none of the 2 options
work on grammar pls
+1
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Anime & Comics · HIKARU_GENJI
the story so far is good you just need to get the pronouns correct
+1
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Anime & Comics · UrizenVergil
F/F + 1
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Anime & Comics · Noboru_senpai72
not cool
if you're gonna write an English story the n do that don't mix 2 languages it's a headache to read ..,......................................
you need to keep your timeline straight in the last chapter you wrote weeks of using the branch but in this one you write 1 week
Naruto: The Swordmaster's Path
Anime & Comics · kuskus