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Écrire un avisI couldn't get past the 4th chap cause it was just to contridicting like didn't you say you remove gaudlets on the very first page, but just a few pages later you introduce it. then you when the mc ask if he travel to different worlds the system basically states that he has to have a power that allows that but he didn't get it, but 2 chap later the system has a function dealing with world travel. and abilities that the mc gets are just broken especially for the world he's in and then the system says he can't summon a servent that could destroy the universe and balence which stupid since the mc basically does all that he can literally snap his fingers and destroy everything so I'm dropping this novel here since their is literally no thoughts or efforts put into this. the grammar was just terrible and makes it the novel even worst.
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Spoiler de révélationI do not know what to say. Hahaha Manga version of the novel. Nothing good is just bored and bad. I was confused whether I read fanfic novels or manga. Because every chapter Dominated by conversation. As if this manga is not a fanfic novel. So if you as "AUTHOR" You better try to fix this fanfic because it's not clear this is the manga version of the novel or is it really a novel. Don't be stupid if you are a person. Too fast you make fanfic. You better stop because it's a waste of time. If you say "don't read this fanfic because you don't like it" I will tell you "indeed because I don't like it so I'm criticizing you and won't read this fanfic again because I'm going crazy" Hahahahaha
Very good. Can you continue. You should not stop this story. I have see this story. I want to see more of this story. You should not give up open this story.
The first thing he tells the first person he meets is his secret makes this a terrible story in ny oppinion. .....,........................
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First come to get back star if can ,, from first is interesting and good , when come to 10+ chapter become not interesting anymore but u are the author it can't be helped
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Bro you are doing great.... Keep making chapters like this bro... I really like how you dominated the situation with Grafiya and Riser.... I can't wait for the next chapters now....
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Spoiler de révélationFor first is good mc not become other characater , and i like what u want create can travel other world 🤣🤣🤣 ,, btw if u can create Auxiliary for list mc harem and power stat with skill mc already gain so all reader know ,, and I give 5 star for story harem and travel multiverse ( because there many girl and power house that mc can use to beat their ass ) 🤣🤣
Great start bro... Keep working hard. This story has a lot of potential.💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
hmm, I liked the beginning, I thought it would be like the others xdx, where you already know, it has a prologue that it is scientific otaku whatever, then it gives you wishes, among other things, but waking up in the body of one already grown is interesting . ------------------------ harem= I just put these names for you to consider: - Lavinia Reni. - tiamat. - yasaka. - amaterasu. - serafall. - Kuroka. - ravel phenex. - "ingliv of Leviathan". - ophis: it is legal xD. - "le-fall pendragon". - rosewallse. - aika: for her perversion ajja. - Gabriel. etc.
I couldn't get past the 4th chap cause it was just to contridicting like didn't you say you remove gaudlets on the very first page, but just a few pages later you introduce it. then you when the mc ask if he travel to different worlds the system basically states that he has to have a power that allows that but he didn't get it, but 2 chap later the system has a function dealing with world travel. and abilities that the mc gets are just broken especially for the world he's in and then the system says he can't summon a servent that could destroy the universe and balence which stupid since the mc basically does all that he can literally snap his fingers and destroy everything so I'm dropping this novel here since their is literally no thoughts or efforts put into this. the grammar was just terrible and makes it the novel even worst.
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Spoiler de révélationI do not know what to say. Hahaha Manga version of the novel. Nothing good is just bored and bad. I was confused whether I read fanfic novels or manga. Because every chapter Dominated by conversation. As if this manga is not a fanfic novel. So if you as "AUTHOR" You better try to fix this fanfic because it's not clear this is the manga version of the novel or is it really a novel. Don't be stupid if you are a person. Too fast you make fanfic. You better stop because it's a waste of time. If you say "don't read this fanfic because you don't like it" I will tell you "indeed because I don't like it so I'm criticizing you and won't read this fanfic again because I'm going crazy" Hahahahaha
Very good. Can you continue. You should not stop this story. I have see this story. I want to see more of this story. You should not give up open this story.
The first thing he tells the first person he meets is his secret makes this a terrible story in ny oppinion. .....,........................
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First come to get back star if can ,, from first is interesting and good , when come to 10+ chapter become not interesting anymore but u are the author it can't be helped
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Bro you are doing great.... Keep making chapters like this bro... I really like how you dominated the situation with Grafiya and Riser.... I can't wait for the next chapters now....
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Spoiler de révélationFor first is good mc not become other characater , and i like what u want create can travel other world 🤣🤣🤣 ,, btw if u can create Auxiliary for list mc harem and power stat with skill mc already gain so all reader know ,, and I give 5 star for story harem and travel multiverse ( because there many girl and power house that mc can use to beat their ass ) 🤣🤣
Great start bro... Keep working hard. This story has a lot of potential.💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
hmm, I liked the beginning, I thought it would be like the others xdx, where you already know, it has a prologue that it is scientific otaku whatever, then it gives you wishes, among other things, but waking up in the body of one already grown is interesting . ------------------------ harem= I just put these names for you to consider: - Lavinia Reni. - tiamat. - yasaka. - amaterasu. - serafall. - Kuroka. - ravel phenex. - "ingliv of Leviathan". - ophis: it is legal xD. - "le-fall pendragon". - rosewallse. - aika: for her perversion ajja. - Gabriel. etc.
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