My spelling errors 😭 sincerely sorry, I tend to forget to review my work before submitting
Este libro ha sido eliminado.
I love, love, LOVE how the first three chapters went. This book isnsimilar tonsome comics thus, die to lack of imagery, the author does and EXCEPTIONAL job at description. I really enjoyed reading the first three chapter with the pinch of hunor the author added in. Definitely recommend!! Excited to see what else the author has in store for us readers! Cheering you on from this side of the screen! 🥳👏👏
Este libro ha sido eliminado.
LOVE IT! Before I say anything I’m just going to give the author a round of applause! Personally the grammar is perf making everything easy to both read and understand. I love the details too. would DEFINITELY recommend to anyone. Hopefully this wins WSA awards! Author, you have my support (^_−)−☆
Este libro ha sido eliminado.
There are quite a bit of repetition and run on sentences. I think there could be more of a hook to pull me into the story. Overall this is a really good story. Expecting this story to become a hit soon! Keep going, you got this <3!
Thank you!
I feel like there could be a little more background on the kingdom that she is living in. For example, where and when (like what century) this is all taking place in, because while you can guess it is probably in medieval, but The author could build more on it. I also think that there were some grammar issues (not major so just mentioning it). Overall it has a really good plot though and is definitely going to be a recommendation to new readers.
Thank you so much <3
Updated ^^ Thanks for the advice!
-
original Hider
After an ... incident with her family, Orphelia Ricco goes into hiding with her best friend from her family's mafia, Francesca Judar, Frankie for short. After the incident, the Della Ventura family, a family friend, comes into power as Don of the Italian Mafia. When word that the youngest child of the Ricco family is still alive, it's a race between the Italian and Russian mafia as to who can find the clueless friends first. When Adriano and Orphelia's paths cross, what will happen? Will Lia give into her feelings and return to the underworld or will she fight for freedom and continue to try to live a life as a normal teen? Cover pic from Taylor Rankine, @Taylor from Pinterest6 Chs 4 Colecciones
Haha, it’s a teaser 🤷♀️
Hider
Teen · bab027