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Good luck my dude I wish you a amazing journey and good fortune in your next life and I hope you live both long and freely without too much hardship
If I could lower the score I would...These kind of stories should collectively be thrown into the darkest abyss and never to see the light of day.
Hope that ur able to get better and everything enjoyed reading ur book it's quite interesting and intriguing look forward to getting the chance to read more cant wait
Well, that was so-so. While it was interesting, it's not really that good either. Maybe there'll be people out there that'll love this work cuz this one ain't for me
..................................just wanna post the stars.............not the review............. Anyway that probably enough.............
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This is a very good book man! The mc is not a brainless shit that does everything just because he can and is almost a perfect villain. The concept of making the mc a villain is very good and well executed. It's a shame that the author dropped this. it has potential to be one of the top 10 easily.
The basic setup of the story is fine but the writing is too clumsy for it to be a good yarn. Much of the dialogue is an infodump between two characters when it should be engaging conversation. The wrong words are frequently used. You can usually tell what the author meant to say by context, but it's jarring. The story needs an edit to rid itself of all the vocabulary fails and then several more edits to made it more polished and less clumsy.
Ok, so there are a few noticeable grammatical mistakes. The author hasn't updated in six months. The story got a little boring at hogwarts but manages to keep it interesting. The MC has the powers of the darkness(Amara from spn) in percentages which is confusing since we know that Amara is at least as powerful as Chuck(God), implied to be more powerful before finding out that chuck's been planning everything which makes it more confusing. It's a fanfic, so background is a given but the author adds more to it without making it seem unrealistic. P.S. I'm a huge spn fan and love this concept
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The plot isn't that bad, the character is somewhat logical and doesn't really mind killing people, but he does have principles he holds up to. The writing quality isn't the best. What I mean by that is that it's sort of awkward to read. He explains his powers verbally, and keeps saying the name of the person their talking to. Regardless, if you can read through that its fine. It's sort of harem-e, but he isn't actually in a relationship. For me it feels like the book focuses more on the outside of Hogwarts, rather than focusing on the school plot. It's not bad, but slowly got bored. Its just my opinion though, feel free to read to find out what you feel about this.
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The song the best Harry Potter stories I've read so far I love the storytelling the main character progression of the story how to character interact with everything I can't wait to see where it's going
i have a question for you why don't you make a alternate version of this and take out all the wizardry except for before he reincarnated cuase it kinda started getting boring when you started following the harry potter side more than the supernatural demon contract side
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It's a good story. And there is a lot of work to do but in my opinion it is more than required for the next few days. So much for the update and I will feel better soon.
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the author should probably change his writing style to suite the characters especially how they interact plus also he kinda writes the same not changing alot of what is said so it just becomes kinda boring and even though he's in england the doesn't always have to mention it it's not a extremly important detail that every second you get plus the way present the character isn't very functional especially how you have thisscene like old ghetto of london scene where he steal bread and run away happilly over the food he got
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Love the MC, but there's WAY too many inconsistencies with his power. He's practically a god... and I can tell the grammar and story begins to get worse the further I go into this
Good luck my dude I wish you a amazing journey and good fortune in your next life and I hope you live both long and freely without too much hardship
If I could lower the score I would...These kind of stories should collectively be thrown into the darkest abyss and never to see the light of day.
Hope that ur able to get better and everything enjoyed reading ur book it's quite interesting and intriguing look forward to getting the chance to read more cant wait
Well, that was so-so. While it was interesting, it's not really that good either. Maybe there'll be people out there that'll love this work cuz this one ain't for me
..................................just wanna post the stars.............not the review............. Anyway that probably enough.............
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This is a very good book man! The mc is not a brainless shit that does everything just because he can and is almost a perfect villain. The concept of making the mc a villain is very good and well executed. It's a shame that the author dropped this. it has potential to be one of the top 10 easily.
The basic setup of the story is fine but the writing is too clumsy for it to be a good yarn. Much of the dialogue is an infodump between two characters when it should be engaging conversation. The wrong words are frequently used. You can usually tell what the author meant to say by context, but it's jarring. The story needs an edit to rid itself of all the vocabulary fails and then several more edits to made it more polished and less clumsy.
Ok, so there are a few noticeable grammatical mistakes. The author hasn't updated in six months. The story got a little boring at hogwarts but manages to keep it interesting. The MC has the powers of the darkness(Amara from spn) in percentages which is confusing since we know that Amara is at least as powerful as Chuck(God), implied to be more powerful before finding out that chuck's been planning everything which makes it more confusing. It's a fanfic, so background is a given but the author adds more to it without making it seem unrealistic. P.S. I'm a huge spn fan and love this concept
Spoiler de révélation The plot isn't that bad, the character is somewhat logical and doesn't really mind killing people, but he does have principles he holds up to. The writing quality isn't the best. What I mean by that is that it's sort of awkward to read. He explains his powers verbally, and keeps saying the name of the person their talking to. Regardless, if you can read through that its fine. It's sort of harem-e, but he isn't actually in a relationship. For me it feels like the book focuses more on the outside of Hogwarts, rather than focusing on the school plot. It's not bad, but slowly got bored. Its just my opinion though, feel free to read to find out what you feel about this.
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The song the best Harry Potter stories I've read so far I love the storytelling the main character progression of the story how to character interact with everything I can't wait to see where it's going
i have a question for you why don't you make a alternate version of this and take out all the wizardry except for before he reincarnated cuase it kinda started getting boring when you started following the harry potter side more than the supernatural demon contract side
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Spoiler de révélation It's a good story. And there is a lot of work to do but in my opinion it is more than required for the next few days. So much for the update and I will feel better soon.
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the author should probably change his writing style to suite the characters especially how they interact plus also he kinda writes the same not changing alot of what is said so it just becomes kinda boring and even though he's in england the doesn't always have to mention it it's not a extremly important detail that every second you get plus the way present the character isn't very functional especially how you have thisscene like old ghetto of london scene where he steal bread and run away happilly over the food he got
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Spoiler de révélation Thank....................................................................................................................................you
More chapters please!!!!!!!More chapters please!!!!!!!More chapters please!!!!!!!ore chapters please!!!!!!!More chapters please!!!!!!!More chapters please!!!!!!!More chapters please!!!!!!!More chapters please!!!!!!!More chapters please!!!!!!!
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Spoiler de révélation Love the MC, but there's WAY too many inconsistencies with his power. He's practically a god... and I can tell the grammar and story begins to get worse the further I go into this
your story is very interesting and I hope you got better