Quietkaren

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Eternal sadness has befallen me due to your action with this chapter author.

ch 17 Chapter 17-The Lives at Stake!

The Burnt Prince-GOT SI

Book&Literature · Drkest

Quietkaren

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You have to be trying to end up malnourished in the US the only people that are malnourished are drug adicts and abused children there are so many ways to obtain food very easily and even free if you get food stamps which is unbelievably easy to do.

So this is also why he was malnourished.

Marvel: Killing Makes You Stronger

Movies · Bleam

Quietkaren

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Short*

ch 48 Chapter 48

Percy Jackson: Zeus's Bastard Child

Book&Literature · Marcus_Adderley

Quietkaren

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Your inability to not have a cliff hanger is your largest shirt coming as a writer your story has little to no flow at all because you end every chapter at the climax

ch 48 Chapter 48

Percy Jackson: Zeus's Bastard Child

Book&Literature · Marcus_Adderley

Quietkaren

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More clean and fluid lore here than on actual destiny phenomenal writing

ch 16 Battle III

Destiny: Hive Rising

Video Games · Blankkk_

Quietkaren

10mth

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I love the story but honestly the shortness and the timing of the cliffhangers kill the flow of the story. This is like the third time you have ended the chapter not only in the middle of a fight but at the climax.

ch 21 Chapter 21

Percy Jackson: Zeus's Bastard Child

Book&Literature · Marcus_Adderley

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The Burnt Prince-GOT SI

Marvel: Killing Makes You Stronger

Percy Jackson: Zeus's Bastard Child

Percy Jackson: Zeus's Bastard Child

Destiny: Hive Rising

Percy Jackson: Zeus's Bastard Child