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Hall Of Fame System
Sports · Bimbroz
I really don't know if I should laugh or cry. You communicate with a unique method, hahaha. But back to your review. It really hit and I had a lot to fix. The first, MC is a teenager. His mind is not yet too stable for a wise human figure. In the real world, sometimes someone has to be slapped with a reality that must be considered to rise from adversity. It's still early stages. There will come a time when Kein will become a strong man and take criticism as proof that he is really stupid and must be corrected immediately. It is for this that the system comes and helps to cope with the problem endlessly. Teachers and friends play an important role, but they can't be relied upon all the time. Damian as his roommate? Yes, they become like one and help each other. But the system exists to improve his attributes specifically even though he remains in contact with colleagues or teachers. That's my answer. Express all your complaints one by one if your goal is to improve the quality of this novel. Thanks so much, mate!
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Hall Of Fame System
Sports · Bimbroz
Kein did not understand the definition of "death" in this sentence. The system offers a fairly instant way to become an above-average professional athlete. If he refuses, then he is "death". That is, he will get nothing even if he struggles. Kein has the skills but it's not enough to be the best. So the system says Kein will 'die' because the system knows what is best for him. And rejection in any form will derail his career as a professional athlete. Maybe you forgot that the main theme of this novel is slice of life. Then, real death might not exist. I hope this answers your disappointment. I'm very grateful for your criticism.[img=recommend]
[If you choose 'No', then the only way is for you to fight hard to eliminate this 'system' from your body. Basically, this 'system' was born because of your need and determination to become a professional athlete. If the first option is not possible, there is still another option. The other option is for you to die and the system will stop working on your body].
Hall Of Fame System
Sports · Bimbroz
Author here![img=proud][img=proud] I really can't believe the time has come to write a novel, with a 'system' and 'slice of life' theme. This is the first time I've ventured into a system novel, as I had no confidence in my abilities before. I hope you will enjoy this novel and don't hesitate to give me any suggestions or criticism if necessary. I would really appreciate your judgement. Thanks and Enjoy it! [img=recommend][img=recommend]
Author Review Here! Decided to write a fantasy novel about Gods and Demons. It tells the story of a Goddess who gets lost in a forest to seek help in seizing the throne of the Gods from the Demon King. There she meets a former soldier, Xavier, forcing him to become her aide and bring down the Demon King's dynasty in Heaven. I believe it will be very complicated but fun for me. 😀
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original Hall Of Fame System
The Hall Of Fame, also known as the HOF, is a title given to athletes who have had a major impact or influence on a sport in a particular era. Kein Jr, or more commonly known as Nicolas Kein, has the desire to follow in the footsteps of his father, Anthony Kein, as an athlete to hold the title. It's just that there was a slight difference when Nicolas Kein chose to become a professional basketball player. That did not make his father, a former footballer, angry or force his son to continue on his path. Nicolas Kein went his own way after witnessing the glamour of basketball. He idolised the greatest three-point shooter in history, Stephen Curry. Nicolas Kein's determination and desire was further fueled when his family died in a plane crash while visiting his home country. Much of his father's legacy has been instrumental in his life as an athlete. But his journey has been filled with obstacles that he never expected during his basketball career, in order to earn a Hall Of Fame title like his father. *** The knee injury meant that Kein had no chance of playing in the Finals event that would have seen his team fly to America for the world competition. As a result, frustration shattered his mind and mentality and after his team's losing match, Kein received news from the national hospital that his family had an accident and died. Kein was increasingly helpless in the face of the harsh realities of his life. Losing the match in the final could be reclaimed another time, but what about the lives of their family? As time passed, he realised that he had found a capsule on the table in his room and ate it without regard for his health. Unexpectedly, the capsule flowed into his body and brought up a screen with his identity. ‘What is this? Why is a hologram with my identity appearing in front of my eyes?’ That morning was Nicolas Kein's first foray into the Hall Of Fame as a power-obsessed athlete. Perseverance, rage, and revenge will be guided by the ‘System’ of the mysterious capsule.107 Chs 365 Colecciones
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Athlete vs Academician: After Dating
5
Arya menyatakan perasaannya pada Amelia. Dan mereka resmi berpacaran setelah menyimpan perasaan satu sama lain. Dimulailah kisah percintaan Arya dan Amelia penuh lika-liku ketika mereka fokus pada cita-cita dan ambisi. ***** Setelah berpisah selama 10 tahun, Arya dan Amelia kembali bertemu kembali di salah satu universitas di kota mereka. Arya yang sudah menyimpan perasaan selama bertahun-tahun, kini akhirnya terbalaskan dan sangat senang perjuangannya selama ini membuahkan hasil yang manis. Namun mereka punya impian masing-masing sehingga mereka terpaksa berpisah dalam waktu yang cukup lama meskipun mereka baru mulai pacaran. Kondisi seperti ini benar-benar menguji cinta mereka yang terbentuk baru-baru ini. Akankah salah satu dari mereka tidak tahan dengan perjalanan cinta seperti ini?54 Chs 24 Colecciones
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Helper Of The Goddess
The Demon Lord and the Demon army captured the kingdom, throne, and house of the Gods. The Gods were cast out of Heaven and forced into the world they created to ask humans for help. Their efforts did not go smoothly after requests and pleas were rejected by their subjects because none of them was unaware of the Demon Lord's cruelty. It took them more than 500 years to persuade each generation and it always ended the same. When their faces began to appear desperate, one of the goddesses, Cytherea, met a single man named Xavier. He is a former soldier who has endured many battles and shed blood before settling in a remote village. Their encounter in the forest becomes a miracle for Cytherea and forces Xavier to help the Gods regain their throne. He also offers a quite tempting reward by making Xavier the Leader of the Gods. NOTE : Temporarily updated 3 chapters every week40 Chs 9 Colecciones
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Calamity Order
The Gods descended from the highest heaven. Subdue the creatures of the earth and destroy them. It happened in an unknown year. The earth creatures were razed underground and brutally uprooted their lives. Those who obey and always worship god will be forgiven, even having a worthy place in a paradise that cannot be occupied for those who refuse to submit. A few years later people were born with different thoughts. Most of them agree with the deeds of the gods and a small part whispers behind the followers of the gods and berates their deeds. Mavcazan, a young teenager from a remote village has always yearned for himself to become king and lead the kingdom where he came from. And assumed all of that would go smoothly if he was really serious. But the more he traveled and knew the great facts about the past world, his thinking changed a little and dug deeper into the destruction hundreds or thousands of years ago.85 Chs 13 Colecciones
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Athlete vs Academician
5 Completado
Arya Chayton, seorang remaja yang sangat menyukai olahraga. Cintanya pada olahraga tak setengah hati. Hampir semua permainan olahraga ia kuasai. Arya terkenal cukup nakal di sekolahnya karena sering bolos pelajaran. Ketika mengikuti pelajaran sekalipun, ia lebih memilih tidur atau berbicara dengan temannya sendiri. Namun saat mengikuti ekstrakulikuler, justru ia paling semangat. Sebaliknya, Arya memiliki teman bernama Amelia Regna. Ia gadis seumuran dengan Arya, dan mereka berteman akrab sejak kecil. Amelia sangat suka belajar dan sering mendapat nilai sempurna di semua mata pelajaran. Tak ada pelajaran yang ia benci, kecuali olahraga. Ia selalu mendapat nilai merah ketika menerima hasil ujian olahraga. Suatu ketika orang tua Amelia mendapat kesempatan untuk bekerja di Denmark. Mau tak mau mereka harus pindah rumah dan berganti kewarganegaraan. Arya terus menunggu hingga bertahun-tahun, mengharap kembalinya Amelia. Sejak itu, rasa cinta Arya pada Amelia mulai tumbuh hingga akhirnya mereka bertemu kembali di universitas yang sama.400 Chs 343 Colecciones
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Petualangan Mavcazan
4.93
------------------------------------------------------------------------ ----------------------------------------------------------------------- Jangan lupa mampir ke novel terbaruku [Athlete vs Academician] ------------------------------------------------------------------------ ------------------------------------------------------------------------ Bruno Mavcazan merupakan anak desa yang terlahir menjadi penyihir. Tetapi Bruno memiliki suatu kelemahan yang tidak ingin dia sebarkan selain orang terdekatnya. David, guru yang mengajarkan Bruno tentang sihir di kampung halamannya, memberitahu jika Asrama Sihir di ibu kota sedang mencari anak muda yang berbakat menggunakan sihir. Bruno dan kedua temannya, Max dan Arstya, mendaftarkan diri mereka di ujian masuk Asrama Sihir Green Vallen. Bangga terlahir sebagai penyihir, Bruno ingin menjadi Penyihir kuat yang bebas berkelana. Keinginannya menjadi Penyihir terkuat hanyalah sebatas dirinya ingin dipandang oleh dunia dan bebas berpetualang kemana pun. Di samping dia berpetualang untuk mencari kekuatan, Bruno juga mengalami masa-masa yang sulit untuk mencapai semua itu. Akankah Bruno berhasil mencapai semua tujuannya?131 Chs 129 Colecciones
Thank you for your advice. To be honest, when I started writing this novel, I also learned this language consistently. I realized how bad my experience in the world of novel. But until now, I still learn and read novels by other authors to improve my ability to understand this language. I really appreciate any positive feedback from anyone.
Hall Of Fame System
Sports · Bimbroz