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I hope u do not drop this novel because it have a good story development and comedy scene.Hope fix you english writing grammer .Please continue this novel.It very very very innntressstinggggg
Wish u could continue ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ
Meh too boring, should have put a warning regarding your terrible grammar author-san. But I like the idea about Trafalgal Law's power in dxd too bad you suck as a writerโ
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Look the concept is good but WTF you doing author???....the MC is training others...he is OP one moment and a ***** the next..immediately friends with a person that tried to kill him before??? like seriously..the ****?
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Thanks for the fan-fic she's great, me and my friends are really enjoying it, so please keep up the great work and don't mind the comments, because if it's not a compliment or a good criticism or care, we can't please all.
Plots good and fun. Grammar sucks. Fighting scenes are copied from naruto. That's said I'd like to read more with better gearr and lost....
5 stars for simple fact that i wanted a dxd fic with laws powers------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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I agree with PaperCrow with the Law powers in DxD but the gender swap kinda put me off along with suddenly being well off all of a sudden, overall nice plot but not my cup of tea.
-spelling errors and grammar errors on the chapters -mc is not afraid to kill when its his first to kill -does'nt armament have condition to be only used when you have strong body? -hakis except conquerer's haki are instantly master
i dont know sh*t about what ur like as a writer or anything but im giving you 5 stars forth simple fact that ive wanted a dxd fic with laws powers and even thought about writing one so please dont drop this or make the MC an idiot whose every other thought is about a girls boobs
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I hope u do not drop this novel because it have a good story development and comedy scene.Hope fix you english writing grammer .Please continue this novel.It very very very innntressstinggggg
Wish u could continue ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ๐ด๓ ง๓ ข๓ ฅ๓ ฎ๓ ง๓ ฟ
Meh too boring, should have put a warning regarding your terrible grammar author-san. But I like the idea about Trafalgal Law's power in dxd too bad you suck as a writerโ
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Spoiler de rรฉvรฉlation Look the concept is good but WTF you doing author???....the MC is training others...he is OP one moment and a ***** the next..immediately friends with a person that tried to kill him before??? like seriously..the ****?
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Thanks for the fan-fic she's great, me and my friends are really enjoying it, so please keep up the great work and don't mind the comments, because if it's not a compliment or a good criticism or care, we can't please all.
Plots good and fun. Grammar sucks. Fighting scenes are copied from naruto. That's said I'd like to read more with better gearr and lost....
5 stars for simple fact that i wanted a dxd fic with laws powers------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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I agree with PaperCrow with the Law powers in DxD but the gender swap kinda put me off along with suddenly being well off all of a sudden, overall nice plot but not my cup of tea.
-spelling errors and grammar errors on the chapters -mc is not afraid to kill when its his first to kill -does'nt armament have condition to be only used when you have strong body? -hakis except conquerer's haki are instantly master
i dont know sh*t about what ur like as a writer or anything but im giving you 5 stars forth simple fact that ive wanted a dxd fic with laws powers and even thought about writing one so please dont drop this or make the MC an idiot whose every other thought is about a girls boobs
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