and even an if you have agr limit like 16 to travel, the MC behaves like a 10 tear old Boy..a lets say that if you are a ******** pokon fan you will hate this FF. On the other hand, if you like light hearted read with an MC with a huge harém, R-18 scenes wanting to bang all women in pokemon...this is for you. Warning its a slow paced novel and its more like slice of life than anything
Harem harem harem harem 🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤😍😍😍😍😍😍😍🤩🤩🤩😎😎🤩🤩🤩🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤😍😍😍😍😍😎
JUST HOPE THE AUTHOR WILL NOT DROP THIS FAN FIC AND WILL CONTINUE TO WRITE WHILE MAINTAINING THE UPDATE RATE NEW CHAPTERS PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEE 🔥
After reading this fanfic, I finally understood perverts from the highest degree. This story although well written, does not translate to good plot. I dare say this story only focuses on one thing, harem. That is because there is lack of progression before his Pokemon journey at 16 years old. Do you see the problem? He gets his starter too early and decides to not train it meaning he willingly sabotaged his own starter's growth. Even the knowledge he learnt during the years just seems inadequate. Maybe this is because the writer did not have enough knowledge in Pokeverse? This fanfic has such a good starting point that may even use my stones on it but sadly it started to go downhill from there. Various plotholes that didn't even explained properly, weird character interaction and lack of growth of the character in terms of mentality.
Spoiler de révélation This is my first review but I couldn't help myself. This story is pretty frustrating tbh... The Mc spends his entire life saying how he's gonna become the strongest trainer and get a huge harem. But that's not the bad thing, no because everyone is allowed to have their goals and dreams, but the bad thing is what he does his entire life to prepare for those grand goals, almost nothing lol. Let's take the becoming the strongest trainer part, first of all apparently he has a system but so far it's been so useless that there's not much difference if it's there or not, his whole life he's been training practically like a normal human, just from a young age, so right now he's just a strong normal human... Ever since he was 8 years old he had a ralts as a partner but for 8 years they were together (here they start their pokémon journey at 16) he hasn't done any training whatsoever with it (some might that it's too young or it's illegal because he can't have it as his official partner before he's 16 but that's a total pile of bull because he could've done at least some basic training with it even in secret), so his supposed "foundation building" is null. Forgot to mention that he spends 4 years helping at prof. Oak's lab but the only thing he learns is how, when, what to feed his pokémon 🤦🏼♂️. Now the harem part, Mc (author) wants such a huge harem that will practically contain all the beautiful women of the anime/games (again, that's not a bad thing, depending on how you do it of course), and that's what he keeps talking about all the time, but what does he do to at least be capable of providing for them? Nada, nothing at all, he literally starts his journey with 0 cash 🤣, he's been flirting with a milf for 8 years but all he got was a simple kiss when he's 16 on the day of his journey, that's all. Not to mention that he thinks way way more with his lower head than his upper one lol. Now don't get me wrong, I'm not trashing on the story, the story is very well written with practically no grammar mistakes, just that those parts and some others are beyond annoying so I had to stop for now, and for those that will say "oh you just read a couple of chapters and gave a review without giving it a chance", this review was done after chapter 30ish.
Spoiler de révélation Me gusto está novela pero no quiero que la abandoné como casi todos los fan-fic también quiero que actualizen mas rápido gracias. 🙏...................................
i feel like this story has potential to be a Good 18+ pokemon novel MC gets a System usual stuff but hereis where good part ends the system sucks all it can do look at stats n store items and do quests which give BS rewards like RL money n pokeballs nothing to Evolve pokemon maybe down the road author decides to add more to the system i see it as a pointless thing that just doesnt deliver to this type of novel he doesnt even use system in general
is good very very very good,incest good, milf good, r-18 (coming soon),Serena loli very good, I super recommend gggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg
Heads up! It’s a Pokemon Harem fic. Not sure how that’s going to work but I’m out, just for those who don’t know what world it’s going to be set in as it doesn’t say
Nice awesome wonderfull amazing beautifull bezt novel good writing all anime better than anything good fantastic japanese chinese korean webnovel novel manga anime cartoon
I like the whole character development first unlike any other fics. Also I has a great potential to be a popular and great story. Keep up the good work!
Try it. I think its good. Its future is promising.. Thanks for the read author. Please keep it up.... .......................... . . .........
If I was actually here for the story then my review would've been a bit different. But since I'm here for the harem. I can proudly say that you, my guy, is a true man of culture (like myself).
I am the exp of my Holy Scripture Review. Webnovel is my body, exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless reviews. Unknown to sleep, nor known to reality. I have withstood Cliff-Kun to create many reviews. Yet, these hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray ... Unlimited Exp Works!
READ THIS! This story is still in its forming phase but it is well done so far..........................................................................................................
I dont read yet but i Wil read later it see interesting୧( ಠ Д ಠ )୨୧( ಠ Д ಠ )୨ᕦ(ò_óˇ)ᕤ୧( ಠ Д ಠ )୨ᕙ(ಠ ਊ ಠ)ᕗᕦ⊙෴⊙ᕤᕦ⊙෴⊙ᕤᕙ( ~ . ~ )ᕗᕦ༼ ~ •́ ₒ •̀ ~ ༽ᕤᕙ( ~ . ~ )ᕗᕦ༼ ~ •́ ₒ •̀ ~ ༽ᕤᕙ( ~ . ~ )ᕗᕦ༼ ~ •́ ₒ •̀ ~ ༽ᕤ
It's a good story so far but it's too early to tell how great it will be but I like it. But I think it has a lot of Potential with a great concept behind it. Currently, the world is Pokémon and they have not even started the journey but instead focusing on character development which I approve. I’ve only recently started reading the story so I don’t know about the update. 
first 13chap was nice then it went downhill