Remma - 2
Remma
Japanese
OK, thanks for answering me.
Sakuya
I will take your advice and explain the character, the country, and the world. One will be an extra piece to add depth to the story, something optional. The others, like Chapter 0, will give the necessary context. Considering everything you said about my storytelling approach, I will change the point of view from third-person to first-person. I will occasionally switch to third-person as needed. I will also edit all the chapters. I will add these details and cut others to make the overall story coherent. I'm not sure if I'll succeed, but I will try. Thank you for your time and sorry for the long comment. I want you to know that I read your feedback, and I will do better.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1.
Fantasy · Andre_Josua
I think I understand you. I create a story in my head with detailed scenes that make sense to me, but I haven't provided you with enough context to understand it. It's like starting to watch a movie halfway through; something happens, but why should you care?
ch 0 1 Chapter 1.
Fantasy · Andre_Josua
Can you explain? I want to write better, if you have time, of course.
ch 0 1 Chapter 1.
Fantasy · Andre_Josua
Noelle-2
Noelle -2
Noelle
I don't know if I would have to edit more to be accepted it. But If there is no picture is because It wasn't enough.
Remma
An adventurer's life surrounded by lascivious beauties
Fantasy · Andre_Josua