Che3na

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I like to read books and I write sometimes when I feel like it.

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5 months ago
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This piece of the draft takes me out of the story quite, but it also reminds me of a post on r/writing on Reddit on things people personally avoid when writing. On that post, the top comments talk about this mirror trope, where one person says that people don't usually give detailed descriptions of their appearance because the character has no reason to do this; it is just a normal day for them. So, maybe write a bit more beforehand to add a reason for the character to list their appearance, or just use another method to visualize the character for the reader. Honestly, I think the whole post and community are good to read to try to improve your drafts, so I encourage you to look up u/Striking-Meal-5257 (the OP of the post) and r/writing.

I glanced in the mirror, seeing a chubby, frail boy with dark circles under his eyes staring back at me. My messy brown hair and round face made me look even older than my eighteen years.

I'm a Pornstar thanks to my System [Smut/Hentai]

I'm a Pornstar thanks to my System [Smut/Hentai]

Anime & Comics · Jin_4671

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1 years ago
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+1

3.- Fairy Tail "Daughter of the Eclipse" A girl is left for dead, the main line of the royal family seemingly eliminated. A mission is submitted to a rising guild nearby as the rumors of a beast that uses magic that can erase all magic around it. Said monster is apparently really small and really strong.

A Hero by the Name of Silk

A Hero by the Name of Silk

Movies · Lightblade23

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Che3na
1 years ago
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+1

1.- Star Wars "Pink Spear". A person reincarnates as a young Mandalorian girl who is sold as a slave to a blaster vendor on the planet of Mandalore. After escaping when a gift came from the world itself, her spear leads the charge to the rise of Mandalorians as a superpower against the galaxy.

A Hero by the Name of Silk

A Hero by the Name of Silk

Movies · Lightblade23

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Che3na
1 years ago
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This nice, but this needs grammarly or something like that cause this grammar is kinda weird

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1 years ago
Replied to Micheal_Obah

Hentai-foundry

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