Btw before anyone says anything, proof. “I read a book is correct. Red is a color and should not be used in place of read. Red and read are similar sounding words. Such words are called homonyms.”
Yuto thought that it would be easy like those fanfic and novels he red.But reality was cruel as he was already tired and had not even covered 10 percent of the Village.He stopped as he was phanting while sitting on a nearby bench.As he was getting his breathing under control,he looked at the people who were coming and going as the village was bustling. "Seeing this in real life is more awesome." Yuto muttered before something caught his eye.It was a sign with 'playground' written on it.
Naruto: Eye System(Rewrite)
Anime & Comics · SarusakkuKM17
Btw red is a color. Read is about reading things.
Yuto thought that it would be easy like those fanfic and novels he red.But reality was cruel as he was already tired and had not even covered 10 percent of the Village.He stopped as he was phanting while sitting on a nearby bench.As he was getting his breathing under control,he looked at the people who were coming and going as the village was bustling. "Seeing this in real life is more awesome." Yuto muttered before something caught his eye.It was a sign with 'playground' written on it.
Naruto: Eye System(Rewrite)
Anime & Comics · SarusakkuKM17
I’d separate them with spaces as the words are pushed together it gets confusing at times when reading, and kinda annoying.
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The Starship Shinobi
Anime & Comics · AbiNovel
Which* btw. Also loving story btw. Amazing idea. Keep up good work.
I shout at him since he is making too much noise: "Muwi! Give me the stone blocks!" My voice reaches him and he stops after breaking the last block, wich was of coal.
Minecraft: Eclipse
Video Games · Concept_Author
My main issue is simply too much or too many random chapters mixed in that basically interrupt the story, and isn’t the story. While normally I’d not make comments, nor would I make a review, but I wanted to say, mostly to the author of this book then to others. This book is good. Has high chance to make it big, but there’s spelling issues that make it a bit annoying at times but that’s not super big issue per say, but the fact that you go and make an entire chapter about asking why your not getting power stones, is something that kinda makes people feel demotivated to read the book. Then adding more chapters, honestly I normally don’t say much. Normally limit my comments…but I don’t like when I’m in middle of reading a book then have a random note talking about something pop up. I wouldn’t mind if it was temporarily there, before basically archived or deleted, but…it’s annoying to look at a book with over 20 chapters but having only 17 or 29 with only 26. Get interrupted even when reading. (I do have a hard time putting words out properly but yeah). Otherwise, it’s a good book, with a lot of potential, and I do hope it continues and gets better. Hopefully you can even fix the spelling mistakes too so that in future you don’t have them or don’t have them as much. Like every chapter has one maybe two. Not big deal tho nor big issue but still. Either way, good job so far, and hoping for the best, and keep up the good work!
I do recommend after a bit of time, at least move this later to the Auxiliary Chapters area. Some people may get annoyed to have this interrupt there reading. (Obviously not all but still). But either way, as said in another comment before, amazing work so far. You may have some things here and there, but better then some of the things I’ve read. And I do recommend slowing it just a tad. As the book does seem a bit…fast, so to say. It’s not bad per say, but it may make it hard for you in future to write more on it, or make some people get annoyed (and I mean some not all). Either way amazing work and keep up the good work.
Saying * (last one for now. I doubt I’ll do more later. Keep up good work anyways! It’s very good. Especially with the ones I seem to find here on Webnovel nowadays. (Hard sometimes to find new books that are good, that I enjoy, and isn’t just very annoying and troublesome to read) so yeah! Keep up good work.)
And every time someone mentioned it in chat, he'd brush it off with nervous laughter sating how he may be dumb but he's not gonna buy into this.
MHA: Streamer System ,Spreading Multiversal Brain Rot !
Anime & Comics · Vidhan_Bhardwaj
Like* (also if you question why I’m doing this, call it boredom. Even if temporarily. Otherwise amazing so far, love it. Tho adhd makes me a tad annoyed at slight misspelling mistakes. Sorry if this gets annoying.)
"Dude, this is freaky, stop ignoring it loke the stupid Horror movie actors!"
MHA: Streamer System ,Spreading Multiversal Brain Rot !
Anime & Comics · Vidhan_Bhardwaj
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After a few minutes of streaming and recording moments feom it with the added paranormal activity of the face, David decided to take the next step.
MHA: Streamer System ,Spreading Multiversal Brain Rot !
Anime & Comics · Vidhan_Bhardwaj
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original Pryo Deadpool
Follow Jake Phero (Pharaoh) as he ventures into Marvel Cinematic Universe, (with some added stuff). Watch as he makes himself a legend. Watch as he interacts with your favorite hero’s and villains. And maybe even do some crazy stuff. Note:I’m more of a beginner so don’t be surprised if there’s mistakes, and usually I’ve had a lot to do before so I’ve ended up having to drop my previous ones. Tho I hope to at least make something good before I end up having to drop if I do. And hopefully I don’t have to or something. Some side things, plan is to have a playful and chaotic protagonist, that just fools around but also has up and downs. Adding on the fact I plan to give him Deadpool’s immortality but with some alterations. And pyromancy. And what i like to call a information system rather then well those typical ones. I appreciate feedback. And I would prefer those that don’t show hatred to come. Cause honestly they are jerks. But hope you enjoy everyone and all. And have a amazing day! Thx for reading!1 Chs 7 Colecciones
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Max Hunter's Adventures
Max Hunter, a 16 years old High School Student in 11th grade, reincarnate with his memories, a system, and more...4 Chs 2 Colecciones
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The Horizon: The New World
It's just simple but something it may be long it my be short but it's a work-as-planing type of thing. Not taking from anything but my mind and I am work on it as a free time-bored thing then a full on one...it my days weeks or months before I get one out and maybe even year's but I will type and type till I think it's ready but I am open to help and etc. and all in the comments maybe even take some ideas you guys give. Magic, swords, and etc. with a or many system's... ...Thanks alot and enjoy the ride with me as I write and you read and comment and I work it out....5 Chs 0 Colecciones
You have few spelling mistakes…
They could barely control their laughter as they knew it was Ezra the head-teacher was talking about.
Monster Symbiosis With Fusion System
Action · Typhlix