Astronix

Don't mind me, I'm just the author. See the other reviews, they provide a detailed breakdown of the story and an honest opinion about the book.

I read the first 5 chapters. I like it so far, especially because your novel is a contrast to the style of novel I'm learning to write. Your novel has a more serious tone, I would say even more realistic. The detailing of the characters, of the environment, makes the atmosphere much denser and deeper. As much as it's not my reading/writing style, I enjoyed it and will continue to follow your story in the future. Added to collection! It certainly is a story that seems to be very good, but I will try to learn from it too, nice to find this one! My only "criticism" is really something personal, which is the tone, I end up not being a big fan of this more serious way of writing. [img=recommend]

Thank you for your insightful feedback on my work. I genuinely appreciate the time you took to read and provide constructive criticism. Regarding the character's fluctuating memory, I'm glad you noticed it! This was indeed a deliberate choice on my part and it plays into some developments that will unfold as the story progresses. It's reassuring to know that readers are picking up on these subtleties, and I'm excited for you to see where this aspect of the story leads. As for the main character's physical description, the lack of direct detail in the early chapters is intentional. I want to portray the protagonist as an "ordinary" individual without any distinguishing features, reflecting his reality. However, as the narrative unfolds, you can expect to see a deeper exploration of his character and potentially some surprising developments. Your comments about the plot's intersection with the original "ranobe" have given me much to consider. While drawing inspiration from other works, it's indeed crucial to maintain a distinct narrative to avoid confusion or distraction for readers. Your suggestion of using time progression from childhood is a compelling idea that could add a fascinating dynamic to the story, and I will certainly ponder upon this idea. Once again, thank you for your thoughtful feedback. It's through perspectives like yours that I can continue to improve and evolve my writing. I look forward to bringing you more exciting chapters in the future. Best Regards,

Looking good so far! Dragons, fantasy, kings, that is great. Will you going to serialize constantly? I'm thrilled to see how the story will develop.

Thoroughly enjoying this captivating read-up so far. The intriguing narrative and well-developed dialogue truly make this book shine. It's a must-read, without being overly perfect. A solid 5 stars!