GrimMarim

GrimMarim

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2019-08-07 Se unió United States
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GrimMarim
GrimMarim
4 months ago
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What terrible english. I'm guessing the rest of the novel will be written in a similar quality. The concept for the story is good, but I'm going to have to drop this novel before I get an aneurysm.

After spending another morning happily like this, Brian came to the cafeteria and looked at the burgers and sandwiches in the window with a very helpless expression. He could feel his stomach protesting, but skipping lunch would be harmful to the body. No, I have no choice but to go back and turn on a small stove at night.

Surviving The Last Of Us World

Surviving The Last Of Us World

Video Games · kibishi718

GrimMarim
GrimMarim
4 months ago
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Though, in their case, they would probably see the Earth, the sun, or the moon… which was not my case. I was in an empty void that seemed to be in the middle of space, with nothing but small stars around me.

Sussy Baka in MHA

Sussy Baka in MHA

Anime & Comics · The_Synonym

GrimMarim
GrimMarim
4 months ago
Commented

Already off to a bad start.

GrimMarim
GrimMarim
4 months ago
Commented

Just came by to say the cover art is cringe. Might read later.

GrimMarim
GrimMarim
5 months ago
Commented

Dont use - . Use " for speech.

Este libro ha sido eliminado.
GrimMarim
GrimMarim
6 months ago
Commented

It went up 🤨

Katsuki Bakugou; Motherfucker: -200 affection

MHA: Jaeger

MHA: Jaeger

Anime & Comics · B00BIES_for_life

GrimMarim
GrimMarim
6 months ago
Commented

Fantastic. Make him transform into an elf instead of a human though. Humans are lame.

GrimMarim
GrimMarim
6 months ago
Commented

So when does he turn into an elf? Humans are lame.

GrimMarim
GrimMarim
6 months ago
Commented

+1 on keeping just one name (Lacht). You also need to edit your chapters before posting. There are quite a few spelling mistakes and odd choice of words.

GrimMarim
GrimMarim
7 months ago
Commented

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