thank you for your review, please don't hesitate to let me know the parts you don't like when you see them, I'll adapt my writing from them.
also I like realism, and using the dark side of people, the students aren't backing him simply because 'why him and not me?' no need to search further 💁
I understand your pov, I usually don 't like giving everything to the readers right off the bat, I prefer developing the story from point 1 to the next and develop the secrets about the characters. This allows me to keep a surprise effect and put some plot twist for the readers from there to there( like a character described as bad then revealing a 180 turn later, and setting the scene for a big scene) it's also the case for people's reactions, everything has a reason and it's developed through the chapters.
last round is winner vs winner if each has 2 wins
[Eratz Pandora VS Ryder Crow]
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[Eratz Pandora VS Milo Ambrosius]
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hair* daymn I might I've been sleepy when I wrote thi chapter 😳
Next to him sat a striking blonde woman with an air neglected and nonchalant.
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yeah, changing it
The crowd roared with as the tiger leapt and roared. The energy was contagious, and everyone was swept up in the fervor.
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my little brick head mixed English and French
As Colin stepped through the gates, her heart pounded with anxiety but a little excitation.
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thank you very much for your support , I really liked seeing your path through this novel and I'll be sure to make it worth it.
Hot, wet suction enveloped the broad crown, drawing out beads of salty pre-cum that mixed with his saliva.
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thank you for your review. for the point you mentioned, it's complicated, the beastification is indeed known, but not expected from a first year student but realistically it's my bad. my objective is to hide some stuff to give a better surprise effect for the readers, and it will always fire back (foreshadowing: just the concept of Ishtarians should make everyone in the academy licking the mc's boots )
Dominion of The Beast Masters
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