Help me in THE future.
"It's fine. You can fight me however you want. Even if you seriously injure me, I won't blame you. Moreover, I'll be grateful to you. After all, I want real fighting experience which will help me in future." He said resolutely with determination in his eyes.
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Fantasy · Blizzard54k
Your welcome. I'm sorry to say that I won't be finishing since it seems that web novel got rid of the fast pass system, so I won't be reading past the last unlocked chapter. I not going to say this is the best thing I ever read but considering everything this is pretty good and you should feel proud of it.
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You mean no ONE can object to their relationship. (don't sweat it,if it makes you feel better, out of the few stories I have read on here from first time authors, your is pretty light on spelling and/or grammatical errors.)
Lilly froze for a second. She vaguely understood his meaning. If she wanted to marry him, she needed enough strength so that no can object to their relationship. She then nodded toward him.
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Fantasy · Blizzard54k
1. take out the first you in "Hehe, how can I believe you what you say?" 2. It should be "She sent HER mana inside his body", not "She sent HIS mana inside his body".
"Hehe, how can I believe you what you say? Let me check for myself." Madam Mari walked toward him and touched him on the shoulder as she sent his mana inside his body. After taking a look, she was astounded.
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Fantasy · Blizzard54k
Did you mean it to read, "as YOU want"?
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Fantasy · Blizzard54k
"Eva smiled at HER seductively"... cough, him, cough.
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Fantasy · Blizzard54k
He has breasts?
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Fantasy · Blizzard54k
Minor Nitpick but how else are you going to learn right, anyway the way you phrased it (His smile widened and kissed me again)makes it sounds like his smile is what kissed her this and the last tie and not him, so I would add the word he after the and so it reads, "his smile widened and HE kissed me again".
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Fantasy · Blizzard54k
What she what do for him...
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Fantasy · Blizzard54k
Agian, in THE future.
That's why he decided to be serious about it, and his resolution became even stronger after seeing Lilly working so hard for his sake. He didn't want something to happen to her in future because he was weak.
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