Scarlett_Jane

I'm sorry I don't find this plausible. What about the detectives that were assigned the case? Were they bribed too? You would have had to stage a crime scene. Show injuries. The black blood would be a red herring for any detective. Respectfully I think I will stop here. I wish you luck in the future

Okay.. So many things... First off, the doctor who would have done the autopsy would have been a government worker since this was a homicide and there definitely would have been an autopsy. Your GP can only sign a death certificate if you died of natural causes or in a hospital. Secondly, didn't they say there was a body? So he wasn't cremated and you could still do an autopsy now to determine cause of death. Testimony alone from an eye witness in this case is not thorough. It's sloppy and it's not how things are done. Finally, most people don't have a funeral so quickly. How long after he died is this? That's just the obvious things to me. The plot doesn't hold water.

I come bearing new issues...the reason she has to get married is flimsy. Her grandfather is alive and can at this point easily fix the will so that she has more time to find a husband. Unless what you meant was she is inheriting her belated mother's property or whatever through this marriage. If so, this is unclear. I also don't get why the groom agrees. If he wants someone for his child, he can get a nanny. It's not a good enough reason to marry if he's wealthy himself and has no interest in her inheritance. Just saying. Doesn't add up

Here's my big question. If grandpa is so attached to his granddaughter, why did she have to get married by today? Just curious.

No no, I'm very straight forward. I say what I like and what not. Sometimes people get upset so I just stop there, because it's not my intent to upset anyone. I don't think you did a bad job. Just needs some tweaks. I wouldn't have commented at all if I wasn't interested. If you don't mind, I'll keep going then😅

Apologies if you found that harsh. Maybe I will just pass. Sorry I wasn't able to review. Wishing you much success 💕

Your synopsis is super confusing. You have random people talking that don't really give up any necessary information in the first chapter instead of introducing your main characters well and I was just thinking easy on the exclamation marks. Nevertheless, I've yet to read a contract marriage book... So I will give it a shot. Onward

As my boyfriend tends to say, where is my chapter? Waiting to see what happens next... I think keep the mystery going for why Kian won't just fire Caitlyn. Keep it from Farrah's pov.