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Wow that is a awesome novel I will wait for more entertainment so hurry up please.the is also good the plot and everything the story yet so good luck
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Very good hostoriabme love the development that is having and more than anything I hope that it is not abandoned I see how incredible the story will be if it is not left abandoned for me is very well raised, I want the development until it stayed
I am big fan of naruto all manga and all the tv show anime of naruto, boruto is also very good and the movies. I also love naruto fan novel, this is very good so far. please dont stop. its amazing now. Keep it up friend
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Pls update soon!! Cant wait to read next chapter... .................................................................................................
Love the concept and idea. no one ever uses Otsutsuki clan XD keep up the writing, it is nice and smooth, and it is hard for me to find a nice fan fic. this classifys as good for me so keep up good work XD
Por acaso está novel foi traduzida no Google tradutor? Apenas li os três primeiros capítulos, se houver alguma melhora na qualidade eu atualizo está review
The latest and greatest gift for a few hours but I will be in the office tomorrow and will be in a bit I have a better idea of the time is good for you and I to see the Gamer I have to the meeting tonight but we are going back and will be there the rest of the day and then I can get back on my place
good story !!! At the begining the MC is ruthless...I LIKE IT ....may the author can keep up with the story and won't change this side of the MC . goog luck and keep working !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Inconsistent novel full of cliché moments Op mc Overprotective brother / cute sister Hide his power with classic excuse " an old man gave them to me .... But the setting of the novel overall i find really interesting thats why ill say its a wasted potential lets hope author improve and learn from this one n wait for his next novel.
Fucking chapter 12 There was two story that got bad at one chapter in one da Xoxoxoxo love interest in a a good chance of getting to the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time
Fucking chapter 12 There was two story that got bad at one chapter in one da Xoxoxoxo love interest in a a good chance of getting to the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time
Fucking chapter 12 There was two story that got bad at one chapter in one da Xoxoxoxo love interest in a a good chance of getting to the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time
Author needs a language course, it was very difficult reading this. Story could be interesting but needs a lot of work. 2.4 stars for effort.
Where are the chapters 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
More chapters please 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
Harém? 😍😍 Very good the novel recommends to everyone to follow, you will not regret it. Very good the novel recommends to everyone to follow, you will not regret it. 😎😎
Like it. OP mc, but its feel like natural. Gramar are better than 80% of all other authors. About storyline cannot say anything, with only 10 chapters. Need to see what lies ahead:)
Over Protected brother is really not a bad idea good job sundaypoe123 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🤘👍🤘👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
It's perfect maybe if you add over protected brother that will be more fun hehehe 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😅😅😅😅
Fucking chapter 12 There was two story that got bad at one chapter in one da Xoxoxoxo love interest in a a good chance of getting to the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time
That picture look awesome just that it release so slow I feel like I'm getting slower as well I wonder what wrong hum well what ever just please write faster
Wonder what's AROUTHER is doing I waited 3 whole ducking day already AROUTHER are you trying to kill me 😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢
I like this novel.... Don't dropp this novel author..... I just add STAR..... Go author!!!!!!.......
Like the title and picture the story is good so far so keep it up and the wish was cool along with the background that you made up. This novel will become a great novel in the future
It's really good 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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please don't drop the story it's very good and I like it 😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃
Wow that is a awesome novel I will wait for more entertainment so hurry up please.the is also good the plot and everything the story yet so good luck
Spoiler de révélation Very good hostoriabme love the development that is having and more than anything I hope that it is not abandoned I see how incredible the story will be if it is not left abandoned for me is very well raised, I want the development until it stayed
I am big fan of naruto all manga and all the tv show anime of naruto, boruto is also very good and the movies. I also love naruto fan novel, this is very good so far. please dont stop. its amazing now. Keep it up friend
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Pls update soon!! Cant wait to read next chapter... .................................................................................................
Love the concept and idea. no one ever uses Otsutsuki clan XD keep up the writing, it is nice and smooth, and it is hard for me to find a nice fan fic. this classifys as good for me so keep up good work XD
Por acaso está novel foi traduzida no Google tradutor? Apenas li os três primeiros capítulos, se houver alguma melhora na qualidade eu atualizo está review
The latest and greatest gift for a few hours but I will be in the office tomorrow and will be in a bit I have a better idea of the time is good for you and I to see the Gamer I have to the meeting tonight but we are going back and will be there the rest of the day and then I can get back on my place
good story !!! At the begining the MC is ruthless...I LIKE IT ....may the author can keep up with the story and won't change this side of the MC . goog luck and keep working !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Inconsistent novel full of cliché moments Op mc Overprotective brother / cute sister Hide his power with classic excuse " an old man gave them to me .... But the setting of the novel overall i find really interesting thats why ill say its a wasted potential lets hope author improve and learn from this one n wait for his next novel.
Fucking chapter 12 There was two story that got bad at one chapter in one da Xoxoxoxo love interest in a a good chance of getting to the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time
Fucking chapter 12 There was two story that got bad at one chapter in one da Xoxoxoxo love interest in a a good chance of getting to the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time
Fucking chapter 12 There was two story that got bad at one chapter in one da Xoxoxoxo love interest in a a good chance of getting to the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time
Author needs a language course, it was very difficult reading this. Story could be interesting but needs a lot of work. 2.4 stars for effort.
Where are the chapters 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
More chapters please 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
Harém? 😍😍 Very good the novel recommends to everyone to follow, you will not regret it. Very good the novel recommends to everyone to follow, you will not regret it. 😎😎
Like it. OP mc, but its feel like natural. Gramar are better than 80% of all other authors. About storyline cannot say anything, with only 10 chapters. Need to see what lies ahead:)
Over Protected brother is really not a bad idea good job sundaypoe123 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍🤘👍🤘👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
It's perfect maybe if you add over protected brother that will be more fun hehehe 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😅😅😅😅
Fucking chapter 12 There was two story that got bad at one chapter in one da Xoxoxoxo love interest in a a good chance of getting to the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time last year I had a great day at the same time
That picture look awesome just that it release so slow I feel like I'm getting slower as well I wonder what wrong hum well what ever just please write faster
Wonder what's AROUTHER is doing I waited 3 whole ducking day already AROUTHER are you trying to kill me 😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢😢
I like this novel.... Don't dropp this novel author..... I just add STAR..... Go author!!!!!!.......
Like the title and picture the story is good so far so keep it up and the wish was cool along with the background that you made up. This novel will become a great novel in the future
It's really good 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
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please don't drop the story it's very good and I like it 😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃😃