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the idea is new and dope..god serena's young bro..its dope. but one thing I will say is MC is too weak considering all the **** he has inside him, he should be easily able to oneshot anyone in his generation, [what I am trying to tell is that MC is neutered despite him having so many powers]......other than that, the stories nice...only suggestion is a OP MC , like **** you OP level, dude has 12 lacrimas inside him, each has godlike potential....add some romance and fluff..just build it, dont make it shallow and ****ty, the harem dont make it massive and no wives/moms, anyway GL...... **: for moon devils layer [or whatever it was]..the power of kyoka suigetsu might be intresting, and for choas...the power of gravity would be nice
the idea is new and dope..god serena's young bro..its dope. but one thing I will say is MC is too weak considering all the **** he has inside him, he should be easily able to oneshot anyone in his generation, [what I am trying to tell is that MC is neutered despite him having so many powers]......other than that, the stories nice...only suggestion is a OP MC , like **** you OP level, dude has 12 lacrimas inside him, each has godlike potential....add some romance and fluff..just build it, dont make it shallow and ****ty, the harem dont make it massive and no wives/moms, anyway GL...... **: for moon devils layer [or whatever it was]..the power of kyoka suigetsu might be intresting, and for choas...the power of gravity would be nice