Webnovel Author: OutBoxer024 - Fanfic&Novel Collection

Well, if you are writing from the perspective of Anos, I suggest you stop putting in "I smiled sadistically/evilly" phrases since only other people see him as sadistic despite Anos thinking otherwise. This is what we call an unreliable narrator and works quite well when writing from the perspective of one the characters. As for the people's reaction on Gods, it would be better to just remove it altogether. I remember in the last chapter of my fic that in addition to Anos segregating the trash(traitors), he also revived everyone that died. The explanation I had planned was that Anos secretly enchanted every DC knife, Scholar Mage watch, and Battle Mage badge with Rivide to stop their body's time when they died, effectively ensuring the three-second rule. Also, you summoned Venuzdonoa. One of the chapters mentioned how Anos tried but couldn't summon Demon Castle Delsgade, which Anos needs to be near for him to summon Venuzdonoa. The reason why Anos could summon Venuzdonoa in the Garden of Time in the show was that the Garden of Time was created inside Delsgade, making it possible to summon Venuzdonoa. Obviously, you can ignore these ramblings of mine if you want, this is YOUR fic after all. But attention to detail is what make stories good. You need to be consistent (unlike my upload schedule)

Okay, a few criticisms (take note: I am writing this at 2am so I may not be in the soundest of mind rn): Let's first address the most blatant one, the spacing. Please fix the spacing since whole paragraphs are being cut by random "Enters". Second would be the fight between Dranevee. While there was nothing wrong with it, it felt incredibly lackluster. I just expected a longer drawn out fight. Also, you never addressed what happened to Lucas and Elijah. Remember that before Anos arrived, Elijah became unconscious and Lucas was still rampaging. Third would be the way you treat the Lances. Lances are not disposable soldiers that Arthur could just randomly ask Virion to call for. Keep in mind they are supposed to be the most elite and powerful mages to have ever graced Dicathen. So, Anos just ordering Arthur to get them doesn't make a lot of sense. Fourth would be the whole fight with Eugo La Raviaz. Basically, Anos can still use Ingall on a target even after 3 seconds, it's just that its success rate exponentially decreases after 3 seconds. Also, Eugo La Raviaz only appears when rewinding time is done not locally, so the entire world's time is a big no no. Eugo La Raviaz is also just a Keeper God (basically just a god that protects an order, not the embodiment of an order like proper Gods), meaning he doesn't have a personality and in the small chance that he does like we see in the show, he is only focused on correcting time, nothing else. He wouldn't even try to converse with Anos. He'd simply possess/give his power to Dranevee and try to get it over with as fast as possible. Another thing to note is the Garden of Time, the Garden of Time really only sucks in the people wanting to use Rivide (as we saw how only Anos, Misha, and Sasha were the only ones in the Garden before Eugo La Raviaz pulled in Ivis), and it is a separate dimension from the main one. Finally, the last criticism would be the people's reaction. I can tell it was made by AI. People wouldn't accept that he's a royal, they don't know what a Demon King is, and very few know the existence of Gods (they think Asuras are gods). Their reactions were completely unfounded. The same can also be said with Anos' reaction. Anos was never a sadist or someone who revelled in the fear or praise of others. I suggest reading the light novel to better understand Anos' personality. Please don't take this the wrong way, I love that you enjoyed my fanfic that you decided to adopt this when I stopped writing. I am simply offering you criticism in order for you to improve your work. I understand English isn't your first language, I just hope you put my advice to heart.

I wish you the best

You have to remember that Vivium was thought to be one type of aether when it was actually Life, Death, Creation, and Destruction Life= Order of Birth Death= Order of Demise Creation= Order of Creation Destruction= Order of Destruction As for fate/destiny, Equis is a thing. So yeah, there's that.

3.) Kanon backstory are spoilers 4.) Shin backstory are spoilers 5.) Militia created Epheotus without much direct confrontation, meaning very little draconids even know of the existence of Gods. 6.) That would mean the Asuras would learn about aether on their own without the help of gods

1.) The villain, as they are now incorporated into the maou gakuin verse, will obviously be receiving buffs. Like how Arthur got source magic, Agrona and Kezess will also get some buffs. 2.) That's what I said, draconids, even the ones not part of the Selection Trial, borrow power from gods.

I realized this pretty early on, even in my first fanfic, but it would be pretty boring if it was just Anos in TBATE and nothing else. Anos could literally steamroll the entire series and have all problems end in just 1 arc. Making TBATE a part of the Militia world would make the fic a lot more interesting than Anos dogstomping all of tbate. It makes you wonder, what the hell actually happened during the years Anos was dead. I also have a lot of fun trying to connect concepts from the two series together.

The 8,000 years part is valid, I may have to change the date a bit. As for aether, it lines pretty well when you consider aevum is the Order of Time, spatium could be the Order of Space (since there is no such thing in Maou Gakuin), and Vivium the Order of Creation and the Order of Destruction. And since Asuras consider themselves gods, it lines up nicely that they can use divine magic like how Draconids use bead jewels to summon the power of gods.

I've been thinking about this for a while now, but why are you still following this fanfic instead of just dropping it when you have complaints? I'm just trying to write for fun and yet you're here saying I've mutilated the lore of both stories. That's something we call creative liberties. Honestly, I don't see you complaining at Ridoux's Anos Voldigoad in the Eminence in Shadow fic which also features EiS world taking place in the Militia World. Just relax and have some fun. I know you may be a die-hard fan of both series, but you gotta chill, it ain't that deep. If you really don't like how I do things in MY fanfic, why not make your own fanfic, with your own story direction and world building.

I guess I should a timeskip thing. Anyway, Anos will be seen next chapter

Unfortunately, that is the case. IRL stuff has been keeping me busy for a while now. And as much as I would love to write more for my hobby, it would mean I would have to sacrifice my time for school.

The chapter will probably release on Saturday or something at the latest

Probably not. I'm busy with a lot of things atm.

But akshuali 🤓, this is actually the longest chapter to date aside from the fourth chapter Disciplinary Committee. /s

The lore shall reveal itself in due time. As for the reason why I made it the same world is because: (1) It would be a lot simpler. TBATE doesn't exactly say in detail how other world reincarnation works, and I'd also have to combine that with the Silver Sea. If Agrona knew about other worlds, that would mean TBATE is in an evolved Silver Bubble, not on the zero(th) layer. Combine that with the Militia world being in the zero(th) layer, and that's a nightmare I don't want to explain; (2) Combining their mechanics is quite easy. I could just say Thunder God's Wrath is an imitation of the original Jirasd. Also in my previous/first fanfic (also on webnovel), I did explain how both worlds' mechanics could be combined pretty easily; (3) If it was another world, that would mean Agrona purposely tampered with Anos' reincarnation and made him reincarnate in Dicathen. I think the only reason why he would even bother with the Legacy is because it was powerful but still something he could control, Anos on the hand... Well, it won't take a genius to take a guess; (4) And finally, this is still a FanFic. Somewhere I can write whatever I want and call it canon in my universe. I try to have fun in making these, and trying too hard to make it make sense would take the fun out of it. Sorry for the long post

For your first suggestion, I won't say much but I'll be putting some foreshadowing to hint at the overarching plot as to why that won't work. As for your second, this is my horrid attempt at writing some romance. I don't know if I'll be able to write some cute romance but I'll try (don't judge me).

I don't know what you mean by "helpers", but I already prepared a proper backstory for what happened. I obviously won't tell you because of spoilers but just look forward to it.

That was removed since that was a mistake