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I like the original take on cultivation novels, with a girl completely powerless and who doesn't want to be there even. I'm curious to see how it will evolve, but so far the characters a good and interesting, the world building is nice. Also the writing is really good, keep up the good work author !
I can't describe how much I love this novel . Although he doesn't upload many chapters the writing quality makes up for it in my opinion. There's something refreshing about this novel that will make you hooked. Now I'm just waiting for some chapters to stock up but please give this a read. You won't regret it :)
I really like the characters and development of the story so far. It fills a big gap in the genre by having a female lead who is legitimately capable and by avoiding the nasty ***ism and sexual violence that seems so pervasive. I also enjoy that the main character's advantages don't remove the need to work hard for what she gets or negate the value of her efforts. The plot and environment are interesting and intimate enough to feel more fleshed out than is typical at this stage in other novels. I'm interested to see more of the world so please keep it up.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Way too slow starting cultivation with the resources she had It's frustrating to see her being so god damn oblivious to everything that she goes full retard Could've been great but turned out to be a massive disappointment
For review purposes, I read two chapters. Biting nut? That is an interesting approach on the pet/magical creature companion trope. I was distracted, but this story is captivating!
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If I have to say, the novels starts out fresh. The grammar errors are negligible since they don't disrupt my immersion into the story. I personally felt the pace of the story to be a bit fast for my preferences but other than that it is a good read.
Escape from your home when you are a high-class girl who does not know the world, adventure alone to the forest and has the fortunate to find a cultivation power and be seen by a student of an immortal sect, that girl is lucky, Excellent story ;)
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This author is great! The writing quality is perfect, easy to read and understand. The story is interesting and slightly unexpected, albeit in a good way. The world and characters are very detailed and come to life. Looking forward to the next chapters to come!
I like how the story builds up. How the characters are sketched. It's catchy. The English is pretty good too and there aren't grammatical errors that will irk someone while reading the book. If anyone who likes to read cultivator stories then they should definitely try this one.
Well, it is hard judging a book by the cover and yours especially. I read all 5 chapters that were published at the time of this review which for some authors would make them 15-20 chapters since they are quite long. It shows you have someone to proof-read although I still found some errors and marked them in paragraph comments they were minor issues not really worth mentioning. The stoty reminds me a bit of Library of Heaven's Path mixed in with a few other features eith a female protagonist and was an enjoyable read. Hope the story keeps it high quality and support it will deserve if it does.
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I wonder if the Chinese have blue eyes? What does eye color matter? Maybe some kind of magic ability? But entertaining, the first chapter makes you read further, it is interesting! From the first sentences the author managed to captivate the reader! Respect! Sick lungs, the mother could cure - with koumiss, steppe air, having gone to the sea, with blue hunters, with young moss - parmelia, and raw pumpkin juice. True, this knowledge became available only in the 11th and 16th centuries of our era and knowledge was transferred along the Silk Road. I wonder what time the novel is going on? Or is it a fantastic world? Sect? Despotic father. Impulse, emotions, loss of common sense ... and here is a sect ... an immortal ... risky heroine! Oooh .... book pervert ???????? This is definitely something new! Books have always been associated with wisdom, knowledge, and here it is like this ... Again ranking .... like in Kinzadza ... red pants, yellow ... entertaining ... where is East, there are clans, sects, hierarchical relations, gradation ... by color, by force, by money, by power. .. Cheating abilities ???? Magic item ???? Aah ... it's not a Tao ... it's a romance ... Tao is immense, Tao covers everything, Tao is incomprehensible ... The path of enlightenment is difficult! This is not the typical DAO about which I read - from the Chinese author Pu Sunlin - Monks Wizards and Stories about Unusual People, author of the 18th century. The spells of the Taoists, short stories of the 17th century, Feng Menluna, Lin Manchu, Li Yu. This is a European DAO ... but also a rather curious, understanding of DAO through the prism of the European mentality. And this is partially reminiscent of modern stories about DAO. But still, this is not the DAO itself ... but only its imitation. Since nothing is said about DAO itself ... The path of the cultivator is based on the comprehension of the doctrine of the path of enlightenment ... on the other hand, anyone who talks about what DAO understands, deviates from PATH, who does not talk about DAO, then he understands it. DAO is shorter than a very tangled thing ... and probably not a Chinese to understand him 100 percent will fail. Thanks to the author for an interesting story, it is easy to read.
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I don't see much problems in the grammar, and the writing style is satisfactory! It's an amazing story 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄
I'm gonna be concise, I hope you enjoyed my story. The uploading schedule is really messy because it's my side story for now. I obviously allow constructive criticism, so please tell me in the comments or the reviews how to make my story better according to you. Thank you !
The writing quality is definitely good. The world building is also quite fantastic. Worth a read. The charts and plot are very specific, which is a good thing.
I like the original take on cultivation novels, with a girl completely powerless and who doesn't want to be there even. I'm curious to see how it will evolve, but so far the characters a good and interesting, the world building is nice. Also the writing is really good, keep up the good work author !
I can't describe how much I love this novel . Although he doesn't upload many chapters the writing quality makes up for it in my opinion. There's something refreshing about this novel that will make you hooked. Now I'm just waiting for some chapters to stock up but please give this a read. You won't regret it :)
I really like the characters and development of the story so far. It fills a big gap in the genre by having a female lead who is legitimately capable and by avoiding the nasty ***ism and sexual violence that seems so pervasive. I also enjoy that the main character's advantages don't remove the need to work hard for what she gets or negate the value of her efforts. The plot and environment are interesting and intimate enough to feel more fleshed out than is typical at this stage in other novels. I'm interested to see more of the world so please keep it up.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
Way too slow starting cultivation with the resources she had It's frustrating to see her being so god damn oblivious to everything that she goes full retard Could've been great but turned out to be a massive disappointment
For review purposes, I read two chapters. Biting nut? That is an interesting approach on the pet/magical creature companion trope. I was distracted, but this story is captivating!
Spoiler de révélation If I have to say, the novels starts out fresh. The grammar errors are negligible since they don't disrupt my immersion into the story. I personally felt the pace of the story to be a bit fast for my preferences but other than that it is a good read.
Escape from your home when you are a high-class girl who does not know the world, adventure alone to the forest and has the fortunate to find a cultivation power and be seen by a student of an immortal sect, that girl is lucky, Excellent story ;)
Spoiler de révélation This author is great! The writing quality is perfect, easy to read and understand. The story is interesting and slightly unexpected, albeit in a good way. The world and characters are very detailed and come to life. Looking forward to the next chapters to come!
I like how the story builds up. How the characters are sketched. It's catchy. The English is pretty good too and there aren't grammatical errors that will irk someone while reading the book. If anyone who likes to read cultivator stories then they should definitely try this one.
Well, it is hard judging a book by the cover and yours especially. I read all 5 chapters that were published at the time of this review which for some authors would make them 15-20 chapters since they are quite long. It shows you have someone to proof-read although I still found some errors and marked them in paragraph comments they were minor issues not really worth mentioning. The stoty reminds me a bit of Library of Heaven's Path mixed in with a few other features eith a female protagonist and was an enjoyable read. Hope the story keeps it high quality and support it will deserve if it does.
Spoiler de révélation I wonder if the Chinese have blue eyes? What does eye color matter? Maybe some kind of magic ability? But entertaining, the first chapter makes you read further, it is interesting! From the first sentences the author managed to captivate the reader! Respect! Sick lungs, the mother could cure - with koumiss, steppe air, having gone to the sea, with blue hunters, with young moss - parmelia, and raw pumpkin juice. True, this knowledge became available only in the 11th and 16th centuries of our era and knowledge was transferred along the Silk Road. I wonder what time the novel is going on? Or is it a fantastic world? Sect? Despotic father. Impulse, emotions, loss of common sense ... and here is a sect ... an immortal ... risky heroine! Oooh .... book pervert ???????? This is definitely something new! Books have always been associated with wisdom, knowledge, and here it is like this ... Again ranking .... like in Kinzadza ... red pants, yellow ... entertaining ... where is East, there are clans, sects, hierarchical relations, gradation ... by color, by force, by money, by power. .. Cheating abilities ???? Magic item ???? Aah ... it's not a Tao ... it's a romance ... Tao is immense, Tao covers everything, Tao is incomprehensible ... The path of enlightenment is difficult! This is not the typical DAO about which I read - from the Chinese author Pu Sunlin - Monks Wizards and Stories about Unusual People, author of the 18th century. The spells of the Taoists, short stories of the 17th century, Feng Menluna, Lin Manchu, Li Yu. This is a European DAO ... but also a rather curious, understanding of DAO through the prism of the European mentality. And this is partially reminiscent of modern stories about DAO. But still, this is not the DAO itself ... but only its imitation. Since nothing is said about DAO itself ... The path of the cultivator is based on the comprehension of the doctrine of the path of enlightenment ... on the other hand, anyone who talks about what DAO understands, deviates from PATH, who does not talk about DAO, then he understands it. DAO is shorter than a very tangled thing ... and probably not a Chinese to understand him 100 percent will fail. Thanks to the author for an interesting story, it is easy to read.
Spoiler de révélation I don't see much problems in the grammar, and the writing style is satisfactory! It's an amazing story 😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄😄
I'm gonna be concise, I hope you enjoyed my story. The uploading schedule is really messy because it's my side story for now. I obviously allow constructive criticism, so please tell me in the comments or the reviews how to make my story better according to you. Thank you !
The writing quality is definitely good. The world building is also quite fantastic. Worth a read. The charts and plot are very specific, which is a good thing.