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It's alright and a good read, a little concerning for character ages in later parts. I don't really get why he dislike Tanaka? I'm guessing he's jealous that he got the manager or something? Idk seems pretty decent either way.
It is a wonderful story. Please keep The update🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆
I like the Story a lot. I hope you will, continue this story soon. Your writing style is really good. I hope you will make shoyo and yachi a couple in the future.
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Though I still haven't read this I'll still rate it like this. I really like haikyuu so I'll wait if the chapter gets around 20+ before I read, please dont stop writing..
Oh mighty lazy dragon zero, i am shamelessly give this site Five Stars, even though i think this works still not perfect, but i can't denied that this fanfic slightly better than the old version. All Hail Lazy Dragon Zero! Oops that's me 😅😆
Love it his character is cool and funny at the same time. Does he have all 3 haki? Or just observation though? Cause he made the whole classroom faint from his pressure. Also just a suggestion but maybe tone down the hate for Tanaka and just treat him as a background character or comic relief with the occasionally tsukkome from him since the main character is so much better then him in everything he doesn’t need to go out of his way to keep him down since itd be beneath him and make him look petty, just let him be like Sugwara in his second season and sub in when there’s injury or people are tired, I mean he is a half way decent player and can add some humor to the story.
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This story is great. I thought that I would never see a non yaoi haikyuu story with a male mc in it........................................
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Good one i like it. Please update more often if you can 🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉
The idea is good but the execution is horrendous. In my opinion that is. author can you please stop trying to be funny because it just gets cringe. And stop making 11 year old's act like 16 year-old horny teenagers. Its quite disgusting. Saying you will make an eleven year old cum non stop. I just hope the annoying forth walls stop, besides that I have nothing leaft to say.
Nice story.... good background..... nice development... slightly slow noo not slightly... very slow noo but its ok overall great story just make it more evolving like he can copy anything i mean ANYTHING like not just sports because its perfect copy it can copy ALL.... try to combine shokugeki no somaa??? Nooo nevermind just update fast...
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5 stars so you don't fall - - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -
The stars are simply because I like the concept...I dont really know what to ask as this is a sports fanfic...but eh? Make the MC better than others....romance and fluff [if harem max 5],.....no sad ****.anyway goodluck
It's interesting and I like the writing style, but please add more words. Will this have a Harem genre? I hope the author will add some women to Akira, because in my opinion, Shimizu alone is not enough to hold Akira's stamina.
It was great at first .... But. As the story it got not so goood but overall it was a very much appreciatable story but the game parts need More exhilaration
It's alright and a good read, a little concerning for character ages in later parts. I don't really get why he dislike Tanaka? I'm guessing he's jealous that he got the manager or something? Idk seems pretty decent either way.
It is a wonderful story. Please keep The update🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏐🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏅🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆🏆
I like the Story a lot. I hope you will, continue this story soon. Your writing style is really good. I hope you will make shoyo and yachi a couple in the future.
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Spoiler de révélation Though I still haven't read this I'll still rate it like this. I really like haikyuu so I'll wait if the chapter gets around 20+ before I read, please dont stop writing..
Oh mighty lazy dragon zero, i am shamelessly give this site Five Stars, even though i think this works still not perfect, but i can't denied that this fanfic slightly better than the old version. All Hail Lazy Dragon Zero! Oops that's me 😅😆
Love it his character is cool and funny at the same time. Does he have all 3 haki? Or just observation though? Cause he made the whole classroom faint from his pressure. Also just a suggestion but maybe tone down the hate for Tanaka and just treat him as a background character or comic relief with the occasionally tsukkome from him since the main character is so much better then him in everything he doesn’t need to go out of his way to keep him down since itd be beneath him and make him look petty, just let him be like Sugwara in his second season and sub in when there’s injury or people are tired, I mean he is a half way decent player and can add some humor to the story.
Spoiler de révélation This story is great. I thought that I would never see a non yaoi haikyuu story with a male mc in it........................................
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Good one i like it. Please update more often if you can 🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉
The idea is good but the execution is horrendous. In my opinion that is. author can you please stop trying to be funny because it just gets cringe. And stop making 11 year old's act like 16 year-old horny teenagers. Its quite disgusting. Saying you will make an eleven year old cum non stop. I just hope the annoying forth walls stop, besides that I have nothing leaft to say.
Nice story.... good background..... nice development... slightly slow noo not slightly... very slow noo but its ok overall great story just make it more evolving like he can copy anything i mean ANYTHING like not just sports because its perfect copy it can copy ALL.... try to combine shokugeki no somaa??? Nooo nevermind just update fast...
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5 stars so you don't fall - - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -- - - - -
The stars are simply because I like the concept...I dont really know what to ask as this is a sports fanfic...but eh? Make the MC better than others....romance and fluff [if harem max 5],.....no sad ****.anyway goodluck
It's interesting and I like the writing style, but please add more words. Will this have a Harem genre? I hope the author will add some women to Akira, because in my opinion, Shimizu alone is not enough to hold Akira's stamina.
It was great at first .... But. As the story it got not so goood but overall it was a very much appreciatable story but the game parts need More exhilaration