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the story over all is okay it's just not only is the grammar actually giving me a headache and some of the words used should be replaced with words that makes sense in the context in certain sentences it's like you typed it with autocorrect turned on and everybody knows how that thing does not work
Some grammar errors here and there but I like the story even thou I thought it was gonna be the dragon himself that woke up from slumber or something but nope. It ended up being a longinus...Give a try you might be surprise, also there are some 18+ scenes there😏😏
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Bro use the proper fucking term for chess like queen knight rook bishop pawn not this fucking nonsense of jumper or tower you sound like a fucking 5 year who doesn't know the **** chess suck a fucking turn off on a other wise good fic
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Hi, author the story is very good but I think you need a proof reader and an editor for it as I have seen many mistakes. If you need it contact me by my e mail at ayushkumar199855@gmail.com.
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You won't drop this right? ? 😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😮😮😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢
the story over all is okay it's just not only is the grammar actually giving me a headache and some of the words used should be replaced with words that makes sense in the context in certain sentences it's like you typed it with autocorrect turned on and everybody knows how that thing does not work
Some grammar errors here and there but I like the story even thou I thought it was gonna be the dragon himself that woke up from slumber or something but nope. It ended up being a longinus...Give a try you might be surprise, also there are some 18+ scenes there😏😏
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Bro use the proper fucking term for chess like queen knight rook bishop pawn not this fucking nonsense of jumper or tower you sound like a fucking 5 year who doesn't know the **** chess suck a fucking turn off on a other wise good fic
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Hi, author the story is very good but I think you need a proof reader and an editor for it as I have seen many mistakes. If you need it contact me by my e mail at ayushkumar199855@gmail.com.
XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP XP
Use our affordable services to write articles. The plot is overly disorganized. Next time please contact us if there is a need to combine an article into a story or essay
Trash grammar......... cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe cringe