the pacing of your story seems rushed, at first glance. however once we adapt we realize that you have done very well in picking the details that need to be explained and just touching those that don't and are the to make the world and story 3d.
overall opportunities to grow are all ways present but otherwise good work so far keep it up[img=recommend]
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the pacing of your story seems rushed, at first glance. however once we adapt we realize that you have done very well in picking the details that need to be explained and just touching those that don't and are the to make the world and story 3d. overall opportunities to grow are all ways present but otherwise good work so far keep it up[img=recommend]
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