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A great story. An interesting start and world design. It’s like a classic novel. Classic but exciting. You know the feeling of starting a fantasy novel with dungeons and such? Yep, basically a feeling like that. There were a few grammar mistakes such as not using capital letters to start a sentence but they are few that you would basically ignore them. What I have to say for this novel is that it’s good, and definitely recommend.

Good book. The grammar is amazing and the flow of the story is smooth. The world background is described good and except that the updates were a little unstable, the story was generally good. Recommend it to other people

Good novel. Don't have much to say, so, for the character fill .......................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................... like the novel want more chaps

An excellent story. Want more....... got me hooked up and greatly recommend it. the update stability and thre character design are all just good just that there was some problems in the word of choice, the story was very good

So this is quite a good novel except that there were some mistakes. 1. In some chapters, there are small mistakes that disturb the readers but its not much of a problem as it don’t affect the quality by much. 2. The chapters seem to be too orderly, as if its stating facts and not writing a story. It feels rough. Making how the characters feel and making it more descriptive would be good. 3. The chapters are too long, it would be better if they are divided into two or three parts. This could also make writing the story better as if you’re not finding any ideas for it, you could do as [2] said and make the reading time more enjoyable. 4. Sometimes the question marks and such are excessive. They make the character look very surprised and since they are often it disturbs the readers, making the reader not concentrate on the story. Just using it once would be alright. 5. The story characters seems to be too simple and straightforward. Adding in more emotions and making them complex like a human being would be alright.