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Hell never be able to beat my charazard .............. . ........................................................................ . ...............
Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhppooookkkkkkkkiiiikjjhgffffyuggvyunbgujjgyuuhhgffyyuhggyujhgtyuuhgfghbcdsrtygcduujjbfyhbjiiknbbgyyjhhffdryygfdsetthbbcdddtuinnvvddswyuuibcx app w will all all all all week will Smith em RB chi will Dec find Siva able driveh
Never really liked Pokémon, but this story is kinda making me change my mind————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————-/—————————————
This 5 star review is for Gengar...................................................................................................................................
Fantastic, some people may not like it, but it's only because they didn't get to read far. The story is always progressing in interesting way and is also about 60% differente from the storyline to make it more interenting.
Fantastic, some people may not like it, but it's only because they didn't get to read far. The story is always progressing in interesting way and is also about 60% differente from the storyline to make it more interenting.
Fantastic, some people may not like it, but it's only because they didn't get to read far. The story is always progressing in interesting way and is also about 60% differente from the storyline to make it more interenting.
Nice story. Good mc development. Just keep writing this story. 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
Big fan of this novel keeps the pokemon theme with a little bit of ecchi and great battles and explanations can't wait to see how it will progress and hopefully it will be completed unlike most
Really like the story, especially the fact that he will go to other region, it has various twist like the omniescence (probably wrote wrong) energy and god's mission (?) The structure of the writing is not the best at the start, but it get really better later on with the grammar
i m really enjoying this story everything in it is so clear its like i can see it in front of eyes just like tv series.................................................. ..........................
most satisfying pokemon fan-fic or any fan-fic by that matter :D MC isn't your typical goody goody but as same time very reasonable and best about this novel is...................................................... ............................................................................... .......................... .... ONLY VERY FEW ANY CLIFFHANGERS!!
Great. I recommend it to anyone who likes Pokémon. 🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉
Great story .............................................................................. Yeah those 140 chacters ......................
I have read the first chapter. The author’s first sentence is an extreme run on sentence so I have to give him 1 star for writing quality. Commas are not replacements for periods. Please consider editing the story. The updates on the book are quite stable so I gave him 4 stars for update stability. The story development is pretty bad but I was lenient and gave the author 3 stars. The character is absolutely terrible. The author has clearly never seen or heard a war vet and it is inexcusable to call him a war vet but also make him a teenage harem master in terms of personality. The author has never heard of “show not tell”, he just tells us what the character is supposed to be and never backs it up with actions. I have to give world background 1 star as the author didn’t really expand on the Pokémon Universe.
Very nice story i relly like it.Hope you update regularly just like you are doing.I can say this for me for sure this is the best of best pokemon fanfic. So far so good keep it up author this is a wonderful story
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Honestly is it possible to make a suggestion? Like bring able to telepathically give orders to pokemon like the girl Ash met during the Battle Frontier days and also fell in love with him. Also the ability to just know how pokemon feel and even communicate with them. I just feel its be better with these skills, I mean he alrdy has system chan, so it should be possible? Plus I always found calling out techniques stupidly embarrassing, also stupid as the opponent would know immediately what to do and counter, which is why I've always wondered why the trainer's battle tactics never change even after hearing the opponent's commands.....
I can say this for me for sure this is the best of best pokemon fanfic. that I read the others are kinda bul**** and stuff some even stopped writing anymore So far so good keep it up author this is a wonderful story
This is an amazing story 😁 keep going and more release chapters please and thanks for the hard work 👍🏻^_________________________^ .....................................................................
Good Story!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D::D:D:D:D:D:D:DD:D:D:D:D::D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D::D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
Please give him BABY DARKRAI BECUASE HE NEED POWERFULL POKEMON TO DEFEAT MEW CATCH ..................LET MC CATCH DARKRAI.......................
Good Story!!! Keep it up. Well its just my perspective coz i dont like novel which are to many narration,, this novel here is a good example for those who dont like narrative novel with few speaking characters. lol
I like this novel well it maybe cliche and the mc get op steady but surely. A few warning when reading this novel 1. This novel may wreck many people childhood cause theres freaking s€x (even though author is bad at it), and showing things like lust, well you know sins 2.a novel with system 3. The story a little bit fast paced 4. Etc 😎😎😎😎
TL;DR Expectations: Old hardened war vet with a soft side for kids. Who enjoys his new life as a Pokemon trainer and moves forward past having to leave his wife and family behind. Reality: Teen with delusions of being a war vet was hit by a truck and God played along with his delusions and let him go to the Pokemon world where he finally gets to use the 9 in dick he never had on Earth on the equally delusional females. Grammar needs work some misspellings. The story rather than showing us what's happening tells you. The dialogue could use some work... Some of the conversations don't seem at all realistic. Updates are fine I suppose the Author hasn't gotten to an amount where I can fairly judge it. I can't say the story has really developed at all. It feels more about the ladies in the anime than the Pokemon. Which brings us to Character Design... this is supposed to be an 80 something year old man who gets sent to the Pokemon world. Yet he acts like the 16 year old he made his body into. I don't see any wisdom at all so far even though apparently he has a good amount. You told us he has some fighting ability but the one instance I read of him using it you didn't do a good job of showing it off. Rather than an aged war veteran I'd say we have at most a high schooler with a need to flirt and have ***. World background is Pokemon it hasn't been described much in any sort of way so I'm guessing we just go off what the Anime looks like. So far I'm not impressed with the story or the MC. Fine he's 80 something and probably hasn't done it in a while, but right now it's just an old man who goes to a Pokemon world to have *** with the young beautiful females. If I had to give some advice I'd say fix the dialogue it's not great. The battles need something because right now they seem almost dull. Rather than keeping his memories it feels like he only kept the memories of Pokemon, "fighting" and ***. It doesn't even feel like he had a wife once. Even though this wife was apparently the one who turned him from a hardened rock into whatever he is today. We don't even find out if she was alive or not. I honestly feel like there was no point in making him an old man or a war veteran. Making him a typical **** or geek man who got hit by a truck would give us the same exact MC.
Hope catch lot legendary pokemon and use it frequently .......................................................................add some mega evolution and Z moves that will be really cool
I like how he does think like what hes age was said to be over 80 which makes him very mature ... I like his character very much... More power
I don’t understand why the mc don’t catch Meowth and train it it could be powerful and train other Pokémon to speak or just translate please catch Meowth
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Spoiler de révélation Hell never be able to beat my charazard .............. . ........................................................................ . ...............
Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhppooookkkkkkkkiiiikjjhgffffyuggvyunbgujjgyuuhhgffyyuhggyujhgtyuuhgfghbcdsrtygcduujjbfyhbjiiknbbgyyjhhffdryygfdsetthbbcdddtuinnvvddswyuuibcx app w will all all all all week will Smith em RB chi will Dec find Siva able driveh
Never really liked Pokémon, but this story is kinda making me change my mind————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————-/—————————————
This 5 star review is for Gengar...................................................................................................................................
Fantastic, some people may not like it, but it's only because they didn't get to read far. The story is always progressing in interesting way and is also about 60% differente from the storyline to make it more interenting.
Fantastic, some people may not like it, but it's only because they didn't get to read far. The story is always progressing in interesting way and is also about 60% differente from the storyline to make it more interenting.
Fantastic, some people may not like it, but it's only because they didn't get to read far. The story is always progressing in interesting way and is also about 60% differente from the storyline to make it more interenting.
Nice story. Good mc development. Just keep writing this story. 👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻👍🏻
Big fan of this novel keeps the pokemon theme with a little bit of ecchi and great battles and explanations can't wait to see how it will progress and hopefully it will be completed unlike most
Really like the story, especially the fact that he will go to other region, it has various twist like the omniescence (probably wrote wrong) energy and god's mission (?) The structure of the writing is not the best at the start, but it get really better later on with the grammar
i m really enjoying this story everything in it is so clear its like i can see it in front of eyes just like tv series.................................................. ..........................
most satisfying pokemon fan-fic or any fan-fic by that matter :D MC isn't your typical goody goody but as same time very reasonable and best about this novel is...................................................... ............................................................................... .......................... .... ONLY VERY FEW ANY CLIFFHANGERS!!
Great. I recommend it to anyone who likes Pokémon. 🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉🐉
Great story .............................................................................. Yeah those 140 chacters ......................
I have read the first chapter. The author’s first sentence is an extreme run on sentence so I have to give him 1 star for writing quality. Commas are not replacements for periods. Please consider editing the story. The updates on the book are quite stable so I gave him 4 stars for update stability. The story development is pretty bad but I was lenient and gave the author 3 stars. The character is absolutely terrible. The author has clearly never seen or heard a war vet and it is inexcusable to call him a war vet but also make him a teenage harem master in terms of personality. The author has never heard of “show not tell”, he just tells us what the character is supposed to be and never backs it up with actions. I have to give world background 1 star as the author didn’t really expand on the Pokémon Universe.
Very nice story i relly like it.Hope you update regularly just like you are doing.I can say this for me for sure this is the best of best pokemon fanfic. So far so good keep it up author this is a wonderful story
Spoiler de révélation Honestly is it possible to make a suggestion? Like bring able to telepathically give orders to pokemon like the girl Ash met during the Battle Frontier days and also fell in love with him. Also the ability to just know how pokemon feel and even communicate with them. I just feel its be better with these skills, I mean he alrdy has system chan, so it should be possible? Plus I always found calling out techniques stupidly embarrassing, also stupid as the opponent would know immediately what to do and counter, which is why I've always wondered why the trainer's battle tactics never change even after hearing the opponent's commands.....
I can say this for me for sure this is the best of best pokemon fanfic. that I read the others are kinda bul**** and stuff some even stopped writing anymore So far so good keep it up author this is a wonderful story
This is an amazing story 😁 keep going and more release chapters please and thanks for the hard work 👍🏻^_________________________^ .....................................................................
Good Story!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D::D:D:D:D:D:D:DD:D:D:D:D::D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D::D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
Please give him BABY DARKRAI BECUASE HE NEED POWERFULL POKEMON TO DEFEAT MEW CATCH ..................LET MC CATCH DARKRAI.......................
Good Story!!! Keep it up. Well its just my perspective coz i dont like novel which are to many narration,, this novel here is a good example for those who dont like narrative novel with few speaking characters. lol
I like this novel well it maybe cliche and the mc get op steady but surely. A few warning when reading this novel 1. This novel may wreck many people childhood cause theres freaking s€x (even though author is bad at it), and showing things like lust, well you know sins 2.a novel with system 3. The story a little bit fast paced 4. Etc 😎😎😎😎
TL;DR Expectations: Old hardened war vet with a soft side for kids. Who enjoys his new life as a Pokemon trainer and moves forward past having to leave his wife and family behind. Reality: Teen with delusions of being a war vet was hit by a truck and God played along with his delusions and let him go to the Pokemon world where he finally gets to use the 9 in dick he never had on Earth on the equally delusional females. Grammar needs work some misspellings. The story rather than showing us what's happening tells you. The dialogue could use some work... Some of the conversations don't seem at all realistic. Updates are fine I suppose the Author hasn't gotten to an amount where I can fairly judge it. I can't say the story has really developed at all. It feels more about the ladies in the anime than the Pokemon. Which brings us to Character Design... this is supposed to be an 80 something year old man who gets sent to the Pokemon world. Yet he acts like the 16 year old he made his body into. I don't see any wisdom at all so far even though apparently he has a good amount. You told us he has some fighting ability but the one instance I read of him using it you didn't do a good job of showing it off. Rather than an aged war veteran I'd say we have at most a high schooler with a need to flirt and have ***. World background is Pokemon it hasn't been described much in any sort of way so I'm guessing we just go off what the Anime looks like. So far I'm not impressed with the story or the MC. Fine he's 80 something and probably hasn't done it in a while, but right now it's just an old man who goes to a Pokemon world to have *** with the young beautiful females. If I had to give some advice I'd say fix the dialogue it's not great. The battles need something because right now they seem almost dull. Rather than keeping his memories it feels like he only kept the memories of Pokemon, "fighting" and ***. It doesn't even feel like he had a wife once. Even though this wife was apparently the one who turned him from a hardened rock into whatever he is today. We don't even find out if she was alive or not. I honestly feel like there was no point in making him an old man or a war veteran. Making him a typical **** or geek man who got hit by a truck would give us the same exact MC.
Hope catch lot legendary pokemon and use it frequently .......................................................................add some mega evolution and Z moves that will be really cool
I like how he does think like what hes age was said to be over 80 which makes him very mature ... I like his character very much... More power
I don’t understand why the mc don’t catch Meowth and train it it could be powerful and train other Pokémon to speak or just translate please catch Meowth
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