Is that a Wisp?

Hmm. Rough. World building needs help, character building as well. A bit forced overall. Editing good, but needs more captivation to appeal to a larger audience.

This will be pretty long, sorry in advance. I want to start by saying how much I love this story, however even the best book can have problems. So here’s my two cents on the matter. The start is interesting and had me thinking the same as the main character for awhile. It picks up really quickly and gets seriously interesting after he decides to set out alone, but around chapter 40-50ish there is a lot of over used gags, unlikeable characters and useless plot threads. Though these clear up around chapter 80 it still had moments that made me think certain characters would make other appearances rather than just be one offs. Of The two who survived the MC’s first encounter with people after gaining his new cultivation technique, only one is relevant and is soon forgotten entirely. The couple who told the MC about how humans wear clothes are told to say MC’s name if they are ever in need, but that never comes up again. I could go on, because this never really changes. There are at least a dozen characters I thought would stick around, or be important later only to have been sidelined completely. Hell even the main cast gets a complete overhaul at one point. It’s done very well, but still sucks that we won’t see certain characters for afew hundred chapters. It’s true that as one cultivates one can live for hundreds of thousands of years, so all these characters might reappear eventually. But doesn’t make me feel any better knowing it’s only a possibility. There is a lot that’s hyped up and then just forgotten right after. Like the Spiritas. While it was my mistake to treat them like energy beings and not like elvish humanoids, I still felt disappointed that we didn’t see anything from them despite the way they were hyped. That being said, afew more humanoid races wouldn’t hurt. Humans are one thing. And demon beast are incredibly varied, but other life forms that have colonized their worlds and expanded across the Many universes could add a lot to the story. Instead of just having everyone be either human, or demon beast in human form. As the story goes on this kind of thing only becomes more apparent. But the story does improve constantly. After taking advice from the fans the story only got better. Especially with character development and world building. Even the grammar and punctuation improved. For awhile it wasn’t easy to read certain lines, but this is corrected, though not perfect, it’s still easy to understand and has only afew small mistakes. After certain annoying characters start to turn around for the better and the repeated jokes come to a halt the story improves drastically. But if your not into romance and expect nothing from the MC be prepared, because, while the romance doesn’t appear till afew hundred chapters in, once it does it will always be there and constantly expand as new couples form and more and more hybrid children are created. The underdog concept the MC has from being a wisp is basically nonexistent. You can’t call him an underdog in any sense of the word. He is a literal genius at everything he does. The story makes that apparent really quick too. Even at the first realm of cultivation the MC is remarkably more powerful and skilled in almost every way than the cultivators and demon beasts around him. And this continues throughout the story and is one of his defining traits. He is an OP blacksmith, alchemist and technically a puppet master aswell. He barely needs to try for most of what he does and things often fall into his lap without much strenuous effort. This is either because of the MC’s personality and the effects from decisions and choices made by the MC and his crew, or because there’s a powerful being pulling strings behind the scenes. Either way he is the centre of attention. Much to his annoyance since he hates to bring unwanted gazes, but seems not to realize how seriously amazing he is compared to everyone else. He isn’t humble at all but doesn’t come off too overconfident all the time. Sometimes his personality is annoying though. Like when he treats two enemies like fodder and talks as if they aren’t even there. Or when he casually says how he too wields a special type of law and is in the advanced stage, while said person in in the initial stage. Making her feel less special and pathetic compared to him. He does that kind of thing a lot with his friends. Showing them up without realizing it and complaining when they call him out, or acting as if he doesn’t understand. And one of the best concepts I found interesting at the start was the Wisps short lifespan, i was really curious how the writer would balance the MC’s struggle as he found his friends surpassing him in cultivation and his lifespan coming to an end, him finding the limits of his race and needing to push beyond, but that is literally not even close to a problem for the MC. I mean seriously every wisp ever born has worried about their lifespan and the MC logically assumes he’ll need to worry when he reaches a higher level, so he makes preparations. Getting a long dead wisps technique to ensure he can make a breakthrough to extend his lifespan before it runs out. Only it isn’t needed and goes almost forgotten for hundreds of chapters. I love a lot of the stuff in this story, but it’s annoying to think of people like the MC in the real world. No matter how hard you try, if you don’t have talent you’ll only get so far. And if you meet someone overflowing with talent who works just as hard, then what was the point of trying in the first place. For every step a normal person makes the MC makes three more and then looks back and takes another step just for the sake of proving how amazing he is. I like how he helps his friends and doesn’t take pleasure in killing. His choice of equipment reflects this and Fits very well. But He just seems TOO PERFECT. Annoyingly so at times. The main characters elemental control is basically godlike and helps in everything he does. Whether it’s helping his friends improve their own elemental control, or engaging in Combat and cultivation. Even things like blacksmithing, alchemy, formations and ‘puppetry‘ are all dominated by the MC. This isn’t really that big of a problem just something I noticed and thought was weird. It does suck that his elemental control isn’t used to its fullest though . Since the writer likes to use the same few attacks over and over. I love the way these attacks have developed and evolved over the course of the story, but it seriously limits what could be done. The MC will always have an elemental advantage against any opponent of the same realm and even against ones in higher realms to an extent. Yet this power is rarely used The way it could be. With all the elements the MC should have a massive arsenal of unique elemental fusions and skills that make the most of his level of control, but the same few techniques get used over and over. He should use the best elements for each adversary, not just spam whatever’s convenient. So many techniques have been forgotten or just go unused. After every fight the MC should either develop a new technique or use the techniques of his past opponents to constantly improve his skills. Especially since he can see a technique once and replicate it with ease. The side characters are fleshed out pretty well and done properly, but some of them just feel like they exist and don’t really contribute to the plot in any way shape or form. The MC also has knowledge of countless languages and strives to learn them all, but this is only really mentioned or relevant once. The MC also has a master that barley does master like things and this transmits into the MC who has his own disciple, but only really guides his protégée occasionally. It feels less like a master, disciple relationship and more like a student, teacher one from school. Say some stuff, show some stuff and have them do it themselves before you test them. Instead of spending time guiding and aiding personally and slowly, like a master should. Instead they leave everything up to their disciples. I get that a sense of individuality is Needed and they can’t baby them, but I expected alittle more. Overall a great story with a lot of room to grow. If I were the writer I would make the MC hit a wall during his cultivation. A wall larger and harder than anyone around him. That way the struggle would return and it wouldn’t feel like cultivation was so easy. It’s supposed to be going against the heavens after all, so it shouldn’t be a walk in the park. Not that it has been completely easy for the MC and his group. It just feels they face less adversity than others while progressing faster and growing all around more powerful. I’ve never liked the concept in any story of someone only being afew decades old and being able to hold their own against someone who has lived for hundreds, even thousands of years. When stories do that kind of thing, it ruins the enjoyment for me. So I hope the MC doesn’t continue growing exponentially faster and stronger than everyone else around him. Again sorry for the Long review. I just had a lot to say. I’ve been reading this from long before it went premium, so I hope it continues to improve and thank you for writing such an interesting novel. If you’ve read this far thank you. I would have put more of why I enjoy this series, but I feel it was covered in most of the other reviews.

This is one of my favourite novels on this site. I saw some pretty large reviews recently on other books so I thought I’d make a decent one of my own since it’s been awhile. To start of The main character is extremely intelligent, interesting and fun to read about. He’s pretty much a genius and loves to improve, learn and help those who need it. Especially his friends and family. Many of the reviews I’ve seen complain about things that pretty much disappear by chapter 80. The author is very active and interacts with his fans. Taking criticism and improving as he writes has allowed the story to grow naturally along with the main character. It makes this story all the more unique in my eyes. Because of the MC’s naive and humble beginnings we learn much of the world through his eyes and it is always a breath of fresh air. The side characters aren’t very developed at first, seemingly only their for comedy (which sadly falls flat sometimes), or they can be described pretty easily, but as with everything in the story they only get better the longer it goes on. I have noticed afew faults here and there. The grammar was difficult to sit through after awhile in the beginning. Though this isn’t really a consistent problem. The odd mistake here and there still pop up. Which is completely understandable mind you. There are also multiple plot points that are skipped over. Though minor they may be. One of my favourite scenes in this story is Krune’s battle with the fire dragon Gomat and I was hyped for him to FINALLY get a sparring partner he could consider his equal. Yet this is FAR from what happened as Krune used the battle to learn Gomat’s blue flame skill before improving it and making an even more powerful version immediately putting him above the badass dragon. He’s also never mentioned again. Colen and Nala are in similar situations though I wasn’t nearly as hyped for them. Before leaving the Makui planet Shinja trashes the common young master and he swears his revenge. Though the mans father isn’t stupid and would rather see him learn his lesson and grow than go out and take revenge on his behalf, especially since Shinja has such potential. Which was awesome to see as its not very common in stories like this. It stuck with me because these people are never brought up again. The way the wisp’s of the Dalin universe use their ethereal bodies during combat is likewise forgotten. I thought it was so cool when I first read about it, but it’s only mentioned the one time. It’s not even brought up after the MC sends a message back to the Luvile universe. It contained cultivation techniques and skills, but no mention of this unique way Wisps can use their bodies to fight. It’s not even brought up when the MC is training his daughter. Even though she has a wisp-like ethereal flame of her own. (Which even after she gains control over it I imagine it flaring up with her emotions) Weapon intent is all but forgotten. Though seeing as there aren’t many characters who wield weapons it makes sense. The fact Krune is tempering his physical body with tribulation lightning is never really mentioned again either. Though he can withstand more than two and a half times the maximum output he was once able to, his body is still considered fairly average and even weak. I know he’s a wisp, so this can also be forgiven. I just thought it might be a plot point considering covering your weaknesses and making them into strengths is usually a big part of cultivation novels. Not that he’d need his body since he’s a long range combatant anyway. Something that I was always excited about but never happen was after Krune improved Gomats blue flame by combining it with Tribulation lightning to create the purple flame. Light Spirit/Little light/Luvile then says something like “I wonder if he’ll be able to make the others” making me assume we would get multiple elements that were enhanced and merged with the purple tribulation power. Though this was my own speculation, what light spirit meant is never explained. There’s a pretty big change in cast half way through the story. Not really a complaint or warning, just a heads up. It’s a pretty neat way to do it too. I do miss many characters and want to see the results of many things that won’t be shown for awhile Though. Like Mile and Barry’s relationship. How the Makui world has developed after Krune left. And what the lizard dragons are up to. I had imagined them to be main characters when they were just there for the main character to help and show how caring and non murderous he is. (Which is another trait I love about him) I also feel like sound laws should be a thing.😅 All in all this is a great story. Things tend to be forgotten in long running stories like this, the author is very good at balancing the way he writes. Many plot points are left behind, but they all feel like things that may be relevant later on, so I truly can’t wait to see how this story develops further. And P.S Author Thanks for writing this wonderful story.