Thanks for the review
I rate my novel low because I know for myself I need a lot of improvements regarding the structure of the sentences. But like that being said I want you guys to support it thanks a lot!
What can I expect from one of the most awsome writers I know. Keep up I want more chapters its thrilling at the same time I can learn new words in this novel.
thanks for pointing those errors
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Strike Force: Legacy
Games · ArkAnghel
I like how you comment on every chapter I have
Have you ever ride a rollercoaster where it starts slow at the beginning then it started to speed up? in this book you are accelerated immediately. The story threw you directly in there. There are still minor errors but those things are easily fixable nice job You got hooked by the story and I am pretty sure you will stay reading it. I know, because it happens to me. I am a picky reader. I usually have to reread early chapters a few times before I start binge-reading it.
you can cut this to many sentences to avoid block of words. but the creation of sentences is good.
As he slowly trod down the stairs he started to introduce himself 'Hey my name is Uteki Smith sometimes people tease me at school because of my name but it's a traditional fishman name so I rep it with pride by the way I'm a Fishman you see in a world like mine Fishman are kinda trash no cap it's not like we get beaten and enslaved of course not but there is a certain element of bias against us especially from the stronger races you see there are dozens of different races in my world all with different inherent abilities and affinities but us fishmen well you see our only abilities are to breathe underwater and a small control over water, for example, making big bubbles out of saliva that sort of thing also we can exert a weak poison that would at best make someone feel a bit drowsy but that's a last resort sort of thing for me because well I dont know my mum says it because I don't use it a lot and I have to get used to it but whenever I use it I pretty much K.O myself so there's no point plus we don't have that much talent in well ... anything anyways i live in the kingdom of Legturia there is four kingdoms legturia is home to the the twenty districts mydream is to be the strongest from district twenty.
The Path Of A Fishman
Fantasy · Kneesdeep24
Have you ever ride a rollercoaster where it starts slow at the beginning then it started to speed up? Well, in this book you are accelerated immediately. The story threw you directly in there. You are hooked by the story and I am pretty sure you will stay reading it. I know, because it happens to me. I am a picky reader. I usually have to reread early chapters a few times before I start binge-reading it.
tell me if you reached the end of the chapter and then I release the last batch of chapter stocks
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original Inverted Crown
A Genius Tactician, a fearful opponent. That is what his peers called him in the Royal Lion Military Academy. But what is the real identity of this man? The only information known to him was a peasant that rose through the ranks and got vouched for an unknown reason. Unravel the truth and lies hidden between the faces of darkness. The Inverted Crown. The crown that symbolizes the head of state that became inverted symbolizes the reveal of the truth.19 Chs 50 Colecciones
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Strike Force: Legacy
4.91
[Initaiting Download Progress] [Welcome to Level up System Gallacia] [You have gained a Level] A normal gamer, side kick of side kicks. Yeong Jin a normal student born in a middle class family with great understanding of games. But with certain luck he is given the Level Up in the Real world. But can he maintain the both Quests in real Life and Inside of the rising VRMMORPG GAME? Galaxy, Exploration with virtual in depth gaming meta. That is Star Legacy. It is named Legacy because of the games mechanism. Making it hard for a players to level up and reach the top rankings. But their legacy will remain, that is how Star Legacy came to the brilliant mind of the vice president of the Galaxy International Corporation. But as they enter the gaming industry, the Esports also came rise with many leagues. And the vice president of the Galaxy International Corporation. Has the ambition to attain the top 1 Esports title for Star Legacy.56 Chs 264 Colecciones
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Blood Dragon Khan
4.78
It was blood for blood. That is the rule of the golden throne. Kingdoms, tribes, and sects fought for it but only one will remain and sit on it. The throne of gold and power that is what they describe it. Who ever sit on the throne always seek to conquer the lands and let the enemies of the throne kneel and bow done rejoicing to those who sit on the golden throne. But it was no longer subject to return to the hands of mortals. Because the unstoppable force of the 9 Heavenly dragons took the power and the glory of it. The so-called guardians of the skies and the heavens, but like all those who maintain peace, there is always chaos among peace, and so the battle of the Ruling Dragons started. They named the first dragon after the shining brilliance of light that came when it fly down from the heavens. They called it “Eternal Dragon”. Followed by its brother, the second dragon, who bites on the handle of the throne and is wise and intelligent, the “Enlightened Dragon”. From the left side of the throne, the third brother grips on the handle and roar loudly and its claws embedded itself on the golden throne and named the “Ferocious Dragon”. Then followed by the fourth brother that slithers on the back of the golden throne known for its sweetness and gentleness, the “Blossom Dragon”. Then the fifth dragon known for its love for money and gold, the “Fortune Dragon”. That ended the 5 heavenly Ruling Dragons, but it did not end there. As there are still the four Dragons who did not get near the Golden throne because of their destructive power. Known as the 4 Demonic Dragons of Asura. First was the 6th brother known for mercilessly exterminating innocents and giving the art of war to the mortals. And widely known as the “Dreaded Dragon”. The 7th brother who sided with the Dreaded Dragon, known for liking the color of blood and created the river of blood of Asura the “Blood Dragon” and the 8th brother known for the thinking of the dark arts and created the dark demonic styles of fighting. The only rival of the Eternal Dragon, the “Ravenous Dragon” and the last of the 9 Heavenly Dragons that sided with that Dreaded Dragon and breaking the stalemate among the heavenly dragons for good, the “Thunder Dragon”.34 Chs 108 Colecciones
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All Time Marksman
4.78
Year Date March 30, 2030 On a seemingly normal day across all countries on the face of the earth. A sudden eruption of the crust and a sudden appearance of void rifts-like holes appeared. It was the start of ULTIMA CHANGE, soon monsters arise from those rifts. And it was soon followed by bloodshed. In nearly 5 months 1 hundred million have already perished from the monsters. And with that, countries all over the world have formed their Safe Zones. Building walls that might secure them from monsters. And with the appearance of monsters also the appearance of people with strange powers and abilities.262 Chs 8.5k Colecciones
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Code Name Flash Point
VOTE FOR MY NOVEL TO WIN WPC #174 "No Scope, No Problem let's make it happen" The primary motto of the sniper Division that I have been assigned to. We are one of the special forces of the Republic of Philippines. One of the top 3 most deadliest combat unit on the ground. Facing challenges was the first motto when I entered the Military. the only thing I need now is for myself to know that I can do this. Disclaimer: Any names that have been created in this novel are entirely fictional and never affilaited in the real life. any organizations and groups are not affilaited with the novel .20 Chs 119 Colecciones
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The Strategist That Succeed With Gallant Power
4.61
The child prodigy who lost his parents due to a catastrophic event. Soon follows his journey to reclaim the honor that was taken away from him. And as he travels throughout the continent, he may unravel the truth and lies hidden between the faces of darkness. Artirian Reginald Cartelan. "I who prevail, as I hold my destiny"230 Chs 1.9k Colecciones
The entire Empire is currently in dissaray a small revolution is brewing near and commanders that are loyal to the previous emperor.
The voice and tone of the Aide-de-camp changed when he talked to the 2nd Division Commander. The 2nd Division commander has only 2 reply options, agreeing to the orders that will give him recognition. And the other one which is going to make him a traitor.
Inverted Crown
Fantasy · ArkAnghel