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So lengthy to read and absolutely fcuking boring. The story premise is good, but the added extra details are very lengthy that make you feel like reading same business news from different magazines one after another without gap.
If you get over the first hump it's a great read. All the people who came for the cover, read a few chapters, and left, can piss off. If you can't handle reading a slow start than you probably shouldn't be reading at all. It's rude to the authors who are putting in effort and putting themselves out there. Honestly my one gripe is that there wasn't any real reason for his rejection of Tryndamere other than that was the direction that the story 'needed' to go. You should have either shown the MC having more suspicions or maybe have him overreact and fall out at least. The slow part was frustrating but it was a frustration that the story needed for the best impact, if not for the deaths, the 'Don't F*** with me!' moments just don't taste as sweet.
The author has definitely spent some time thinking about the storyline. I could barely find any loopholes, and if there seemed to be one, either a note is written at the end or you simply missed a foreshadowing. The story really started slow, but I believe that's how every good novel should work, build the world, define the characters, then smoothly transition into how the story should go. And here, emphasis on character development could be felt. Most frequent issue they have is: the MC feels too stupid. Well, the MC does sound like stupid on the earlier chapters, but it was obvious that no individual would still be sane after the things that happened to him irl. But believe me, the novel's very very good. No idea with Stability of Updating, since I'm still trying to finish it. But so far, so good. Chapters are pretty long too, with many things happening at once. Unlike other VRMMOS where chapters could be summarized into 1-2 sentences.. ROO~*cough cough* Anyway, highly recommended. Good job Author-san. Hopefully this doesn't get dropped. Keep it up! 🤟🤟
Spoiler de révélation
Just in case u wondering how the previous Grand Duelists idea base on Is probably fiora from League of Legends Ignore this text, just to fulfill the minimum requirements
The first chapters of the book are quite cringeworthy but if you can endure the cringe, you will find a wonderful and complex world. NPCs are multi-dimensional beings and the characters are loveable, though I suggest not being attached to them hahaha :'( If the author can move us like this early i wonder how will the novel be in the future.
This book may seem boring but by goddid I get addicted love this book. World building was 4 state (so far) 140140140140140140140140140140140
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Really good book. This is an Overgeared style story but with more NPC stuff than PVP. Very good read. Been a while since something this good came out.
it might be slow at the start but i promise you as the story goes on it will be much more interesting. you just have to be patient enough readers
Well played out world setup with a great character setup for each individual. This is the first story I can remember the names of each character introduced in the early chapters past chapter 100. Thank you so much author for the easy to follow story!
Nice story, very good, awesome character development from the memes to high tiered memes, excellent. Nice story, very good, awesome character development from the memes to high tiered memes, excellent. Nice story, very good, awesome character development from the memes to high tiered memes, excellent.
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It's ok the story is not bad but not the best either some will enjoy it so try it out💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯
I love this Book, the story is amazing and the character are loveable. I can imagine myself in this story' and this is a really great Book. Overall, this is one of the best
This novel starts out pretty rough for a good 1-3 chapters, but slowly picks up the pace. I must admit that this is one of the best novels I have read. Period. I must say the uploads aren't that stable, but they are pretty good.
Okay, so not like other who apparently just rated this novel based on the cover, I thought when i found this novel that it will be good judging on the rating but i was truly disappointed in this novel, i read so far up to the chapter 11 and it is so frustrating to read. Maybe the rest is good but if you want the audience to read your book well the beginning is kinda pretty important. So i wish you good luck for the future autor and i will just read something esle.
I don't think my review will stay here long as this author most likely deletes reviews based on comments, quality, and boosted ratings... Anyways I think the novel had a really good start, however it quickly devolves into cliche plots, forced and flat relations, and dumb decisions. Since C5ish the novel went downhill. The grammar is good however the story quality has a noticable drop. I ended up dropping this novel at C19 due to that. It sort of felt like the author tried to force cliche and/or cringe things as an original which did not work... Overall, author I think you need to focus on developing your story flow/plot and characters. Lastly I love the cover, plus the updates look daily, though I can only guess since on phone so cant see history.
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So lengthy to read and absolutely fcuking boring. The story premise is good, but the added extra details are very lengthy that make you feel like reading same business news from different magazines one after another without gap.
If you get over the first hump it's a great read. All the people who came for the cover, read a few chapters, and left, can piss off. If you can't handle reading a slow start than you probably shouldn't be reading at all. It's rude to the authors who are putting in effort and putting themselves out there. Honestly my one gripe is that there wasn't any real reason for his rejection of Tryndamere other than that was the direction that the story 'needed' to go. You should have either shown the MC having more suspicions or maybe have him overreact and fall out at least. The slow part was frustrating but it was a frustration that the story needed for the best impact, if not for the deaths, the 'Don't F*** with me!' moments just don't taste as sweet.
The author has definitely spent some time thinking about the storyline. I could barely find any loopholes, and if there seemed to be one, either a note is written at the end or you simply missed a foreshadowing. The story really started slow, but I believe that's how every good novel should work, build the world, define the characters, then smoothly transition into how the story should go. And here, emphasis on character development could be felt. Most frequent issue they have is: the MC feels too stupid. Well, the MC does sound like stupid on the earlier chapters, but it was obvious that no individual would still be sane after the things that happened to him irl. But believe me, the novel's very very good. No idea with Stability of Updating, since I'm still trying to finish it. But so far, so good. Chapters are pretty long too, with many things happening at once. Unlike other VRMMOS where chapters could be summarized into 1-2 sentences.. ROO~*cough cough* Anyway, highly recommended. Good job Author-san. Hopefully this doesn't get dropped. Keep it up! 🤟🤟
Spoiler de révélation Just in case u wondering how the previous Grand Duelists idea base on Is probably fiora from League of Legends Ignore this text, just to fulfill the minimum requirements
The first chapters of the book are quite cringeworthy but if you can endure the cringe, you will find a wonderful and complex world. NPCs are multi-dimensional beings and the characters are loveable, though I suggest not being attached to them hahaha :'( If the author can move us like this early i wonder how will the novel be in the future.
This book may seem boring but by goddid I get addicted love this book. World building was 4 state (so far) 140140140140140140140140140140140
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Really good book. This is an Overgeared style story but with more NPC stuff than PVP. Very good read. Been a while since something this good came out.
it might be slow at the start but i promise you as the story goes on it will be much more interesting. you just have to be patient enough readers
Well played out world setup with a great character setup for each individual. This is the first story I can remember the names of each character introduced in the early chapters past chapter 100. Thank you so much author for the easy to follow story!
Nice story, very good, awesome character development from the memes to high tiered memes, excellent. Nice story, very good, awesome character development from the memes to high tiered memes, excellent. Nice story, very good, awesome character development from the memes to high tiered memes, excellent.
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Thanks for the novel 😄😘☺️😂😥😍😑😍😙😆😊😗😀😁😋😋😃🤨☺️😎😘😶😋😐😍😗🙂😉😶🤣☺️😄😘🤗😗🤗😆🙂😗😶😋☺️🤨😎🤨😋😁😗😀😗😀😶😋😎😘😂😉😶😉😋
Jvs ed 've dcj d jgrrr hghee exit s h egg egg eggy Ubuntu union hdc function oxygen ugh high urgh uhh Utd dc rd egg yt? Thug firm hmm Jeff uhh
Spoiler de révélation It's ok the story is not bad but not the best either some will enjoy it so try it out💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯
I love this Book, the story is amazing and the character are loveable. I can imagine myself in this story' and this is a really great Book. Overall, this is one of the best
This novel starts out pretty rough for a good 1-3 chapters, but slowly picks up the pace. I must admit that this is one of the best novels I have read. Period. I must say the uploads aren't that stable, but they are pretty good.
Okay, so not like other who apparently just rated this novel based on the cover, I thought when i found this novel that it will be good judging on the rating but i was truly disappointed in this novel, i read so far up to the chapter 11 and it is so frustrating to read. Maybe the rest is good but if you want the audience to read your book well the beginning is kinda pretty important. So i wish you good luck for the future autor and i will just read something esle.
I don't think my review will stay here long as this author most likely deletes reviews based on comments, quality, and boosted ratings... Anyways I think the novel had a really good start, however it quickly devolves into cliche plots, forced and flat relations, and dumb decisions. Since C5ish the novel went downhill. The grammar is good however the story quality has a noticable drop. I ended up dropping this novel at C19 due to that. It sort of felt like the author tried to force cliche and/or cringe things as an original which did not work... Overall, author I think you need to focus on developing your story flow/plot and characters. Lastly I love the cover, plus the updates look daily, though I can only guess since on phone so cant see history.
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