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**** you harem ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
better than the original!!!....................................................................................................................................................
Awesomse , don't be a harem novel pls🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗☣️🤗☣️☣️🤗☣️🤗☣️☣️☣️☣️☣️☣️☣️
What I would like to see is a Cultivation Novel with a Love interest that is actually competent and doesn't get overshadowed completely by the MC until forgotten. Harems are great and all but there's really no point to them unless they can actively or passively help the MC. As for Harem members being necessary to the plot... they aren't you can simply have the harem girls saved by MC who was paid to do so
So much bad reviews just because of no harem. I mean there are literally 100 or more harem novel out there just read those. I know that in the main novel MC womens played a big role but remember that this is a fan-fic. And @Neelthakur(author) bhai tu liktha acha laga tera fan-fic padkar. 🤘
Just need more updates.....and lemons if u can hehe👍👍👍🤙🤙🤙👌👌👌👌👌👌🤙🤙👌👍👌👌👍👌👍👌👌👌👌👌🤙🤙👌👌🤙🤙👌👌👌👌👌👌👌🤙👌🤙👌👌🤙👌🤙👌🤙👌🤙👌👌🤙🤙👌🤙
The writing and execution is quite good. But the harem thing really is a bother. It wont be this frustrating to read if you make another character as your novel mc. Making og mc not have a harem is kinda remove the motivation to read this. Cuz you cant help but compare and remember the og while reading a ff. It wont be much if your mc is another guy, he can have just one partner and it will not be a problem but if you choose a harem king in the og as your mc and take away his girls... then it lower the excitement in reading this. The result is already in front of your eye. Even though your writing is good, better than most in the top 50. It still did not even reach top 100(for now). It really is not much if you dont want to have a harem, but choose a different mc and not the og mc. You can make an oc with a different and better advantage/bloodline or be a twin.Beside your mc in this ff already take a different path than the og mc. If you want eggy as the partner there many different path to take. Like be a twin and you got eggy and he got the cat or extracting eggy.
Well I did not like this story mainly because of few reason 1. Mc doesn’t have extra golden finger other than original. If that was not enough he doesn’t even know about MGA. Which feels like Author is just writing original novel with few tweaks. 2. No harem - MGA novel an no harem is like cookie without milk. It just doesn’t feel right. 3. It just doesn’t have the spark to hold you to read it. After about 30 chapters I was bored to death. I just couldn’t keep reading anymore . It’s my opinion. But best of luck with your novel. Others may like it but I just feel it didn’t have the spark to keep me interested
Just No 😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓
Spoiler de révélation Excellent plot and hero is not thinking with his lower body he actually understood strength is respected ... I like it and don't drop the novel in midway please🤗🤗🤗🤗😊😊😊😊😊
I hope you don't drop it. I also hope that Xue Ji would have a different future unlike in the original. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
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This story doesn't disappoint . I urge you all to ignore that idiotic 1 star review. If you've ever gotten frustrated with all the retarded **** that happens in these Xianxia stories, read this. No fucking young masters tripping over themselves to suicide to MC, no annoying bitches with jade like skin, no greedy old elders. This MC is low key when he needs to be and domineering when he needs to be. If MGA was written like this the story would x1000 better.
Хорошая замена оригиналу. Оригинальную книгу читал 1,5 года назад, поэтому многие события в начале романа не помню, и из-за этого интерес к ФФ повышен. Гарем, не гарем, для меня разницы нет, но занижать из-за этого оценку глупо. Пока что глобальных изменений в сюжете нет, т.к. фактически сейчас идёт пролог, где ГГ знакомится с миром и расстановкой сил, что для меня является плюсом, т.к. я много не помню, но автор в дальнейшем собирается всё больше отходить от оригинала. A good replacement for the original. I read the original book 1.5 years ago, so I do not remember many events at the beginning of the novel, and because of this, interest in FF is increased. Harem, not harem, for me there is no difference, but underestimate because of this assessment is stupid. So far, there are no global changes in the plot, because actually now there is a prologue, where MC gets acquainted with the world and the balance of forces, which is a plus for me, because I don't remember much, but the author is going to move away from the original more and more in the future.
He is more naive than the boy in the novel, and what is his use as a secret agent In his old life if he is not determined and clever, why is he then a ferry? But keep going, you have my luck hat support for the rest......no harem is a good idea
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I haven't read the fic yet but I see there's a lot of low stars review is simply because of the "no harem" tag...... The Hell? It's not like relationship between a man and a woman can only be lover, they can be friend too or am I the weird one here? Consider there's a sh*t ton of novel that's not a harem got turn into harem in a fanfic and most people don't complain, why can't there be an opposite as well? People are being unreasonable, the review section is to review about the story itself, who care if it's harem or not? It's like giving a bad review to a story simply because they don't like the genres of a novel, it's ridiculous. Thank you for your hard work, author san.
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The 4 stars in story background and character development is only due to the fact that I haven’t read many chapters yet. The only suggestion I wish to give in this case is that as you have made the have no harem, then make sure that he doesn’t abandon the second Asura spirit he has in his mindscape as it was done in the original. Personally, I feel most of Chu Feng’s problems came from his unnecessary “wives/lovers” and the other would be his arrogance. As you seem to have tamed the two then you can work more on the few people he can acknowledge and make the relationship they have more stronger.
incredible how many bad comments, but mainly for the reason of not having a harem ... what an idiotic reason as a mga has to have a harem or it will not be good ... the story so far is good and you are criticizing for something without reason, give a chance for the author !!!
OK I tried reading it. I read all the reviews.and this is what I got... If you want to draw MGA fans. and you do not want it to be a harem make your own unique MC not in Chu fengs body....Its like writing a DxD as Issei and hating girls and hating boobs and he wont join any peerage cuz he is edgy...ya it will be boring crap...GL.
Chu Feng without a harem ruins the entire story considering almost every girl in his harem are integral parts of the plot in the novel **. Yes I already know somebody pretty much said this in another review but I wanted to make sure it's said a second time to really stress the fact that without his harem almost the entire plot would be f*****
It's pretty much the original novel from what I've read so far. Nothing new besides him remembering his past life. If he had said past life experience then why isn't he using it? He feels like the ignorant and naive Chu Feng from the novel.
don't mind this bunch of perverts who just want to harem, their story is good keep it up!........................................................................................................................
MGA without a harem, trashhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
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It feels like the mc is still the original author's mc, the mc doesn't have any knowledge about MGA in this fanfic, his past knowledge from earth is useless, it's a torture for reader that knows about MGA because we knows our new fanfic's MC is a new copy chu feng with only little change, it feels like reading original MGA and that's boring me to the end.
Really like the direction this is heading, don’t drop. You could also prob end up bringing him to other cultivation worlds once he reaches the peak here, keep it up 👍.
Just curious who the MC is going to end up with? Is it Eggy? Hehee. I sure hope so since I think she is the best girl in the actual novel itself.
There are very few MGA fanfics almost none. This story have nice concept and right amount of OPness considering its a xianxia. Though you can create a small harem of 3-4 females including Su sisters and and the divine body girl who he meets in emperor tomb
I don't know how you'll do it if not for harem...who you'll choose among all of em.....Cuz it literally downright changes the plot like, if you don't take su sisters then there's no moon immortal plot and then no xuantian interaction....and if you gonna opt between xue ji and eggy then you gonna what let the cat take her and get cucked or leave the divine body zi ling and get cucked or leave everyone else and get cucked ....I can see you getting cucked everywhere.....you know what makes a novel good in my opinion, you can **** whatever you want in the plot but you can't effectively try to interfere with the actual genre and if you're doing it to a great masterpiece, you'll have to provide sufficient reasoning to back your thinking not a lame excuse like he got killed by his girlfriend and he won't love girls.... But since you put the romance tag, it would mean that he moved on but he still isn't accepting them then why is it so? We need justification..
**** you harem ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
better than the original!!!....................................................................................................................................................
Awesomse , don't be a harem novel pls🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗🤗☣️🤗☣️☣️🤗☣️🤗☣️☣️☣️☣️☣️☣️☣️
What I would like to see is a Cultivation Novel with a Love interest that is actually competent and doesn't get overshadowed completely by the MC until forgotten. Harems are great and all but there's really no point to them unless they can actively or passively help the MC. As for Harem members being necessary to the plot... they aren't you can simply have the harem girls saved by MC who was paid to do so
So much bad reviews just because of no harem. I mean there are literally 100 or more harem novel out there just read those. I know that in the main novel MC womens played a big role but remember that this is a fan-fic. And @Neelthakur(author) bhai tu liktha acha laga tera fan-fic padkar. 🤘
Just need more updates.....and lemons if u can hehe👍👍👍🤙🤙🤙👌👌👌👌👌👌🤙🤙👌👍👌👌👍👌👍👌👌👌👌👌🤙🤙👌👌🤙🤙👌👌👌👌👌👌👌🤙👌🤙👌👌🤙👌🤙👌🤙👌🤙👌👌🤙🤙👌🤙
The writing and execution is quite good. But the harem thing really is a bother. It wont be this frustrating to read if you make another character as your novel mc. Making og mc not have a harem is kinda remove the motivation to read this. Cuz you cant help but compare and remember the og while reading a ff. It wont be much if your mc is another guy, he can have just one partner and it will not be a problem but if you choose a harem king in the og as your mc and take away his girls... then it lower the excitement in reading this. The result is already in front of your eye. Even though your writing is good, better than most in the top 50. It still did not even reach top 100(for now). It really is not much if you dont want to have a harem, but choose a different mc and not the og mc. You can make an oc with a different and better advantage/bloodline or be a twin.Beside your mc in this ff already take a different path than the og mc. If you want eggy as the partner there many different path to take. Like be a twin and you got eggy and he got the cat or extracting eggy.
Well I did not like this story mainly because of few reason 1. Mc doesn’t have extra golden finger other than original. If that was not enough he doesn’t even know about MGA. Which feels like Author is just writing original novel with few tweaks. 2. No harem - MGA novel an no harem is like cookie without milk. It just doesn’t feel right. 3. It just doesn’t have the spark to hold you to read it. After about 30 chapters I was bored to death. I just couldn’t keep reading anymore . It’s my opinion. But best of luck with your novel. Others may like it but I just feel it didn’t have the spark to keep me interested
Just No 😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓😓
Spoiler de révélation Excellent plot and hero is not thinking with his lower body he actually understood strength is respected ... I like it and don't drop the novel in midway please🤗🤗🤗🤗😊😊😊😊😊
I hope you don't drop it. I also hope that Xue Ji would have a different future unlike in the original. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Spoiler de révélation This story doesn't disappoint . I urge you all to ignore that idiotic 1 star review. If you've ever gotten frustrated with all the retarded **** that happens in these Xianxia stories, read this. No fucking young masters tripping over themselves to suicide to MC, no annoying bitches with jade like skin, no greedy old elders. This MC is low key when he needs to be and domineering when he needs to be. If MGA was written like this the story would x1000 better.
Хорошая замена оригиналу. Оригинальную книгу читал 1,5 года назад, поэтому многие события в начале романа не помню, и из-за этого интерес к ФФ повышен. Гарем, не гарем, для меня разницы нет, но занижать из-за этого оценку глупо. Пока что глобальных изменений в сюжете нет, т.к. фактически сейчас идёт пролог, где ГГ знакомится с миром и расстановкой сил, что для меня является плюсом, т.к. я много не помню, но автор в дальнейшем собирается всё больше отходить от оригинала. A good replacement for the original. I read the original book 1.5 years ago, so I do not remember many events at the beginning of the novel, and because of this, interest in FF is increased. Harem, not harem, for me there is no difference, but underestimate because of this assessment is stupid. So far, there are no global changes in the plot, because actually now there is a prologue, where MC gets acquainted with the world and the balance of forces, which is a plus for me, because I don't remember much, but the author is going to move away from the original more and more in the future.
He is more naive than the boy in the novel, and what is his use as a secret agent In his old life if he is not determined and clever, why is he then a ferry? But keep going, you have my luck hat support for the rest......no harem is a good idea
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I haven't read the fic yet but I see there's a lot of low stars review is simply because of the "no harem" tag...... The Hell? It's not like relationship between a man and a woman can only be lover, they can be friend too or am I the weird one here? Consider there's a sh*t ton of novel that's not a harem got turn into harem in a fanfic and most people don't complain, why can't there be an opposite as well? People are being unreasonable, the review section is to review about the story itself, who care if it's harem or not? It's like giving a bad review to a story simply because they don't like the genres of a novel, it's ridiculous. Thank you for your hard work, author san.
Spoiler de révélation The 4 stars in story background and character development is only due to the fact that I haven’t read many chapters yet. The only suggestion I wish to give in this case is that as you have made the have no harem, then make sure that he doesn’t abandon the second Asura spirit he has in his mindscape as it was done in the original. Personally, I feel most of Chu Feng’s problems came from his unnecessary “wives/lovers” and the other would be his arrogance. As you seem to have tamed the two then you can work more on the few people he can acknowledge and make the relationship they have more stronger.
incredible how many bad comments, but mainly for the reason of not having a harem ... what an idiotic reason as a mga has to have a harem or it will not be good ... the story so far is good and you are criticizing for something without reason, give a chance for the author !!!
OK I tried reading it. I read all the reviews.and this is what I got... If you want to draw MGA fans. and you do not want it to be a harem make your own unique MC not in Chu fengs body....Its like writing a DxD as Issei and hating girls and hating boobs and he wont join any peerage cuz he is edgy...ya it will be boring crap...GL.
Chu Feng without a harem ruins the entire story considering almost every girl in his harem are integral parts of the plot in the novel **. Yes I already know somebody pretty much said this in another review but I wanted to make sure it's said a second time to really stress the fact that without his harem almost the entire plot would be f*****
It's pretty much the original novel from what I've read so far. Nothing new besides him remembering his past life. If he had said past life experience then why isn't he using it? He feels like the ignorant and naive Chu Feng from the novel.
don't mind this bunch of perverts who just want to harem, their story is good keep it up!........................................................................................................................
MGA without a harem, trashhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
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It feels like the mc is still the original author's mc, the mc doesn't have any knowledge about MGA in this fanfic, his past knowledge from earth is useless, it's a torture for reader that knows about MGA because we knows our new fanfic's MC is a new copy chu feng with only little change, it feels like reading original MGA and that's boring me to the end.
Really like the direction this is heading, don’t drop. You could also prob end up bringing him to other cultivation worlds once he reaches the peak here, keep it up 👍.
Just curious who the MC is going to end up with? Is it Eggy? Hehee. I sure hope so since I think she is the best girl in the actual novel itself.
There are very few MGA fanfics almost none. This story have nice concept and right amount of OPness considering its a xianxia. Though you can create a small harem of 3-4 females including Su sisters and and the divine body girl who he meets in emperor tomb
I don't know how you'll do it if not for harem...who you'll choose among all of em.....Cuz it literally downright changes the plot like, if you don't take su sisters then there's no moon immortal plot and then no xuantian interaction....and if you gonna opt between xue ji and eggy then you gonna what let the cat take her and get cucked or leave the divine body zi ling and get cucked or leave everyone else and get cucked ....I can see you getting cucked everywhere.....you know what makes a novel good in my opinion, you can **** whatever you want in the plot but you can't effectively try to interfere with the actual genre and if you're doing it to a great masterpiece, you'll have to provide sufficient reasoning to back your thinking not a lame excuse like he got killed by his girlfriend and he won't love girls.... But since you put the romance tag, it would mean that he moved on but he still isn't accepting them then why is it so? We need justification..