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Écrire un avisReally like this novel so far, will you keep udating? Do you have any kind of social media or discord I can follow to know the updating time? Thanks x.
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The story was chunky from the very start... Everything seemed okay but it still felt so odd.. and I get that u r straight and like chicks, but every scenario of the girls had to much of praising beauty for every little thing.. like - she is breathing and every breath that she exhales makes her beauty much more prominent. Did u get what I said above? If u didn't, so did I. I could not understand the need for such irrelevant and overly used details. .
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Dude what the hell ?? Your story started of nice had good plot but now it went to **** !! I have read till ch 48 and going to drop it..you had a good story line but destroyed it yourself..i mean what the hell a city governed by family where is govt ? Police handled by them... What military?? He went and invaded a military factory and what happened ****..what the ****..he suddenly becomes cold blooded killer in an unknown city in open ..you randomly jump from one thing to another which affects readers..your background of story is ****...i mean i liked it but you ruined it ..
started good but quickly went bad mc broke into factory bc why not then destroyed private property the stole something then he wonders why is police hostile to him. next city chapter he became japanese beta cuck mc
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I have not started this but looks good, just one mistake that I see. There is more than two sides on a coin. at least 3 sides; Front, Back, and side.
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Only let me posted one review so... 1st; Why is it that every fcking cultivation novels are always the same... hi brother, lil sister, big brother etc IT MAKES NO SENSE. Especially in this story when its meant to be an evolved earth. We do NOT talk like that... talk like a normal person please. Other than this its an alright read, cant say much more as barely anything has happened Authors comment; Well, thanks for the review. As for the brother, lil sister, and big brother, in my hometown those terms are still quite used. And as the first city in the novel is based on where I'm actually from, then I don't find it out of place to use those terms. My comment after; Oh can understand then, for me where I live its very weird. I mean I can read stories that have it but cause ive read to many its got to the point It annoys me whenever I see it. Hopefully later on not everyone will use it ? As its still meant to be earth and there should be many languages if you get me ? Well anyway Ill carry on and see where it goes gl ! Final review xD Okay so carried on reading but when he meets 'wind' it gets confusing af. The english is terrible and very hard to follow, this has happened throughout the story but it was bearable however turned very prominent at this time. Also nothing against it but not into yaoi as im straight... when he meets wind it turns yaoi, with him calling mc big brother and blushing red. Not into that sort of thing but if you are then yeah carry on lel. This does need a tag for it thou, or atleast say has yaoi vibe at points or something. Also this is very slow pace, I don't mind slow pace but it has to move forward atleast. For the whole story now nothing has rly happened. I was hoping when he acc left the slums he would access the internet atleast.. learn something about the world. However the whole time he has been there hes done fck all. Another thing is the ai, it should be a lot more prominent in the story as itll be key for him knowing about the world and helping. However it seems like it's forgotten and is barely used. Only being used to explain something to help the mc. I mean he has used it like once ? why... Finally going back to this 'wind' character it makes zero sense for the mc to start training him... the mc isnt strong. He is still in the first level of both body, soul cultivation and hasnt even begun energy. So why is he helping someone train and follow him ? Also with the mc getting all his techniques from the messai fam other than his sword arts what tf is he gonna train the guy in ? All he knows are secrets he can't teach to outsiders... plus he knows fck all about cultivation. He only knows what he has been given, so he could teach maybe the basics but nothing else. But then again why is he waisting his time.. other than for the yaoi route. Then for awhile now he has been acting like some wise master at everything, being arrogant af. Its like the slums left no mark on him and is just used as a sob story. Its had no effect on the story so far, other than a sad backstory. Overall it seems like cultivation novel with loads of potential but ruined with loads of wholes turning it mediocre. Not meant to be a harsh review, just my honest thought on what ive read. It may be the authors first novel or even improve loads later on as the story goes on.
You are literally one of my favorite authors on this site.. I will look at your book for pointers for my novel.. also you book is really good.
This is just insane, I love how this world works. I fell in love with every character that came in. The details are so good it is a real pleasure. Sah.
Spoiler de révélationI didn't like it, it just seemed a bit forced to me Like him clicking with the blue haired guy and him teaching all the secret arts to the mc
Spoiler de révélationNovel is just great. It starts off interesting, and slowly gets better and better. MC is actually pretty humble and functions more of less like a real person not some robot. Still has some instances of Wuxia shameless MC but it's few and far between. The world is a big amalgamation of many genres, having fantasy, cultivation, and even Sci-fi elements all working together to create a really very interesting world. Biggest bonus for me so far is that while their are criminals and arrogant nobility, nobody has a vendetta against the MC yet. No annoying cultivators trying to kill Mc just because he is hanging around a girl they like (at least not in the physical world). Overall it's really been just a pleasure to read so far.
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The story is really good. This is my first review on webnovel and this story deserves to be reviewed. I really liked dungeon Prowler before this novel, and i tink it has a similar mindset of the protagonist, working hard for the sake of it. Keep going author, good job till now!!
Original and refreshing characters, vividly described fighting scenes, after the first 20 chapters I am frankly stunned this story has never been picked up and read by more people. This is NOT the same cut and paste machine scrambled translation you find everywhere on this site. This is good, really good.
Author-edge, is yes..........great novel like the MC personality and the way his lookout of the world, his never ending will to improve like any other MC, but the difference is that Feli is too tanacious........like the novel keep it up the great work.....and don't stress yourself?
Amazing novel love it. ......................................🥰😍😘🥰😍😘..............................................................................::....................
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Spoiler de révélationOriginal characters, vivid fight scenes, during the first 30 chapters his speed of improvement is too fast, and it is not realistic. And the story is quite interesting
Really like this novel so far, will you keep udating? Do you have any kind of social media or discord I can follow to know the updating time? Thanks x.
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The story was chunky from the very start... Everything seemed okay but it still felt so odd.. and I get that u r straight and like chicks, but every scenario of the girls had to much of praising beauty for every little thing.. like - she is breathing and every breath that she exhales makes her beauty much more prominent. Did u get what I said above? If u didn't, so did I. I could not understand the need for such irrelevant and overly used details. .
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample charpters or links will be appriciated when reaching out.
Dude what the hell ?? Your story started of nice had good plot but now it went to **** !! I have read till ch 48 and going to drop it..you had a good story line but destroyed it yourself..i mean what the hell a city governed by family where is govt ? Police handled by them... What military?? He went and invaded a military factory and what happened ****..what the ****..he suddenly becomes cold blooded killer in an unknown city in open ..you randomly jump from one thing to another which affects readers..your background of story is ****...i mean i liked it but you ruined it ..
started good but quickly went bad mc broke into factory bc why not then destroyed private property the stole something then he wonders why is police hostile to him. next city chapter he became japanese beta cuck mc
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I have not started this but looks good, just one mistake that I see. There is more than two sides on a coin. at least 3 sides; Front, Back, and side.
Neither death nor dawn can separate us. In my time, you will be immortal. Pure romance of vampire prince and human girl are updated DAILY on WebComics.
Only let me posted one review so... 1st; Why is it that every fcking cultivation novels are always the same... hi brother, lil sister, big brother etc IT MAKES NO SENSE. Especially in this story when its meant to be an evolved earth. We do NOT talk like that... talk like a normal person please. Other than this its an alright read, cant say much more as barely anything has happened Authors comment; Well, thanks for the review. As for the brother, lil sister, and big brother, in my hometown those terms are still quite used. And as the first city in the novel is based on where I'm actually from, then I don't find it out of place to use those terms. My comment after; Oh can understand then, for me where I live its very weird. I mean I can read stories that have it but cause ive read to many its got to the point It annoys me whenever I see it. Hopefully later on not everyone will use it ? As its still meant to be earth and there should be many languages if you get me ? Well anyway Ill carry on and see where it goes gl ! Final review xD Okay so carried on reading but when he meets 'wind' it gets confusing af. The english is terrible and very hard to follow, this has happened throughout the story but it was bearable however turned very prominent at this time. Also nothing against it but not into yaoi as im straight... when he meets wind it turns yaoi, with him calling mc big brother and blushing red. Not into that sort of thing but if you are then yeah carry on lel. This does need a tag for it thou, or atleast say has yaoi vibe at points or something. Also this is very slow pace, I don't mind slow pace but it has to move forward atleast. For the whole story now nothing has rly happened. I was hoping when he acc left the slums he would access the internet atleast.. learn something about the world. However the whole time he has been there hes done fck all. Another thing is the ai, it should be a lot more prominent in the story as itll be key for him knowing about the world and helping. However it seems like it's forgotten and is barely used. Only being used to explain something to help the mc. I mean he has used it like once ? why... Finally going back to this 'wind' character it makes zero sense for the mc to start training him... the mc isnt strong. He is still in the first level of both body, soul cultivation and hasnt even begun energy. So why is he helping someone train and follow him ? Also with the mc getting all his techniques from the messai fam other than his sword arts what tf is he gonna train the guy in ? All he knows are secrets he can't teach to outsiders... plus he knows fck all about cultivation. He only knows what he has been given, so he could teach maybe the basics but nothing else. But then again why is he waisting his time.. other than for the yaoi route. Then for awhile now he has been acting like some wise master at everything, being arrogant af. Its like the slums left no mark on him and is just used as a sob story. Its had no effect on the story so far, other than a sad backstory. Overall it seems like cultivation novel with loads of potential but ruined with loads of wholes turning it mediocre. Not meant to be a harsh review, just my honest thought on what ive read. It may be the authors first novel or even improve loads later on as the story goes on.
You are literally one of my favorite authors on this site.. I will look at your book for pointers for my novel.. also you book is really good.
This is just insane, I love how this world works. I fell in love with every character that came in. The details are so good it is a real pleasure. Sah.
Spoiler de révélationI didn't like it, it just seemed a bit forced to me Like him clicking with the blue haired guy and him teaching all the secret arts to the mc
Spoiler de révélationNovel is just great. It starts off interesting, and slowly gets better and better. MC is actually pretty humble and functions more of less like a real person not some robot. Still has some instances of Wuxia shameless MC but it's few and far between. The world is a big amalgamation of many genres, having fantasy, cultivation, and even Sci-fi elements all working together to create a really very interesting world. Biggest bonus for me so far is that while their are criminals and arrogant nobility, nobody has a vendetta against the MC yet. No annoying cultivators trying to kill Mc just because he is hanging around a girl they like (at least not in the physical world). Overall it's really been just a pleasure to read so far.
Characters 100⭐ Summary100⭐ Chapters lenght 100⭐ MOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAARRRRRR SOON Upload speed wishometer 2 chs per day, At least...plz❗❗ 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺 LOL😂🤣😂 NO 😶😶😶REALLY😳😳😳😳
Yahhhh wahoo hot hot hot 🔥🔥🔥 on fire yeah...excited to read this!!!! Vote vote vote gifts gifts gift lol!!!!! Pleease update the novel fast at least one chap a day😢😁😢😁 okay❓❓⁉️❗⁉️❗here your reward 🎁🎁🎁 😋😋😉
Attractive summary..hmm...its gotten my attention and has also even kept it for now, okay thats what a writer would want😜of course....now your goal is to keep it til the end. Soooooooo, its gotta be a great story🤨lol❗😉 😈 HAH!😇
🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈🙈OMG...OMG❗❗❗🥰🥰🥰 It really is a very entertaining read YESIREE 😳😳😳😳😳😳😳SOOOOO... what am I gonna do??? Well...😙😗😙😗🙃😗😙😗😙😗🙃😗😙😗😙😗😙😗😙😗 RECommend it of course😜😜😜😜❗❗❗❗ Therefore plz be sure to absolutely 4sure........ READ READ READ❗❗❗❗❗ No regrets so far uh huh👍😍😍😍truth🤞
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The story is really good. This is my first review on webnovel and this story deserves to be reviewed. I really liked dungeon Prowler before this novel, and i tink it has a similar mindset of the protagonist, working hard for the sake of it. Keep going author, good job till now!!
Original and refreshing characters, vividly described fighting scenes, after the first 20 chapters I am frankly stunned this story has never been picked up and read by more people. This is NOT the same cut and paste machine scrambled translation you find everywhere on this site. This is good, really good.
Author-edge, is yes..........great novel like the MC personality and the way his lookout of the world, his never ending will to improve like any other MC, but the difference is that Feli is too tanacious........like the novel keep it up the great work.....and don't stress yourself?
Amazing novel love it. ......................................🥰😍😘🥰😍😘..............................................................................::....................
I like the book. 123456765432345676543234567898765434567898765434567898765432345678765432345676543234567876543wdfvbnjhytrfcvbhytrfghytrfgbhjuytfgbnjuytfgbhjuytrfhyt FILLER TADA!
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Original characters, vivid fight scenes, during the first 30 chapters his speed of improvement is too fast, and it is not realistic. And the story is quite interesting