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Evaluation: Subpar (Could've been better if not for the tons of gramm errors). WQ: Multiple gramm errors which is worst than an MTL version without any improvement whatsover. The premise as well as the thought process put into this FF is quite impeccable and refreshing. 3/5 SD: With an average to fast pace of development which is a plus as it wouldn't bore the readers. MCs prerogative was quite amusing as well as the story development as it portray the dark side of HPVerse & a unique way on how to counter plot holes which is a plus the only con is the translation & numerous grammatical errors. 4/5 CD: MCs portrayal as a transmigrator was quite developed as he uses his foreknowledge and out of the box strats' to overcome the schemes and plots of HP-verse. MC doesn't have any gold finger which is a plus and his persona is quite commendable 'chaotic-neutral' which is apt for HPVerse. 4/5 US: Completed story which lacks a bit of a detail. 4/5 WB: There's nothing new as author-san focuses more on out of the box strats that is more inclined in muggle knowledge and reasoning. No other branches of magic are discussed nor developed (e.g. ritual, elemental, ruinic, ancient or etc). 2/5 Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
Its a pretty good Harry Potter fanfiction. The grammar and orthography are fine. The story isn't forced, character development is a bit weak but thats alright. It feels rushed a bit. My biggest problem with the book is that the protagonist loves tossing money at things to make them go away. Ridiculous amounts of money. The issue is he is supposed to be lacking funds when doing this. At one point he offered to employ a journalist for 250-350 galleons a month to write what he tells her. Then he gave her 500 galleons right afterwards because she didn't want to write what he paid her to do! Furthermore, she does almost nothing in the story for how much she's paid. Thats about a thousand galleons wasted on a sassy, reluctant blogger that won't write his blogs!
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Este livro me pareceu ter + de 3 autores diferentes pois o rumo da história muda várias vezes e tem algumas falhas de roteiro avassaladoras , o outro dos ninjas ali provavelmente pegou isso no meio do caminho pra chamar atenção pro outro livro que se provou um fracasso[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The story was not long and was not short it was decent enough, not many fan fiction dictate someone as not having the advantage welp but the MC has the memories but the thing that i don't like is that there wasn't much closer for Hermoine in the story she was only describe a few times especially luna but since the enemy of harry was destroy in the 1st year of hogwarts it alright i say since it complete all the necessary goals of the MC but dang sad for neville die a gruesome death how i wish snape died as well
Its interesting but a mess. I dropped it after 10 chapters. It was horrendous to read but still interesting. also be aware that this hp world is the worst case with some realy fked up plots.
I like your story but I'm really struggling to read it... Some parts its fine, but others it looks completely muddled, like your doing a stream of consciousness or something. Regardless, all can be forgiven if the story's good, it'll just take a while for me to decipher it :P
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It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting.
Cool chapter and story. Cant wait to read more.Cool chapter and story. Cant wait to read more.Cool chapter and story. Cant wait to read more.Cool chapter and story. Cant wait to read more.
Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more.
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Please accept my gratitude. You supported a beginner author. I'm not happy with my first Hungry Potter story. You know I've published a ready-made, fully written novel. I've read the comments and corrected some places. I understand that the opinion of any of my 353 readers has value. Sometimes your wishes are not hard to fulfill. It was not difficult for me to change some episodes in the novel. In the story of Hungry Potter, I learned my degree of depravity. It was hard for me to write a story about a scoundrel who fought fiercely in a cruel world. I love Tarantino. I like to read about evil heroes. I'm well aware of the value of this direction. Everyone loves cats and antiheroes. Now I want to write a long story. I cannot humiliate and destroy the models of great authors. The villains will be smart, cunning, and cute. Not hangry like maddog's. There will be no kind, naive, ordinary heroes. Thank you for your kindness, I leave this page :)
This is actually really good, I honestly didn't expect this level of quality. The premise is fresh and original too, which is always welcome.
It's a funny hard-ass book. Harry started from zero and acts quickly and aggressively. I like evil humor. But his methods are simple and cheeky. There's a lack of completeness in describing the world! Few scenes with Dumbledore and other heroes. It's an action book, not enough adventure. But it's nice to read.
It's a really good novel overall, there are a few inconsistencies and nerfing with regards to canon and canon characters, but they're negligible and most likely temporary (to allow the MC to grow and survive), the nerfing can also be attributed to people underestimating him, there's a heavy reliance on muggle weapons at the beginning (currently), but again temporary for the same reasons (hopefully). The sightly more important flaw is found with the MC's character which tends to be a bit rash and prone to oversimplify situations, but that too can be attributed to his current state of mind, which isn't very stable. In short, it's definately worth a read.
Really good chapter. And Really good story. I am really liking the story. The world building is great. And the main character is also great. Please update more.
Really good chapter and the story. The pace of update is also good. Overall a really good story. Keep updating please. Really good chapter and the story. The pace of update is also good. Overall a really good story. Keep updating please.
Interesting take on Harry Potter fanfic however why does he care so much about the Grangers? I think he didn't even meet Hermione yet? I don't see how random muggle-born family could benefit him and the excuse you used doesn't make sense. So yeah that really takes away from mc personality so far. Also perhaps have pov of other people such as Dumbledore and how they react to the new situations that mc caused because I don't see any reactions for the mc actions and how much he ruined the canon.
one of the most nonsensical and poorly written work I have read in my life. Don't even bother. The high ratings and "good" comments are fake, and the bad comments are mostly deleted by this pos.
Evaluation: Subpar (Could've been better if not for the tons of gramm errors). WQ: Multiple gramm errors which is worst than an MTL version without any improvement whatsover. The premise as well as the thought process put into this FF is quite impeccable and refreshing. 3/5 SD: With an average to fast pace of development which is a plus as it wouldn't bore the readers. MCs prerogative was quite amusing as well as the story development as it portray the dark side of HPVerse & a unique way on how to counter plot holes which is a plus the only con is the translation & numerous grammatical errors. 4/5 CD: MCs portrayal as a transmigrator was quite developed as he uses his foreknowledge and out of the box strats' to overcome the schemes and plots of HP-verse. MC doesn't have any gold finger which is a plus and his persona is quite commendable 'chaotic-neutral' which is apt for HPVerse. 4/5 US: Completed story which lacks a bit of a detail. 4/5 WB: There's nothing new as author-san focuses more on out of the box strats that is more inclined in muggle knowledge and reasoning. No other branches of magic are discussed nor developed (e.g. ritual, elemental, ruinic, ancient or etc). 2/5 Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
Its a pretty good Harry Potter fanfiction. The grammar and orthography are fine. The story isn't forced, character development is a bit weak but thats alright. It feels rushed a bit. My biggest problem with the book is that the protagonist loves tossing money at things to make them go away. Ridiculous amounts of money. The issue is he is supposed to be lacking funds when doing this. At one point he offered to employ a journalist for 250-350 galleons a month to write what he tells her. Then he gave her 500 galleons right afterwards because she didn't want to write what he paid her to do! Furthermore, she does almost nothing in the story for how much she's paid. Thats about a thousand galleons wasted on a sassy, reluctant blogger that won't write his blogs!
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Este livro me pareceu ter + de 3 autores diferentes pois o rumo da história muda várias vezes e tem algumas falhas de roteiro avassaladoras , o outro dos ninjas ali provavelmente pegou isso no meio do caminho pra chamar atenção pro outro livro que se provou um fracasso[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The story was not long and was not short it was decent enough, not many fan fiction dictate someone as not having the advantage welp but the MC has the memories but the thing that i don't like is that there wasn't much closer for Hermoine in the story she was only describe a few times especially luna but since the enemy of harry was destroy in the 1st year of hogwarts it alright i say since it complete all the necessary goals of the MC but dang sad for neville die a gruesome death how i wish snape died as well
Its interesting but a mess. I dropped it after 10 chapters. It was horrendous to read but still interesting. also be aware that this hp world is the worst case with some realy fked up plots.
I like your story but I'm really struggling to read it... Some parts its fine, but others it looks completely muddled, like your doing a stream of consciousness or something. Regardless, all can be forgiven if the story's good, it'll just take a while for me to decipher it :P
👀💙️Thanks for the Book💙👀 👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕👍👏✌➕
It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting. It’s not particularly well written but its interesting.
Cool chapter and story. Cant wait to read more.Cool chapter and story. Cant wait to read more.Cool chapter and story. Cant wait to read more.Cool chapter and story. Cant wait to read more.
Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more. Really good. Please update more.
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Please accept my gratitude. You supported a beginner author. I'm not happy with my first Hungry Potter story. You know I've published a ready-made, fully written novel. I've read the comments and corrected some places. I understand that the opinion of any of my 353 readers has value. Sometimes your wishes are not hard to fulfill. It was not difficult for me to change some episodes in the novel. In the story of Hungry Potter, I learned my degree of depravity. It was hard for me to write a story about a scoundrel who fought fiercely in a cruel world. I love Tarantino. I like to read about evil heroes. I'm well aware of the value of this direction. Everyone loves cats and antiheroes. Now I want to write a long story. I cannot humiliate and destroy the models of great authors. The villains will be smart, cunning, and cute. Not hangry like maddog's. There will be no kind, naive, ordinary heroes. Thank you for your kindness, I leave this page :)
This is actually really good, I honestly didn't expect this level of quality. The premise is fresh and original too, which is always welcome.
It's a funny hard-ass book. Harry started from zero and acts quickly and aggressively. I like evil humor. But his methods are simple and cheeky. There's a lack of completeness in describing the world! Few scenes with Dumbledore and other heroes. It's an action book, not enough adventure. But it's nice to read.
It's a really good novel overall, there are a few inconsistencies and nerfing with regards to canon and canon characters, but they're negligible and most likely temporary (to allow the MC to grow and survive), the nerfing can also be attributed to people underestimating him, there's a heavy reliance on muggle weapons at the beginning (currently), but again temporary for the same reasons (hopefully). The sightly more important flaw is found with the MC's character which tends to be a bit rash and prone to oversimplify situations, but that too can be attributed to his current state of mind, which isn't very stable. In short, it's definately worth a read.
Really good chapter. And Really good story. I am really liking the story. The world building is great. And the main character is also great. Please update more.
Really good chapter and the story. The pace of update is also good. Overall a really good story. Keep updating please. Really good chapter and the story. The pace of update is also good. Overall a really good story. Keep updating please.
Interesting take on Harry Potter fanfic however why does he care so much about the Grangers? I think he didn't even meet Hermione yet? I don't see how random muggle-born family could benefit him and the excuse you used doesn't make sense. So yeah that really takes away from mc personality so far. Also perhaps have pov of other people such as Dumbledore and how they react to the new situations that mc caused because I don't see any reactions for the mc actions and how much he ruined the canon.
one of the most nonsensical and poorly written work I have read in my life. Don't even bother. The high ratings and "good" comments are fake, and the bad comments are mostly deleted by this pos.